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by John G
Tue Nov 20, 2012 8:31 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: The Chain
Replies: 408
Views: 199725

Re: The Chain

Kraut rock - not the genre, but rock, made by Germans, I give you Rammstein

by John G
Mon Nov 19, 2012 1:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: go for the atlas (now with edit)
Replies: 5
Views: 616

go for the atlas (now with edit)

Version 2 she used her date of birth as a grid reference found that place on a map circled it with black marker pen spent days staring at black rings inky areolas go for the atlas they yelled like a gameshow audience explore the cities that are lost under the staples explore the curves of geography...
by John G
Sun Nov 18, 2012 11:29 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: trying to write a poem on a train, when
Replies: 5
Views: 664

Re: trying to write a poem on a train, when

Brian and Ros,

Hello there, and thanks for the feedback, short and sweet but enough to know (i think) Im on the right track.

Suzanne, I like the idea of the line breaks being sloppily perfect!

I would lean towards sloppy rather than perfection!
by John G
Fri Nov 16, 2012 7:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: trying to write a poem on a train, when
Replies: 5
Views: 664

trying to write a poem on a train, when

I was sitting on a train with my pad and a pen, trying to write a poem. I had no title, but I had written down the first line ...I was sitting on a train with my pad... A man sat opposite me. After a minute or so of scanning his paper and throwing cursory looks in my direction he enquiried "What are...
by John G
Fri Nov 16, 2012 10:08 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: We breathe the same air
Replies: 9
Views: 898

Re: We breathe the same air

For me, I think you could lose the first three lines and just have:

My lungs fill
till they scrape my soul

I part my lips
I breathe out

You take it
I am left empty.

I don't think it loses it appeal and just makes it more compact.
by John G
Fri Nov 16, 2012 9:43 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: nothing to see here
Replies: 8
Views: 726

Re: nothing to see here

Hello there Peter, Thanks for the feedback. I guess you're right, it can be seen as an allegory about life - things not being as you thought and the un-sketched picture a metaphor for there always being time to change direction - to give yourself a kick up the arse. Or it's about some cartoon charac...
by John G
Fri Nov 16, 2012 9:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Evolution.
Replies: 13
Views: 1063

Re: Evolution.

It definitely has an old music hall, cheeky chappy quality to it.
by John G
Thu Nov 15, 2012 7:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: nothing to see here
Replies: 8
Views: 726

nothing to see here

We looked out of the window
but the view wasn’t what the brochure had promised.

In fact there was no view at all.

It hadn’t been drawn yet.

Looking up we saw him sitting there,
sipping from a cup,
looking out of his window,
admiring his view,
a blunt pencil in his hand.
by John G
Thu Nov 15, 2012 7:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: cemetery rose
Replies: 12
Views: 868

Re: cemetery rose

Hillarious...
by John G
Sun Aug 05, 2012 9:31 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: two line poem
Replies: 3
Views: 416

two line poem

Man, 21 in pub beating
The pub is unhurt.
by John G
Sun Aug 05, 2012 9:25 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Poets' Graves Anthology - call for submissions!
Replies: 11
Views: 1293

Re: Poets' Graves Anthology - call for submissions!

i've sent off some submissions. Just saying.
by John G
Sun Aug 05, 2012 9:17 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Dynamite Pussy Club
Replies: 0
Views: 631

Dynamite Pussy Club

great name great song


http://youtu.be/z_cdP-c5xSI
by John G
Sun Aug 05, 2012 9:13 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: looping
Replies: 8
Views: 732

Re: looping

Thanks for stopping by. David and Ros, thanks, good to be back. Pete, have had a quick read up on centrifugal / centripetal and the later does seem more appropriate. I guess when it comes to forces people are just lazy and opt for the obvious one! Have made a change. Kev, Parky? Wogan? Russell Harty...
by John G
Fri Aug 03, 2012 1:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: looping
Replies: 8
Views: 732

looping

Th Version Two he man on TV was famous for interviewing famous people on TV and now he's retired he's being interviewed on TV to talk about the famous people he interviewed when he was on TV interviewing famous people. A constant loop the centripetal force pulling at his face. A table. Two chairs, g...
by John G
Fri Aug 03, 2012 12:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Religionated
Replies: 11
Views: 920

Re: Religionated

cant say I really get this one Im afraid.

Who are the sneaky fuckers? Politicians or priests? Personally I blame the farmers.
by John G
Sat Jun 16, 2012 5:06 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Nirvana - 23years old
Replies: 0
Views: 604

Nirvana - 23years old

Damn - 23 years old and still sounding fresh as a daisy -

by John G
Sat Jun 16, 2012 5:03 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: John Cooper Clarke - It Man
Replies: 2
Views: 923

Re: John Cooper Clarke - It Man

watched the BBC4 doc on him the other day - excellant it was as is It Man...hurrach for JCC - one less C and he could be Jesus
by John G
Sat Jun 09, 2012 8:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: underground, illegal boot sales
Replies: 2
Views: 414

underground, illegal boot sales

Mirrors cracked in corners, dusty, parts of a car, a wing mirror, lighter, sections of a monorail once used in a fair called, "Travel of the future." Vinyl records, dog earred a coronation jug. All purchased from illegal underground car boot sales. Passed by word of mouth secret handshakes a nod a w...
by John G
Sat Jun 09, 2012 8:04 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Silver Jews
Replies: 1
Views: 621

Silver Jews

massive fan of these - great music and a poet for a singer (really, he is)

by John G
Sat Jun 09, 2012 8:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: these dodos
Replies: 6
Views: 619

Re: these dodos

Cheers for the feedback people. Macavity, glad you found the humor in it. Elphin, love your edit - short, sweet to the point. Im going to reconsider what Ive written with your version in mind. Thanks. Arian, I think Elphins edit removes much of the clunkiness and I see your point about the sword. Hm...
by John G
Sat Jun 09, 2012 7:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Surviving
Replies: 9
Views: 823

Re: Surviving

I was reading this and for some reason it reminded me of a prison visit.

However, probably about a 1,000 miles of the mark!

A nice little vignette about the possibility of loss and the people reproaching themselves for not being there for loved ones?
by John G
Sat Jun 09, 2012 7:51 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: metro series #3
Replies: 11
Views: 927

Re: metro series #3

Hello K - funny bumping into you here... Glad you liked. As for, "Would work well as part of a long, sprawling piece" - this is part of a bigger piece. I read the Metro on the way to work and cherry pick random sentences and headlines, cut them up, tinker with a bit here and a bit there and thats ho...
by John G
Thu May 31, 2012 8:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: these dodos
Replies: 6
Views: 619

these dodos

A redundant postbox, red, thoughts about letters and the written word. A future with no pens.  Head shakes.  The pen is mightier than the sword will cause confusion in years to come. "What is a pen? What is a sword?" -  questions from a future child - confused looking at pictures of sabres and biros...
by John G
Thu May 31, 2012 7:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Homage to WW1 Tanks
Replies: 20
Views: 1991

Re: Homage to WW1 Tanks

An enjoyable romp!

Conjures great images, tanks chugging (do they chug?) over hill and dale while the driver searches for tea bag. Great!

For some reason I'm picturing Lionel Jeffries from Chitty Chitty Bang Bang, pith helmeted and singing.

Yeah, good work!
by John G
Thu May 31, 2012 7:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: metro series #3
Replies: 11
Views: 927

Re: metro series #3

Lake, thanks for stopping by. I see you and Arian have both picked up on the total lack of punctuation. A lame excuse maybe, but it was never something I truly understood so I guess out of fear of ballsing it up I have tended to say  away from it. Naturally it does impact on how the poem an be read....