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by ray miller
Wed Nov 26, 2008 11:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: 14 weeks - edited
Replies: 15
Views: 1001

Re: 14 weeks - edited

Hi, I just wanted to say you've written really excellently and bravely. The water metaphors are brilliant, drowning is an improvement on swaddled. Best wishes, ray
by ray miller
Wed Nov 26, 2008 11:13 am
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Who's reading what?
Replies: 493
Views: 194782

Re: Who's reading what?

k-j, did he really use "interlocutress"? That is bizarre, do you recall what book that was in? I've noticed the subjoinders myself. Raisin, ok. rubbish is maybe too strong a word. Dross, then? I was only half serious but now I come to think about it I can't recall an impressive novel in the last 40 ...
by ray miller
Wed Nov 26, 2008 10:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: First Sonnet
Replies: 5
Views: 504

Re: FIRST SONNET

bob, you'd be best advised to post your poems with less frequency. Maybe one every two or three days, you might get more responses then. I liked this much less than your first post. It sounds unnatural, as if you were attempting to write in imitation of someone who probably died two hundred years ag...
by ray miller
Wed Nov 26, 2008 8:17 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Man of his Time
Replies: 5
Views: 454

Re: A MAN OF HIS TIME

Hello Bob, I too think you can do without the explanatory preamble. I'm not sure of their purpose unless they are written in Latin to show off. I thought the first stanza was quite sharp and witty, in particular, "speaks only with a purpose, watching for weakness". I'll confess my ignorance of wire-...
by ray miller
Tue Nov 25, 2008 3:58 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Whooping (revised)
Replies: 19
Views: 1219

Re: Whooping (revised)

It's his swansong, surely?
by ray miller
Tue Nov 25, 2008 3:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Casually (Appearances (slight edit))
Replies: 9
Views: 733

Re: Appearances (slight edit)

This is very naughty and not at all to be encouraged. If, heaven forbid, I should ever find myself so morally lax as to incline myself in this direction, I would dispense with " cool" conversation and would eschew, peremptorily, phrases such as "by all appearances".
by ray miller
Tue Nov 25, 2008 3:28 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Patched Up
Replies: 7
Views: 595

Re: Patched Up

I assume it's about Hells Angels though at first I was thinking something even more sinister as I watched This is England last night. Same game though, I guess. I really liked " my back is covered like an epitaphed grave" though I wonder if epitaph is a verb. It oughta be and that's what matters. I ...
by ray miller
Tue Nov 25, 2008 2:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Utensils in an artist's room –II
Replies: 7
Views: 550

Re: Utensils in an artist's room –II

The most surprising thing about this is that it rhymes. Is this a first, arunansu? "a butterfly exploring stains" is very fine in my opinion. why wouldn't they? That last bit about hunger intensifying and the rapping on window panes reminded me of those little creatures in some relatively modern fil...
by ray miller
Tue Nov 25, 2008 2:45 pm
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Who's reading what?
Replies: 493
Views: 194782

Re: Who's reading what?

I think Dickens is the tops. I'd recommend Dombey and Son. At the present I'm reading The Europeans by Henry James. There's not a great deal of " action" occurs in his novels but I'd say he's one of the acutest observers of relationships, mannerisms and that human psyche thing women are so fond of r...
by ray miller
Tue Nov 25, 2008 11:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: How good is this poem?
Replies: 4
Views: 428

Re: How good is this poem?

Hello Bob, I enjoyed it anyway. I liked the respectful, measured tone though I didn't feel there were any especially memorable phrases. I wouldn't be sure how the dead were slighted or what fallen obelisks is intended to indicate. Also, can something be said to lour out of what is already a gloom?Pe...
by ray miller
Tue Nov 25, 2008 9:15 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: poets, from the outside
Replies: 7
Views: 1028

Re: poets, from the outside

If I thought poetry was solely a trait, or the preserve, of the middle classes then I'd run all the way back to Beesley Street. Regarding the lack of a tangible community, poetry is intrinsically something of a solitary pursuit but in the field of performance poetry, for instance, there are certain ...
by ray miller
Mon Nov 24, 2008 11:14 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Analgesia
Replies: 3
Views: 403

Analgesia

In the arcades and the alleyways the fugitives take furtive drags. What was the craze is now a malaise, the red crosses upon the white flags portray a nationwide neurosis, a compulsive obsession with health, in thrall to the No Smoking notice - not at all at ease with itself. Buoyed on an ocean of R...
by ray miller
Mon Nov 24, 2008 10:17 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Glissando (revised)
Replies: 13
Views: 844

Re: Glissando (revised)

I think it's very good, the use of vulture and a wooden corpse especially so. I do think it's a mistake to remove the punctuation after thighs, though. I almost forgot. You keep on spelling piece as peice and it is driving me barmy. Stop it!
by ray miller
Mon Nov 24, 2008 10:01 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Peninsula
Replies: 12
Views: 806

Re: Peninsula

Really excellent, I thought. What you say about peninsula eventually becoming an island gives greater weight to "somebody waving goodbye". A hem that rises and falls with predictable restraint is also wonderful, great play of words on a hem. Like others I'm not sure that either launch itself or grea...
by ray miller
Mon Nov 24, 2008 7:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: AI
Replies: 6
Views: 683

Re: AI

Well, there's a lot of it and much of it is very entertaining, brilliant in its way. This is not intended as derogatory, but I found myself thinking that this is what will become of rap when the white middle classes take it over. Like a hip Jimmy Carr, only funny.
by ray miller
Mon Nov 24, 2008 7:23 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Logs
Replies: 7
Views: 484

Re: Logs

It's very nice, Jimmy. I liked the alliteration of white-washed wall and speak summertime skies. Wouldn't "a target pattern" be preferable to "one target pattern"?I'd not come across bosky before and, strangely, it made me think of a music-hall character! Quaked loose ana a pantomime of heat are gre...
by ray miller
Fri Nov 21, 2008 11:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Too Late For Thora Hird
Replies: 5
Views: 464

Re: Too Late For Thora Hird

David, and anyone, bear in mind that I am extremely drunk and perhaps I won't make a lot of sense. The comments I made about yourself and barrie were strictly for laughs and ....jesus, I have a bloody kitten sat on my head, how I suffer for my art...anyhow, as I was saying I have the utmost respect ...
by ray miller
Fri Nov 21, 2008 11:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Come my young floozies
Replies: 2
Views: 359

Re: Come my young floozies

Edward Lear is back in town! I found it amusing, without knowing what the hell it's all about, which is a good sign, I guess. The neologisms, is that the correct word ?, "work", how do they do that? One thing, what do you mean by bang up to date?
by ray miller
Fri Nov 21, 2008 10:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: My silent admiration
Replies: 7
Views: 632

Re: My silent admiration

I don't get it!
by ray miller
Fri Nov 21, 2008 10:49 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: My fire hazard (formerly Tinderbox)
Replies: 8
Views: 617

Re: A fire hazard (formerly Tinderbox)

Hello, I wouldn't imagine I'm the best person to ask about punctuation as I'm a bit of a chancer, myself. You probably need a full stop after curtains, I know that much. " A house is not a home" says some Bob Dylan song and though he was maybe referring to houses of ill repute I guess the distinctio...
by ray miller
Fri Nov 21, 2008 10:32 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Too Late For Thora Hird
Replies: 5
Views: 464

Too Late For Thora Hird

Mr. Miles has gone to work today, though he didn't sleep - not for a second! He was coughing and choking, it wasn't the smoking but chemical warfare, he reckoned! "It came in through the taps, and my willpower collapsed, the aural transmitters were implanted. It's the Green Party, see, they're spell...
by ray miller
Fri Nov 21, 2008 7:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Stop Letting Me Think Of You
Replies: 8
Views: 624

Re: Stop Letting Me Think Of You

Sorry, but I'm lost at the very start! "I mixed the two ridiculous'"? Is there something missing? I don't understand "repetitive maybe injuries lust at me" or indeed "open fields mindfully flatten grass". I did like "invisibly paper-chased through my sleep" and "quilt my dreams" is lovely. Towards t...
by ray miller
Fri Nov 21, 2008 7:35 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: My fire hazard (formerly Tinderbox)
Replies: 8
Views: 617

Re: A fire hazard (formerly Tinderbox)

Well, the revised version makes it clear that what's being referred to is a memory or a passion rather than a tangible object. Replacing "home" with "heart" clarifies but at the same time makes the whole less subtle, perhaps. It remains fairly elusive, all the same. The use of lace curtains is a nic...
by ray miller
Fri Nov 21, 2008 7:00 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Leonard Cohen
Replies: 3
Views: 476

Re: Leonard Cohen

I'm sure you'll enjoy. I saw him at The Big Chill in August, first time ever and it was the best performance I've seen in my life. Though it's uncanny how many people have commented that he reminded them of Ronald Reagan when he stepped on the stage. He does look as if he's enjoying the experience!
by ray miller
Thu Nov 20, 2008 9:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: What the Chestnut Tree Saw
Replies: 16
Views: 1062

Re: What the Chestnut Tree Saw

Some things are not really to be grasped in their entirety and best remain ever elusive. So I'm not sure I want to know if there was a chestnut tree overlooking Anne Frank's house now felled by disease but I'll ask anyhow. Was there? It's really a wonderful poem, for me, and has so much to admire. I...