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by PaulDreadful
Wed Mar 21, 2018 8:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love
Replies: 4
Views: 645

Re: Love

Interesting, interesting. Comments much appreciated. Thank you. I almost just called it "Untitled", but I decided against it because I thought that it would be TOO abstract, without the context of what it was really about already in your mind. It's weird. With the title it's too obvious, and without...
by PaulDreadful
Sun Mar 18, 2018 11:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Cliff Face (revision)
Replies: 10
Views: 1038

Re: Cliff Faces (revision)

A want to get close to danger. To those dangerous cliff edges, for a thrill. Only to be diverted to a turnip field. I LOVE the phrase " diverted into a turnip field ". Superb! The want for danger, only for it to be sanitised into something safe. And then those dangerous cliff edges mocking you all t...
by PaulDreadful
Sun Mar 18, 2018 10:36 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Half a Person
Replies: 8
Views: 1200

Re: Half a Person

I like this. Not because I feel I've got a handle on it, I haven't, but because I get the feeling it really knows what it's talking about. And sometimes that's all that matters. In a weird way, this works for me like a good song lyric works. It knows what it's talking about, and to hell with people ...
by PaulDreadful
Sun Mar 18, 2018 9:40 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love
Replies: 4
Views: 645

Love

Only when over is it clear to see: The things that get missed, the myths one believes, The tiny inconsistencies of thought One glosses over, yet somehow still sees. Each tiny piece of the jigsaw puzzle Tailor-made to fit, no puzzle to solve. No mystery or wondering needed. No reason to doubt the thi...
by PaulDreadful
Sun Mar 18, 2018 9:31 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A Task Done
Replies: 9
Views: 1070

Re: A Task Done

This is tricky but, I get a sense of sadness at the fact that we put so much of effort into these little ventures that we know will probably fail, yet we still do them anyway. We still go to all the trouble of doing our utmost to make our ventures in life a success, despite the knowledge that the od...
by PaulDreadful
Sun Mar 18, 2018 9:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Cross Words (revision4)
Replies: 15
Views: 1510

Re: Cross Words (revision4)

I like this. Very stark and bare, as is most of the stuff I like. I think I'm attuned to bereft, emptiness. "Switching on the lamp behind his reading chair" implies he's not there, then this is confirmed by the mention of "empty space". I realise later that might refer to an empty space in the cross...
by PaulDreadful
Sun Mar 18, 2018 8:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Do Birds Tut? (revised)
Replies: 9
Views: 1202

Re: Do Birds Tut? (revised)

I like this. This bit felt really like it knew what it was doing... We followed the footpath through a pine grove to find our old blue tent snuggled neatly in a newly formed row Little half-rhyme with "grove" and "row". The "snuggled neatly" line added a really nice delay to the conclusion of the rh...
by PaulDreadful
Sun Mar 18, 2018 7:46 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hi
Replies: 1
Views: 1542

Hi

Hello, I'm not quite sure how this will all go for me on here, but I'll give it a go. I've never really written poetry before till quite recently. I write songs (well, used to), so I'm not unfamiliar with the writing of words in this kind of way, but poetry is whole different (and higher) game to me...