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by brianedwards
Sat Jul 26, 2008 7:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Entre Nous
Replies: 3
Views: 466

Re: Entre Nous

Hi sneaker I agree with Dante. Although there is definitely some interesting things going on here, it's difficult for the reader to get inside the poem. I don't mind if thepoem has a "message" or not, but I need a way in. One exercise that works for me sometimes, is to consider what my theme or stor...
by brianedwards
Sat Jul 26, 2008 1:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Stomach pumped
Replies: 4
Views: 447

Re: Stomach pumped

Hi camus (cool name) Enjoyed the feel of this, if not exactly the subject matter. Pretty intense stuff. Something is jarring between 1st and 2nd S, though I can't quite put my finger on it. Perhaps its a slight change in voice, or the texture of the language. S1 is raw and vivid whereas it softens a...
by brianedwards
Thu Jul 24, 2008 12:57 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: New guy
Replies: 10
Views: 1731

Re: New guy

Thanks for the welcomes and the Hajime Mashite!
(Whereabouts in NW England Barrie? I'm a Rochdale lad meself!!)

Be seeing you all about the place no doubt!

Cheers.

B.
by brianedwards
Tue Jul 22, 2008 7:50 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: New guy
Replies: 10
Views: 1731

New guy

Hi My name is Brian. I'm an Englishman now living in Japan with my wife and 2 kids. I've been writing poetry for almost a decade. I also used to write short stories and screenplays, but time doesn't allow for much of that these days. The quality on here seems to be pretty high, so I hope I can add t...