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by cydney
Tue May 21, 2019 2:55 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Jolly Blue Dragon
Replies: 4
Views: 1182

The Jolly Blue Dragon

The Jolly Blue Dragon It's morning and I'm awake. I'm thinking about all the things I'd like to do on my mini-vacation. I'd like to rearrange my little corner of the living room where all my devices are so it's easier to access stuff. Too many cords. I'd like to say something significant. In word an...
by cydney
Wed Aug 24, 2016 1:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Currents
Replies: 9
Views: 1652

Re: Currents

JJ, Mac, Boat & Camus, thanks so much for your replies! I was a little nervous about posting this but I'm glad I did now. I did want a metaphor of/for the sea but also wanted a little science as well so I'm glad to hear that both may have worked somewhat. Not really sure if the 'science' is logical ...
by cydney
Tue Aug 23, 2016 2:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Currents
Replies: 9
Views: 1652

Currents

Close to the surface of the sea
trees, plants and seeds
gather in a ribbon of foam.

Two bands of water and air
side by side
spiral like corkscrews
in opposite directions:
currents touch.

Edges rip.
by cydney
Tue Aug 23, 2016 1:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Resting in Messinia, Post Requiem (Final rev, again)
Replies: 38
Views: 3884

Re: Resting in Messinia, Post Requiem (revision 2)

This is a beautiful poem, the title, the scriptures at the beginning and end. Had to Google Messinia - how beautiful. Electric. Made the poem even better for me. The only criticism I have is that the scene or scenes are a little confusing for me. I caught myself trying to decide if this was 'real' o...
by cydney
Tue Aug 23, 2016 1:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Para
Replies: 8
Views: 1108

Re: Para

Enjoyed this enlightening version of 'para'. Appreciated the explanations in comments as well. Having said that I'm thinking a broader title might be better as well, but I also appreciate the ruminations a mystery causes.

Will continue to watch for changes, if any.
by cydney
Mon Aug 15, 2016 1:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Water
Replies: 11
Views: 1279

Re: Water

I like the simplicity of this. you use the word 'simply' in the second line which provides a nice unity in the poem.
by cydney
Sat Aug 13, 2016 1:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Trout arousal
Replies: 10
Views: 1567

Re: Trout arousal

I like this.

Agree with the suggestions above.
by cydney
Fri Aug 12, 2016 4:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Within the Deepest Abyssal Waters
Replies: 9
Views: 1240

Re: Within the Deepest Abyssal Waters

Enjoyed this very much, Lou. Appreciate the sentiment.
by cydney
Thu Aug 11, 2016 2:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: untitled

Thanks, everyone. Yeah this one needs to rest awhile.

But I'll say this. I'm amazed at the responses. I would've been happy with one & surprised at two.

Thanks again!
by cydney
Wed Aug 10, 2016 3:48 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: untitled

Luce, I appreciate your help & the time very much but I think I'll let this one rest awhile. I'll certainly consider thoughts when I come back to it.

Thanks!
by cydney
Wed Aug 10, 2016 3:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: untitled

Thanks, Ray. Always appreciate the help.
by cydney
Mon Aug 08, 2016 1:05 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: untitled

Thanks, Luce. I'm glad you saw the note regarding the video. Yeah, that's what I meant to imply originally. Some things are painful for me to write about but the beauty of the video encouraged me to work through the pain, not around it, and write anyway. Sort of a difficult exercise for me. Not sure...
by cydney
Sat Aug 06, 2016 11:04 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: untitled

Thanks trobbo & boat. I'm not really sure what I want to do with this poem. I'll leave all the edits for now.
by cydney
Sat Aug 06, 2016 4:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: untitled

Thanks, Mac. I completely missed that angle. Will try it.

Thanks, David. I know what you mean! I'm not saying what I originally meant to say. Looks like I'm trying to say two different things. I like Mac's idea. Less painful.

Will keep working on this. Always open to suggestions!
by cydney
Sat Aug 06, 2016 3:48 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: Painful Writing

Yes, I guess that's why it was painful.

I don't think this is working. You had to be there.

Thanks for the look & comments, M.
by cydney
Sat Aug 06, 2016 12:00 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: Painful Writing

Thanks Pat, for the look & the interest.

I wrote this after watching a 'peaceful' youtube video w/soothing music, etc. I'm not sure it's working.

It's a description of what I saw and how I felt.

I'll try a couple of other changes.

Thanks!
by cydney
Fri Aug 05, 2016 10:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A Foreign Country
Replies: 8
Views: 939

Re: A Foreign Country

A perfect title, Cynwulf. I'm not familiar with this form of learning. Entire poem very interesting. Enjoyed.
by cydney
Fri Aug 05, 2016 10:25 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: Painful Writing

Oops, misread. They don't differ. Will make changes.
by cydney
Fri Aug 05, 2016 10:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: Painful Writing

Thanks so much for the comments & suggestions, Firebird, cynwulf & trobbo44. Really appreciate it. They seem to differ so I'm not quite sure about a final edit. I did make a couple of changes to clarify a bit.

Apologies for not following protocol.

Thanks!
by cydney
Fri Aug 05, 2016 5:21 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: Painful Writing

Yikes. I forgot I was supposed to do that! I've been reading so many here & haven't said anything.

Thanks, David. I'll try to work on the end. And tks for the reminder!
by cydney
Fri Aug 05, 2016 5:10 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

Re: Painful Writing

A little nervous about posting - so many good poems here.

In this one I wonder if there is a better world for 'travel'. Thought of 'flutter' maybe.

This was inspired by a you tube video. Wanted to share it but can't find it now.
by cydney
Fri Aug 05, 2016 5:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: untitled
Replies: 29
Views: 2321

untitled

Crimson petal, yellow leaf growing in the wild. Heron stretches its neck to fly. I don't want to write about red flowers, autumn or birds. Original Crimson petal, yellow leaf growing in the wild. Heron stretches its neck to fly. I don't want to write about red flowers, autumn or birds. A sore sparro...