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by pseud
Tue Nov 11, 2008 1:00 am
Forum: Barrie's Poems
Topic: Free Will
Replies: 14
Views: 3263

Re: Free Will

what is free will? Much better posed as a question than as an affirmation - I have nothing to add there, great stuff. I get the feeling this poem could be longer if you wanted it to be, but it's good as is. On the other hand, I guess the old adage "don't be fixin what ain't broken" might be the best...
by pseud
Tue Nov 11, 2008 12:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Young James (Revised)
Replies: 4
Views: 200

Re: Young James

I remember liking chocolate a lot more than I do now as well, this was a fun poem. Meant for kids I am guessing, so while the "oh so sweet" reversal and others like it can interrupt the read a bit - the rhymes aren't natural, I agree with R - it's a kid's poem and so that is forgivable in my opinion...
by pseud
Tue Nov 11, 2008 12:15 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: It's nearly midnight!
Replies: 4
Views: 226

Re: It's nearly midnight!

either this is a joke (that I don't get) or an attempt to document something that is hard to care about. I'm all for short poems but this needs some fleshing out.

- Caleb
by pseud
Tue Nov 11, 2008 12:02 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Reason
Replies: 8
Views: 388

Re: Reason

Jon - thanks. I agree with all you said, I'll see what I can do about the rhyme scheme. Barrie - danke sehr. In my original version of the poem, last line of S1 was "it is never fully photographed, much less caught." But someone thought fully photographed was f heavy, so I changed it. ray - apprecia...
by pseud
Mon Nov 10, 2008 7:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: To Encourage The Others
Replies: 16
Views: 868

Re: To Encourage The Others

og - good for you for the Floyd reference, I was reminded of it as well.
by pseud
Fri Nov 07, 2008 8:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: To Encourage The Others
Replies: 16
Views: 868

Re: To Encourage The Others

While Sharra is right about the rhythm of the last couplet, the content of it is powerful. WWI was an incredible example of the thing you are describing, so I can see the link to the text very plainly now that you mention it. Keeping the rhyme scheme strictly without sounding unnatural isn't easy at...
by pseud
Fri Nov 07, 2008 8:03 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Reason
Replies: 8
Views: 388

Reason

Reason

We strain our souls and trace our thought
but Reason is always far too smart;
it is never fully caught on film, much less caught.

The beast mocks and bites and grins,
but does not bleed or shed its skin.
All we find are remnants of what might have been.
by pseud
Fri Nov 07, 2008 7:42 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: barack obama
Replies: 27
Views: 3145

Re: barack obama

vindicated, sir Absolon.
by pseud
Wed May 14, 2008 5:00 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: barack obama
Replies: 27
Views: 3145

Re: barack obama

I don't like my choices this election cycle either. I agree that Colin Powell would have been a better Republican answer to this. Especially in this election, where the Iraq War is still a question. But his ties to Bush would haunt him, he wouldn't be impossible to beat. Notice McCain is doing all h...
by pseud
Fri Apr 11, 2008 6:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Boat
Replies: 14
Views: 6092

Re: The Boat

yeah I'd have to come back to this Kris, but my initial impression is a lot like ded's - good, compact stuff.
by pseud
Wed Nov 14, 2007 11:07 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Hilarious
Replies: 1
Views: 624

Hilarious

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rcwfdFT1 ... re=related

Talking of Stephen Colbert got me thinking of comedians, and this one shows promise.
by pseud
Wed Nov 14, 2007 9:10 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Venice: Man and Boy
Replies: 7
Views: 396

Re: Venice: Man and Boy

I agree with the others' praise here. I would only add, that it's tough to write from the boy's perspective partly because: he can't spell building, but he can spell "statue"? But I see the difficulty, I think: too many misspellings and the thing gets overloaded with OTT spelling errors...still I th...
by pseud
Mon Nov 12, 2007 8:50 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Norfolk Literary Tour
Replies: 9
Views: 1186

Re: Norfolk Literary Tour

You have inspired me to do what I can to visit Norfolk. I think that's a pretty good indication of success.
by pseud
Fri Nov 09, 2007 9:44 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Pres. Bush roast 2006
Replies: 8
Views: 1030

Re: Pres. Bush roast 2006

Pseud, when did you hear that?
http://www.indecision2008.com/blog.jhtml?c=v&m=88755

He's running in the primaries in one state. Meaning there's no way to win. But yeah, a joke.
by pseud
Thu Nov 08, 2007 6:24 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Pres. Bush roast 2006
Replies: 8
Views: 1030

Re: Pres. Bush roast 2006

Eh, I agree.

Though I'm kind of a half-hearted right-winger, who reserves his right to shed the title when it a) causes people to make assumptions about his beliefs on a topic or b) embarrasses him.
by pseud
Mon Nov 05, 2007 3:03 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Your uncle
Replies: 8
Views: 950

Re: Your uncle

Not my messiah but I'm a fan. And as far as messiah goes, how far back are we talking? Nothing like taking one of k-j's off-hand remarks as if it were calculated, but I'm trying to figure out what the rest of you are talking about. I think he was influential musically, but then I think Woodie Guthri...
by pseud
Mon Nov 05, 2007 2:44 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Pres. Bush roast 2006
Replies: 8
Views: 1030

Re: Pres. Bush roast 2006

Yeah, I've seen his show many times. It's interesting - we have very different political and philosophical persuasions, I can almost guarantee you - but I'm not really offended by him. I'm offended by people who vote for him in South Carolina's primary, but that's a different story. It's hard to tel...
by pseud
Sat Nov 03, 2007 4:58 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Trojans
Replies: 3
Views: 640

Re: Trojans

Thanks for posting this Barrie. Usually harkening back to old mythology doesn't work for me; this poem manages to keep it unpretentious and natural.

You know, I've thought of modern Greek as the next language to learn after German, what do you think?

Cavafy is an inspiration.

Caleb
by pseud
Fri Nov 02, 2007 1:10 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Pres. Bush roast 2006
Replies: 8
Views: 1030

Re: Pres. Bush roast 2006

I dunno, I didn't think it was that funny.

Did you all know Colbert's running for President?
by pseud
Thu Nov 01, 2007 2:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: lucy I love you but you’re bringing me down
Replies: 8
Views: 528

Re: lucy I love you but you’re bringing me down

OK, so now we're in the down and dirty of translating in a way that it doesn't sound like a translation....ah joy. we are waking up hot as bodies give out heat. This is technically correct, but I think Kim's way of putting it would be better. This sentence makes me do a double-take, like "hey...wait...
by pseud
Thu Nov 01, 2007 3:38 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Cherry Ghost
Replies: 2
Views: 948

Re: Cherry Ghost

Huge Wilco fan. Not only can you see the influence and he is public with this, but Cherry Ghost gives it away.

I think you'd go for the song that came from Camus - Wilco's Theologians.
by pseud
Thu Nov 01, 2007 3:31 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: To write a poem
Replies: 11
Views: 592

Re: To write a poem

Anyway, if you don't want to talk about shit in your poem, I'll understand.
WWWHAT? No sir, no "shit" in here, we say things more pristinely around here, and borrow Latin-based words that hide the poop there in - i.e. lavatory seats.

Tsk, tsk.
by pseud
Thu Nov 01, 2007 3:27 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: lucy I love you but you’re bringing me down
Replies: 8
Views: 528

Re: lucy I love you but you’re bringing me down

hmm...there are some great turns of phrase in here. you can’t love everybody equally as garishly opposed cold birds are plucking dirty pavement A question, out of curiosity - if I critique this and convince you to change something in English, does the Polish version get edited too? I don't get the w...
by pseud
Sun Oct 28, 2007 9:21 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The dance
Replies: 9
Views: 437

Re: The dance

I was actually thinking about (as Barrie astutely - and typically - spotted) the early history of Christianity, and trying to make sense of it (and, possibly, choices from it) now. Does that work for you, Caleb? I hope so. I think it is an apt metaphor. Yes it works for me. I stick to what I said b...
by pseud
Sat Oct 27, 2007 11:19 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The dance
Replies: 9
Views: 437

Re: The dance

So simple, so good. One of my favorite kinds of poetry. "Then they died." what a good place to end the first stanza. The rhyme scheme does not over power this but sort of floats in the background, keeping the poem moving along. Very well done. I will have more thoughts later no doubt, just letting y...