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by pseud
Sat Dec 01, 2012 10:02 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Portrait
Replies: 26
Views: 1174

Re: Portrait

He once kissed her during a thunderstorm,
a segue to goodnight.

Then they slept, as lightning scrutinized
the knot of them.
Wouldn't change a word of this!
by pseud
Tue Nov 27, 2012 11:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Bridges (was Venti et Mare)
Replies: 9
Views: 398

Re: Bridges (was Venti et Mare)

You handle the metre really well in that first seven lines then, boom, we're in Philly, and everything goes to pot. Which may be appropriate. I've never been to Philly. I have. Quite appropriate. But hey, to be fair, I'm originally from Cleveland, not any better there. Ya, Bren, seriously, as a Yan...
by pseud
Tue Nov 27, 2012 2:28 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Smoke
Replies: 8
Views: 362

Re: Smoke

You say 'Perhaps there may be... more?' I notice brian moved this stanza to the end of the poem, but I don't know if it is actually needed. It is a break from the elevated language but it seems to rather bluntly tell us what you've hinted at quite beautifully with the final stanza with the ghost in ...
by pseud
Tue Nov 27, 2012 2:20 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Is poetry for the eye or ear?
Replies: 8
Views: 1687

Is poetry for the eye or ear?

I was asking about technology in another discussion and said (offhand) that poetry is meant to be read aloud. Others (stuartryder) responded that that might not be particularly accurate. So I am coming to the poetry discussion board for answers. It seems like there are a myriad of ways to nuance thi...
by pseud
Tue Nov 27, 2012 2:03 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Technology and Writing: Help or Hindrance?
Replies: 7
Views: 1814

Re: Technology and Writing: Help or Hindrance?

some poetry is written for the page primarily or solely I have been considering this for a few days now, stuart. I think we'd be better off starting a new topic in the Poetry Discussion section (here http://www.poetsgraves.co.uk/forum/viewtopic.php?f=2&t=18003 ), because otherwise I'm going to go o...
by pseud
Mon Nov 26, 2012 10:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A meeting of minds
Replies: 13
Views: 543

Re: An un-meeting of minds online

The "wanker" quality works because that's how just about all of us look on the inter-webs, even those of us who are not so bad in "real life." With the advent of eHarmony and its 7,000 knock offs, this poem hits at something.

In other words, ^what B said.
by pseud
Sat Nov 24, 2012 8:20 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: go for the atlas (now with edit)
Replies: 5
Views: 379

Re: go for the atlas

I feel like this poem is part of something bigger. Great descriptions and similes.
by pseud
Sat Nov 24, 2012 8:11 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Hoarder (edited)
Replies: 14
Views: 562

Re: The Hoarder (edited)

ha! well, this is an interesting problem. Both versions are up for comparison, both parties make very good points. I'll have to think up a solution at some point, it would be nice to please everyone but, alas, that is impossible.
by pseud
Fri Nov 23, 2012 8:03 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7529
Views: 791637

Re: Haiku Train

nine oh two one oh
where did the haiku train go?
Oh shit, I've killed it!
by pseud
Fri Nov 23, 2012 7:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Bridges (was Venti et Mare)
Replies: 9
Views: 398

Re: Bridges (was Venti et Mare)

Very conflicted here. On the positive side, there is a lot of good stuff. Good rhyming and metrical work going on here - the poem breaths and doesn't get tied up in its own verbiage. It is just 'sing-songy' enough without being obnoxiously so. It is easy to read, even with the slightly modified spel...
by pseud
Fri Nov 23, 2012 7:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: More and more you needed me
Replies: 5
Views: 243

Re: More and more you needed me

I'm always intrigued by punctuation choices. I've had quite a few of my poems criticized along these lines and would like to take this opportunity to learn. The opening is not capitalized, though it could be. Both semicolons would be dashes for me. ...did you put a lot of thought into those or was i...
by pseud
Fri Nov 23, 2012 7:27 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Hoarder (edited)
Replies: 14
Views: 562

Re: The Hoarder (edited)

well everyone, thank you for giving this some attention. I changed it based on many of the comments...decided to abandoned the "cluttered" structure of the original in order to take out all the punctuation and rely more on the import of the meaning and sounds of the words than the structure (I don't...
by pseud
Fri Nov 16, 2012 4:43 am
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Middle-earth (According to Mordor)
Replies: 9
Views: 5772

Re: Middle-earth (According to Mordor)

I agree, I think that is the weakest. Especially with Venice so close. Paris is one flat shade of grey, could be Gondor...
by pseud
Thu Nov 15, 2012 5:14 am
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Middle-earth (According to Mordor)
Replies: 9
Views: 5772

Re: Middle-earth (According to Mordor)

Image

Reminded me of this
by pseud
Mon Nov 12, 2012 9:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: cemetery rose
Replies: 12
Views: 503

Re: cemetery rose

Arian wrote:
twoleftfeet wrote:From the text, I'm guessing that this poem is really about football referees (or critics).
No, that can't be right, Geoff. If your hypothesis held water, wouldn't it be:

The f.c.

?
I thought it was autobiographical?
by pseud
Sat Nov 10, 2012 1:07 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Found Poetry Comp
Replies: 21
Views: 1112

Re: Found Poetry Comp

After the winner(s) is (are) chosen I think it'd be fun to reveal sources. The quality should still be evident from "what is there" but I always am fascinated to find out people use instruction manuals, etc.
by pseud
Fri Nov 09, 2012 11:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: cemetery rose
Replies: 12
Views: 503

Re: cemetery rose

I would personally capitalize "c" and think about removing the period, it would leave the poem a bit more open-ended.
by pseud
Fri Nov 09, 2012 11:33 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Technology and Writing: Help or Hindrance?
Replies: 7
Views: 1814

Re: Technology and Writing: Help or Hindrance?

I tend to write more if I'm around others who write, and this counts as being "around" so her statement holds true for me. And of course I've never figured out if it is better to write poetry on a computer or on a sheet of paper with a pen. It took me a long time to learn that poetry is meant to be ...
by pseud
Thu Nov 08, 2012 6:14 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Technology and Writing: Help or Hindrance?
Replies: 7
Views: 1814

Technology and Writing: Help or Hindrance?

http://litreactor.com/columns/technology-help-or-hindrance Since it could easily have gone in any of the other discussion forums about writing, I thought I would post the article here. The author makes an interesting point here when she says: I did nothing but sit around and talk about how I was goi...
by pseud
Thu Nov 08, 2012 6:04 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Hoarder (edited)
Replies: 14
Views: 562

Re: The Hoarder

Thanks all, you have confirmed my suspicions with this. It is a bit hurried in parts, and I haven't thought of how to break it up just yet. I'll probably edit it soon.

- Pseud
by pseud
Thu Nov 08, 2012 7:33 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Hoarder (edited)
Replies: 14
Views: 562

The Hoarder (edited)

v2. ruins in the garage and buried treasure in the halls stuffed animals stacked away for better days when the walls make sense again he has hidden it all in the ark in the room in the house in the yard but the moths and rust and flood waters arrive the thieves pour in and pour out of the bathtubs a...
by pseud
Thu Nov 08, 2012 4:03 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Temple
Replies: 8
Views: 351

Re: Temple

Pseud, it's great to have you back, I thought we'd lost you. Good to be back, lots to read and re-read. Glad to see a few familiar faces like yourself among a host of newcomers. I really was gone, but Camus sent me a PM, which ended up in an old email account that I was searching through the other ...
by pseud
Tue Nov 06, 2012 7:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: dry
Replies: 9
Views: 341

Re: dry

Incredibly descriptive, well done mac!


his lust is like a second class mail
posted to the wrong address -

Might consider eliminating "a" - reads better to this American as "like second class mail." But the image is clever.

"nailed down like a crucifix" - my favo(u)rite line

pseud
by pseud
Tue Nov 06, 2012 6:43 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Sigur Rós - Ágætis Byrjun
Replies: 4
Views: 1447

Re: Sigur Rós - Ágætis Byrjun

lemonstar wrote:Chris Martin is a well known superfan of theirs [...] he said they were "the best band in the world".
I'm tempted to agree with him. Best band performing right now. Also great for long trips in the car.
by pseud
Mon Nov 05, 2012 11:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7529
Views: 791637

Re: Haiku Train

there is no way to
describe my joy; this train
is unstoppable

seven two two nine,
eight six seven five three o ni(iiiii)ne
nine oh two one oh