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by pseud
Wed Apr 07, 2010 7:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Translation
Topic: Goethe: Wanderer's Evening Song
Replies: 7
Views: 4115

Re: Goethe: Wanderer's Evening Song

I'm impressed that you kept the rhyme so well. It reminds me of Longfellow's more "standard"/"famous" version: O'er all the hill-tops Is quiet now, In all the tree-tops Hearest thou Hardly a breath; The birds are asleep in the trees: Wait; soon like these Thou too shalt rest. I think yours is superi...
by pseud
Tue Apr 28, 2009 8:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Translation
Topic: Eine Welke by Rilke
Replies: 6
Views: 3845

Eine Welke by Rilke

A Withering Light, how after her death she wears the gloves, the cloth. A scent out of her dresser buried that lovely odor, from which she recognized herself. Now she does not ask what she is (: a distant relative) and travels about in thought and worries about the fearful chamber that she conserve...
by pseud
Wed Feb 04, 2009 2:19 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Taste in music
Replies: 15
Views: 1535

Re: Taste in music

Yeah, well, I'm 21. How old are you Raisin? When I was younger, and comparing all the stuff the kids around me were listening to, to stuff like Led Zeppelin, Bob Marley and Pink Floyd, I didn't find much I liked and was embarrassed for most of my friends listening to the top 40 charts. And though I'...
by pseud
Wed Feb 04, 2009 1:22 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A snow fibonacci
Replies: 4
Views: 255

Re: A snow fibonacci

reminds me of the exercise Arco and I had awhile back, trying to write a poem that was exactly 160 characters long (size of your average SMS text message).

Well done.
by pseud
Sat Jan 31, 2009 12:28 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Last Light
Replies: 6
Views: 567

Re: Last Light

This is my favorite 5-10 minutes of the day. Love the Red Sun effect. And yeah, the power lines make it Americana I guess.
by pseud
Wed Jan 28, 2009 8:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Faith
Replies: 8
Views: 420

Re: Faith

Thanks e'eryone. emuse - talk about the content all you want. Totally fine by me. However you choose to criticize is up to you. And I agree that there probably could be slightly "didactic" bits in their, tried to keep those to a minimum, but then we have others here claiming they learned nothing, so...
by pseud
Wed Jan 28, 2009 7:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Inauguration
Replies: 8
Views: 473

Re: Inauguration

Only suggestion, one that you probably anticipate because free verse gets this one alot: I think it could work just as well, if not better, in paragraph form. I can....vaguely....see the connection to Obama. Though Obama, like most other U.S. Presidents, (a) wanted to be leader, and much more signif...
by pseud
Wed Jan 28, 2009 7:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Faith
Replies: 12
Views: 640

Re: Faith

It's a bit enygmatic and perhaps more vague than it has to be, which may explain why there are so many different takes to this poem. And it's hard to know when this should be considered a success and when it should be considered a failure. I read it in terms of acceptance/rejection of organized reli...
by pseud
Wed Jan 28, 2009 6:07 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hi
Replies: 9
Views: 1085

Re: Hi

Welcome.

Are you really an Epicurean?

Caleb
by pseud
Tue Jan 27, 2009 1:56 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Faith
Replies: 12
Views: 640

Re: Faith

emuse wrote:I command you to stop putting your work down.
indeed. I agree. But I'll have to come back later to tell exactly why I think this. There are a few parts I think could be fleshed out and clearer, but I THINK I got it, I like what you're going for.
by pseud
Tue Jan 27, 2009 1:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Faith
Replies: 8
Views: 420

Faith

Faith Faith is being sure of what we hope for lifting our ears to the ceiling, [tab]and our feet for a marathon.[/tab] It is the string strung between stryofoam cups, half-full of scratches. [tab]It is the opium,[/tab] [tab]the oxygen,[/tab] [tab]the voice,[/tab] [tab]the blindfold,[/tab] [tab]the ...
by pseud
Sun Jan 11, 2009 10:33 am
Forum: Barrie
Topic: Favourite Poem by Barrie
Replies: 15
Views: 6969

Re: Favourite Poem by Barrie

Moontarn, Fresh Paint, and Dead Dogs and Damselflies are classics, no question.

Red Lion Inn, Dunchurch, 5 November 1605

Gone

and though I only found this long after it was written surely there is a way to include this?

A Dog's Tale
by pseud
Sun Jan 11, 2009 9:53 am
Forum: Barrie
Topic: Favourite Poem by Barrie
Replies: 15
Views: 6969

Re: Favourite Poem by Barrie

He was the main poster in the Haiku Train, and there were some really good ones. I think it's up to the family though, and it would be good to see what others here think. Here were some of my favorites, though he easily had hundreds in there: From the gravel's crunch, the breaking of a snail's shell...
by pseud
Sun Jan 11, 2009 9:25 am
Forum: Barrie
Topic: VERY SAD NEWS
Replies: 40
Views: 20541

Re: VERY SAD NEWS

can only repeat what others have said, this makes me very sad.

Both of the poems Kim and Camus posted stuck in my mind from the day he posted them.
by pseud
Sat Jan 10, 2009 9:33 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Helvellyn
Replies: 8
Views: 825

Re: Helvellyn

The second one looks like a painting, gorgeous...
by pseud
Tue Dec 30, 2008 7:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Stepshot
Replies: 8
Views: 439

Re: Stepshot

Hello ded/Bren - This is probably one of my favorites of yours. Not everything is spelled out, you give the audience room to draw their own conclusions about who "she" is and what "it" means, and I think it's better for it. I agree with Barrie's idea of shortening the poem further, but I also love s...
by pseud
Tue Dec 30, 2008 9:37 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Smoker Detail
Replies: 5
Views: 846

Smoker Detail

Image

Got bored on the train.
by pseud
Tue Dec 30, 2008 1:39 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: An apparition
Replies: 12
Views: 556

Re: An apparition

Hey David, "in full pomp" - haha, enjoyed this line. "Glittering visitor" is a good line too. Didn't see the "Christmassy" nature of this that Barrie and Oskar apparently did (at least not until I read the explanation--but still, how did they know? Seems like an any-time-of-the-year poem to me?) but...
by pseud
Tue Dec 02, 2008 2:15 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: peers
Replies: 4
Views: 245

Re: peers

There were a few lines I thought were kind of cliche' - I’m going to burn the bridges and then a little farther down - I will heed their advice I will do what they say But the flow and the structure was pretty good, in my opinion. One question - why the question mark after "see the reason?" If you c...
by pseud
Tue Dec 02, 2008 1:26 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tight Lines
Replies: 23
Views: 1012

Re: Tight Lines

Jimmy - seems unanimous - this is a good poem. I think it's good enough to be featured as well. Not much else to say.

Caleb
by pseud
Wed Nov 26, 2008 9:10 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Stuffed
Replies: 7
Views: 370

Re: Stuffed

Hello ray - This is the only thing that made me do a double take: of medieval castles; baroque bedlams just far away enough. How about "Just far enough away?" -- it's just word matter a order of. Interesting read. I'm not sure I understand the poem, I thought it was a comparison of rich or royal cel...
by pseud
Wed Nov 19, 2008 12:04 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Death of an Artroom
Replies: 2
Views: 744

Re: Death of an Artroom

5 and 7

5 - for the reflective quality (a cheap trick perhaps but I'm a sucker).

7 - because the spray can looks like a swan.
by pseud
Wed Nov 19, 2008 12:00 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: inhibition
Replies: 14
Views: 616

Re: inhibition

The pace and structure of this is great og - my only issue is the "a thousand silent deaths" which to me rings a bit OTT and "emo," if you will. This is good man, very good. I like the ending pool/ripple metaphor a lot.

What more is there to say?

Caleb
by pseud
Fri Nov 14, 2008 8:04 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: barack obama
Replies: 27
Views: 3145

Re: barack obama

and apparently hes a bob dylan fan. cant be a bad thing
and, apparently bob dylan's an Obama fan (he endorsed Obama). In a sense, even better.
by pseud
Tue Nov 11, 2008 1:00 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Free Will
Replies: 14
Views: 608

Re: Free Will

what is free will? Much better posed as a question than as an affirmation - I have nothing to add there, great stuff. I get the feeling this poem could be longer if you wanted it to be, but it's good as is. On the other hand, I guess the old adage "don't be fixin what ain't broken" might be the best...