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by barrett
Mon Jul 22, 2019 5:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Sincerly, Your Ex-Boyfriend (Some Swearing,)
Replies: 16
Views: 1315

Re: Sincerly, Your Ex-Boyfriend

I could point out the spelling mistakes and the grammatical errors and the fact that some parts really don't seem to make a lot of sense To commit all those crimes and still produce a praiseworthy piece of work takes a special kind of talent; wouldn't you say, barrett? :D I wouldn't necessarily say...
by barrett
Mon Jul 22, 2019 1:21 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Sincerly, Your Ex-Boyfriend (Some Swearing,)
Replies: 16
Views: 1315

Re: Sincerly, Your Ex-Boyfriend

This thread is about Poet's poem, and it is a vile and amateurish piece of trash. I think it should be deleted. You do him a disservice by praising it. In your opinion, of course. And I think you're sort of proving my point there, Perry. Just once, I'd love to write something that provoked so much ...
by barrett
Mon Jul 22, 2019 9:56 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Sincerly, Your Ex-Boyfriend (Some Swearing,)
Replies: 16
Views: 1315

Re: Sincerly, Your Ex-Boyfriend

Barrett, this isn't enviable freedom of expression. It's just trash. Poet writes like a 14-year-old who got dumped by a girl. Now, now, Perry, calm down or you'll do yourself a mischief. You acted like this before when you were on this forum under the name Caleb Murdock (you're not the only one who...
by barrett
Mon Jul 22, 2019 7:53 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Sincerly, Your Ex-Boyfriend (Some Swearing,)
Replies: 16
Views: 1315

Re: Sincerly, Your Ex-Boyfriend

Always difficult to offer a critique of your work because it breaks all the rules, and it's all the better for it. I could point out the spelling mistakes and the grammatical errors and the fact that some parts really don't seem to make a lot of sense but I won't because any corrections would just d...
by barrett
Sun Jul 21, 2019 1:12 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Dave's faves
Replies: 15
Views: 1625

Re: Dave's faves

And then "green as glass" -- what do the two have to do with each other? I'm confused, are you asking what green and glass have to do with each other? Apart from some old bottles being obviously green, which is what I imagine this poem is referencing, all glass is green. The glass in your windows i...
by barrett
Sat Jul 20, 2019 3:44 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Dave's faves
Replies: 15
Views: 1625

Re: Dave's faves

Yes! Just checked The Rattlebag (always the first port of call). I see that Interruption to a Journey is one of his. I think I'm going to have to read some more of his now.

Barrett's Garret?
by barrett
Sat Jul 20, 2019 3:08 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Dave's faves
Replies: 15
Views: 1625

Re: Dave's faves

Love that poem, David, a new one for me. I don't think I've read much MacCaig before. That final verse is remarkable.

I like the idea of everyone having their own place to post their favourite poems, but how can one beat naming it Dave's Faves?
by barrett
Thu Jul 18, 2019 10:20 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 56
Views: 8208

Re: A poem that I read today

Lovely poem, Mac. I must admit that I haven't read a great deal of his. I know he has several in The Rattle Bag which I really like but I think they're probably the only ones I know.

This couplet of his has always stuck in my head:

Out in the dark, over the snow
the fallow fawns invisible go.
by barrett
Mon Jul 15, 2019 5:41 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Getting my poetry published
Replies: 8
Views: 1143

Re: Getting my poetry published

I don't see why a publisher would turn down an author just because he published on a personal blog. Most books of poetry contain pre-published works. You might be right but I think a lot of publishers make a distinction between pre-published poems (i.e. in a reputable lit mag, and then only as a pe...
by barrett
Sun Jul 14, 2019 7:32 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Getting my poetry published
Replies: 8
Views: 1143

Re: Getting my poetry published

I'm no expert but if you're hoping to earn any sort of money from poetry then I imagine you'd have a very long wait. Unless you become an Instagram poet, of course! You could start a blog of your poetry but you would need to put a huge amount of social media work in to get any sort of following. Als...
by barrett
Sun Jul 14, 2019 10:04 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Serendipity-doodah
Replies: 21
Views: 1670

Re: Serendipity-doodah

Love that title, David. It actually made Mrs. B ask what I was chuckling at.

I don't think this needs any changes does it? Great line break on S2 L3, it makes the reader pause along with you.

This line's perfect.
David wrote:
Sun Jul 14, 2019 9:42 am
this unlooked-for epaulette,
Brilliant, really enjoyed it.

barrett.
by barrett
Fri Jul 12, 2019 6:15 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Roy's greatest song ...
Replies: 9
Views: 1448

Re: Roy's greatest song ...

I always think I should like Roy Harper more than I actually do. In fairness, I don't think I've really given him a fair crack of the whip though. I'll have to listen to some more of his I think.
by barrett
Fri Jul 12, 2019 2:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: asepsis (revision)
Replies: 5
Views: 616

Re: asepsis

Wow! This is an intense and impressive piece. I've read it through many times, I enjoy wilfully obscure poems, the sort of poems you can lose yourself in attempting to decipher them. There a few allusions I think may be there, but I'm not completely sure. The language is beautifully constructed, I l...
by barrett
Fri Jul 12, 2019 8:08 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Community Gardening At St Peter's (revision)
Replies: 23
Views: 1359

Re: Community Gardening At St Peter's (revision)

That film is just magnificent, isn't it? I think Guinevere is a better fit for the poem than Morgana. Here's the C,S&N song. First lines: Guinevere had green eyes Like yours, lady like yours She'd walk down Through the garden In the morning after it rained http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aT9EKqXDl68
by barrett
Thu Jul 11, 2019 8:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Community Gardening At St Peter's (revision)
Replies: 23
Views: 1359

Re: Community Gardening At St Peter's

I like this too, Mac. I'm quite a fan of the Arthurian cycle, so I was trying to find some sort of subtext here linking it to part of the legend. Then of course it struck me that, as it's a garden, we're talking about the other Lancelot and you've playfully linked Guinevere to it ( I think, anyway!)...
by barrett
Sun Jun 30, 2019 4:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Wire and the Tree
Replies: 29
Views: 1648

Re: The Wire and the Tree

Hello Perry, On reading the poem I stumbled at that line about the workmen, thinking "Blimey, that doesn't come across well at all!", and I was going to suggest removing or softening that line to make it sound a little less pompous. Then I read the comments and I see that pomposity appears to be you...
by barrett
Sun Jun 23, 2019 9:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Kensal Town Evensong V4
Replies: 15
Views: 1173

Re: Kensal Town Evensong V4

Works for me too, glad the parakeets have ceased to be! Definitely slide rather than slip, the long vowel is far more slidey.
by barrett
Sun Jun 23, 2019 8:36 am
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Who's reading what?
Replies: 491
Views: 175930

Re: Who's reading what?

I don't know either Morrison or Heym (although I might check on Heym - his name sounds vaguely familiar from somewhere). I only know Robertson and Clare of your poetry names - apart from Helen Ivory, of course, although I've not read any of her collections. You certainly describe it temptingly. And...
by barrett
Thu Jun 20, 2019 12:08 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hello
Replies: 4
Views: 1304

Re: Hello

Thank you, JJ. You too!
by barrett
Thu Jun 20, 2019 11:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Youth
Replies: 4
Views: 427

Re: Youth

I can't imagine anyone really has too much of a problem with older styles of poetry do they? I'm sure most will read anything from Catallus to Carol Ann Duffy (I'm sure there must be a better modern poet beginning with C!). But it does say Contemporary Poetry Forum in the banner. I suppose it depend...
by barrett
Thu Jun 20, 2019 10:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Youth
Replies: 4
Views: 427

Re: Youth

Hello Perry, Interesting form. Sort of a loose iambic heptameter with the lines split? It gives it quite a stately feel. Not sure about the repeat of 'ineffable' quite a bold word to have twice in the same poem. S2L2 - 'by all accounts'. This doesn't seem to fit at all, the language is perhaps too c...
by barrett
Thu Jun 20, 2019 9:46 am
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Who's reading what?
Replies: 491
Views: 175930

Re: Who's reading what?

It's a shame this thread doesn't get the attention it deserves, I like to see what's on other people's bookshelves, so here are some recent reads of mine. Fiction Arthur Morrison - Cunning Murrell (pub. 1900) I really enjoy Morrison's work and it's unfortunate that he isn't as well known as he perha...
by barrett
Thu Jun 20, 2019 12:33 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Guest Editing September’s Snakeskin
Replies: 20
Views: 3243

Re: Guest Editing September’s Snakeskin

Best of luck with it, Tristan.
by barrett
Wed Jun 19, 2019 12:40 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Wreckage (was Full Wallop)
Replies: 9
Views: 765

Re: Wreckage (was Full Wallop)

Works for me, RC.
by barrett
Tue Jun 18, 2019 12:36 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Wounded knees
Replies: 8
Views: 827

Re: Wounded knees

Brilliant fun, TLF! You make it look so effortless. It's like Robert W. Service suddenly got a sense of humour!

All the best,
barrett