Search found 3095 matches

by JJWilliamson
Sat Nov 21, 2020 3:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Ghost Story (revised)
Replies: 5
Views: 58

Re: Ghost Story

An enjoyable ghost story, mac, and one that held my attention all the way through.
Are there two ghosts in this yarn?
Great close.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sat Nov 21, 2020 3:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7627
Views: 984298

Re: Haiku Train

Impact winter over
sleigh bells thaw
reindeer stir
by JJWilliamson
Sat Nov 21, 2020 3:08 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Watercolours Sept Oct
Replies: 2
Views: 69

Re: Watercolours Sept Oct

They're looking a bit small at this end, mac. The colours look good, as a first impression,
but the detail is difficult to make out. Good to see you painting, though.

Best

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sat Jul 18, 2020 7:07 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7627
Views: 984298

Re: Haiku Train

But in their own minds
they perceive nothing but air.
Eastern winds bring ruin
by JJWilliamson
Fri Jul 10, 2020 6:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7627
Views: 984298

Re: Haiku Train

Hide microplastics
inside sea bream guts.
Smoke from the Barbie
by JJWilliamson
Tue Jun 30, 2020 8:35 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7627
Views: 984298

Re: Haiku Train

I won't disappoint
my guarantee is my bond
Brooke Bond tea bags
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 11:03 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Still
Replies: 10
Views: 367

Re: Still

. Hi poet, thanks for the read. Hi JJ, welcome back, and just in time! Yes, it's to do with slavery, statues and ... relieved that that's not hopelessly obscure. :) Regards, Not . Ah, good. I like it for its understated simplicity, something that invites the reader to pause and think. L4 Typo on 'i...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 7:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Still
Replies: 10
Views: 367

Re: Still

Is this anything to do with slavery, Not?

Just thinkin'.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 7:43 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1 + nudges] (was Visitors)
Replies: 22
Views: 2042

Re: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1 + nudges] (was Visitors)

Thank you for the kind comment, Lotus. Much appreciated. dear JJ Wonderful sounds here bicker on the banks and leas, ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~` and i truly enjoy how March might be movement as well as a month ...Delighted you liked. :) preparing for their March campaign. Lotus Thanks for the sage advi...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 7:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Promise
Replies: 6
Views: 636

Re: Promise

Hi Luke The sowing of wildflower seeds is a stark reminder for me. I'd sow them, only to pull them up later in the year, thinking they were weeds. Then I'd remember. :) A pleasant little haiku that could stand a nudge here and there. It's definitely worth pursuing, though. Enjoyed Best JJ We sow wil...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 6:54 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: La Belle dame sans Merci
Replies: 8
Views: 1437

Re: La Belle dame sans Merci

Hi Tony I very much enjoyed this tribute to John Keats and the modern take on love, life and death. I was also reminded of several paintings, particularly one by John William Waterhouse. That put me in mind of John J Williamson. :) Just kidding. You have some metrical anomalies that could be remedie...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 07, 2020 9:51 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: The Durdle Door (revised)
Replies: 11
Views: 4029

Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Thank you very much, Jackie, and sorry for the late response.
I really enjoyed reading your impressions and also enjoyed
looking at the painting again through your eyes.

Thanks for that.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sun May 03, 2020 12:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Adrift
Replies: 8
Views: 476

Re: Adrift

No, I think I need to learn how to read. :)
TrevorConway wrote:
Sun May 03, 2020 11:16 am
You think that phrase needs a bit of revision?
JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sun May 03, 2020 10:54 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: After
Replies: 10
Views: 2218

Re: After

I find myself agreeing with Tristan, Perry. The first three lines are a good hook in my opinion but it trails off into the mundane after that. It's a pleasant enough read and I wasn't bored, finding the questions interesting. I also wondered if you were going for some kind of meter. It seems to read...
by JJWilliamson
Sun May 03, 2020 10:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1 + nudges] (was Visitors)
Replies: 22
Views: 2042

Re: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1] (was Visitors)

Thanks for getting back to me, Not. . Hi JJ, beyond the technical I don't think this works that well. ...Ah well, fair enough. For me it falls down when I wonder what his mind perceives does not lead to any exploration/elaboration of this wondering. ...It's a simple thought, like the way I used to w...
by JJWilliamson
Sun May 03, 2020 10:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1 + nudges] (was Visitors)
Replies: 22
Views: 2042

Re: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1] (was Visitors)

Thanks a lot, Trevor, for dropping back in to look at the revision . Very nice, JJ - I like the brooders/suitors rhyme! And you've made the virus idea fit in a bit better, ...I hoped this extra stanza would provide a link from the romantic to the potentially tragic. I think, though I find "For" used...
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 02, 2020 9:33 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Encounter.
Replies: 9
Views: 753

Re: Encounter.

What a dilemma. I like both versions, Tony. The others have all made some fine comments, ones I found myself nodding to. I miss the coin/slot reference and agree about the mugging aspect. Some thoughts for your perusal: Revision Silently, slowly, ...Not bad but we all know the moon is silent and slo...
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 02, 2020 9:07 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Adrift
Replies: 8
Views: 476

Re: Adrift

I can totally sympathise with the speaker, having experienced this first hand. A friend of mine once said "Don't worry, it'll pass" and it did. Hang in there if this is current. I wonder if I would have picked up on the content without your explanation. I think I would, given the references. Persona...
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 02, 2020 8:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Without Explanation
Replies: 10
Views: 651

Re: Without Explanation

I thought it was about looks and behaviour, the superficial versus the complex.
If so, I like it. It's one of those I'd enjoy reading and thinking about on a plane.

Best

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 02, 2020 8:44 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Mac in The Poetry Shed
Replies: 3
Views: 2137

Re: Mac in The Poetry Shed

I remember it, mac, and thoroughly enjoyed reading it again. Well done on this poem and the publication.

It's a beauty, mac, a real beauty.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 02, 2020 8:38 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Beautiful Soul
Replies: 4
Views: 696

Re: Beautiful Soul

Before I comment further, Anon, is this about the death of a much missed loved one? The reason I ask is because it struck me that way, and I have written several poems about crushing grief in the past. It's a tricky subject and very difficult to critique. If this is about love lost then Perry has of...
by JJWilliamson
Fri May 01, 2020 7:31 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: The Durdle Door (revised)
Replies: 11
Views: 4029

Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Thanks, mac and Mrs mac, for taking another look for me. Appreciated. Mrs Mac and I feel the figures are a tad tiny JJ. ...I'll accept a bit on the small side. :) Just me going for impact. There was a lot of short people out for a stroll that day. :) The island is definitely more an island. ...Ah, g...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Apr 30, 2020 9:37 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Bouquet Garni (Was April)
Replies: 10
Views: 733

Re: April

So much to like, Luke, and I'll try to offer more later. Initially, I enjoyed the sacrificial aspects, as if they were a last resort, and a fear for the future. The twenty pound note was intriguing and the entire opening section acted as a super hook. Later on I saw a worried parent considering the ...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Apr 30, 2020 9:17 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Cottage Pie
Replies: 10
Views: 638

Re: Cottage Pie

There's a lot to like, Trevor, and the effort is a valiant one, but for me it's a bit too long. Some lines could be cut without it affecting the content. My first thought, not too surprisingly, was to rhyme this poem using meter. Triple meter would work a treat but it's not easy. There's a heartines...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Apr 30, 2020 9:08 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dandelion (V4)
Replies: 11
Views: 652

Re: Dandelion (V4)

It's the second strophe that counts with the first being the set up. My preference is V3. I think V5 is too suggestive, given the gentleness of the other versions. You could leave something for the reader EG only " When I hear you stir/ how envious I am of the morning sun". Just a thought. Enjoyed B...