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by JJWilliamson
Fri Jul 10, 2020 6:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7540
Views: 935855

Re: Haiku Train

Hide microplastics
inside sea bream guts.
Smoke from the Barbie
by JJWilliamson
Tue Jun 30, 2020 8:35 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7540
Views: 935855

Re: Haiku Train

I won't disappoint
my guarantee is my bond
Brooke Bond tea bags
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 11:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pentre Village (revision)
Replies: 8
Views: 152

Re: Pentre Village (revision)

Great pentameter throughout, mac, with some appropriate substitutions here and there. I note you switch to hexameter in L's 7 & 8, but it didn't spoil the flow. Very enjoyable. The content is delicious and right up MY street too, with some super rhymes and slant rhymes. I agree that it does have a s...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 11:03 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Still
Replies: 10
Views: 128

Re: Still

. Hi poet, thanks for the read. Hi JJ, welcome back, and just in time! Yes, it's to do with slavery, statues and ... relieved that that's not hopelessly obscure. :) Regards, Not . Ah, good. I like it for its understated simplicity, something that invites the reader to pause and think. L4 Typo on 'i...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 7:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Still
Replies: 10
Views: 128

Re: Still

Is this anything to do with slavery, Not?

Just thinkin'.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 7:43 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1 + nudges] (was Visitors)
Replies: 22
Views: 912

Re: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1 + nudges] (was Visitors)

Thank you for the kind comment, Lotus. Much appreciated. dear JJ Wonderful sounds here bicker on the banks and leas, ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~` and i truly enjoy how March might be movement as well as a month ...Delighted you liked. :) preparing for their March campaign. Lotus Thanks for the sage advi...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 7:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Promise
Replies: 6
Views: 407

Re: Promise

Hi Luke The sowing of wildflower seeds is a stark reminder for me. I'd sow them, only to pull them up later in the year, thinking they were weeds. Then I'd remember. :) A pleasant little haiku that could stand a nudge here and there. It's definitely worth pursuing, though. Enjoyed Best JJ We sow wil...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 21, 2020 6:54 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: La Belle dame sans Merci
Replies: 8
Views: 458

Re: La Belle dame sans Merci

Hi Tony I very much enjoyed this tribute to John Keats and the modern take on love, life and death. I was also reminded of several paintings, particularly one by John William Waterhouse. That put me in mind of John J Williamson. :) Just kidding. You have some metrical anomalies that could be remedie...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 07, 2020 9:51 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: The Durdle Door (revised)
Replies: 11
Views: 1463

Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Thank you very much, Jackie, and sorry for the late response.
I really enjoyed reading your impressions and also enjoyed
looking at the painting again through your eyes.

Thanks for that.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sun May 03, 2020 12:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Adrift
Replies: 8
Views: 338

Re: Adrift

No, I think I need to learn how to read. :)
TrevorConway wrote:
Sun May 03, 2020 11:16 am
You think that phrase needs a bit of revision?
JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sun May 03, 2020 10:54 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: After
Replies: 7
Views: 464

Re: After

I find myself agreeing with Tristan, Perry. The first three lines are a good hook in my opinion but it trails off into the mundane after that. It's a pleasant enough read and I wasn't bored, finding the questions interesting. I also wondered if you were going for some kind of meter. It seems to read...
by JJWilliamson
Sun May 03, 2020 10:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1 + nudges] (was Visitors)
Replies: 22
Views: 912

Re: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1] (was Visitors)

Thanks for getting back to me, Not. . Hi JJ, beyond the technical I don't think this works that well. ...Ah well, fair enough. For me it falls down when I wonder what his mind perceives does not lead to any exploration/elaboration of this wondering. ...It's a simple thought, like the way I used to w...
by JJWilliamson
Sun May 03, 2020 10:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1 + nudges] (was Visitors)
Replies: 22
Views: 912

Re: Thoughts near Oaken Bank Woods [rev 1] (was Visitors)

Thanks a lot, Trevor, for dropping back in to look at the revision . Very nice, JJ - I like the brooders/suitors rhyme! And you've made the virus idea fit in a bit better, ...I hoped this extra stanza would provide a link from the romantic to the potentially tragic. I think, though I find "For" used...
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 02, 2020 9:33 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Encounter.
Replies: 9
Views: 549

Re: Encounter.

What a dilemma. I like both versions, Tony. The others have all made some fine comments, ones I found myself nodding to. I miss the coin/slot reference and agree about the mugging aspect. Some thoughts for your perusal: Revision Silently, slowly, ...Not bad but we all know the moon is silent and slo...
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 02, 2020 9:07 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Adrift
Replies: 8
Views: 338

Re: Adrift

I can totally sympathise with the speaker, having experienced this first hand. A friend of mine once said "Don't worry, it'll pass" and it did. Hang in there if this is current. I wonder if I would have picked up on the content without your explanation. I think I would, given the references. Persona...
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 02, 2020 8:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Without Explanation
Replies: 10
Views: 511

Re: Without Explanation

I thought it was about looks and behaviour, the superficial versus the complex.
If so, I like it. It's one of those I'd enjoy reading and thinking about on a plane.

Best

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 02, 2020 8:44 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Mac in The Poetry Shed
Replies: 3
Views: 248

Re: Mac in The Poetry Shed

I remember it, mac, and thoroughly enjoyed reading it again. Well done on this poem and the publication.

It's a beauty, mac, a real beauty.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 02, 2020 8:38 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Beautiful Soul
Replies: 4
Views: 311

Re: Beautiful Soul

Before I comment further, Anon, is this about the death of a much missed loved one? The reason I ask is because it struck me that way, and I have written several poems about crushing grief in the past. It's a tricky subject and very difficult to critique. If this is about love lost then Perry has of...
by JJWilliamson
Fri May 01, 2020 7:31 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: The Durdle Door (revised)
Replies: 11
Views: 1463

Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Thanks, mac and Mrs mac, for taking another look for me. Appreciated. Mrs Mac and I feel the figures are a tad tiny JJ. ...I'll accept a bit on the small side. :) Just me going for impact. There was a lot of short people out for a stroll that day. :) The island is definitely more an island. ...Ah, g...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Apr 30, 2020 9:37 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Bouquet Garni (Was April)
Replies: 10
Views: 524

Re: April

So much to like, Luke, and I'll try to offer more later. Initially, I enjoyed the sacrificial aspects, as if they were a last resort, and a fear for the future. The twenty pound note was intriguing and the entire opening section acted as a super hook. Later on I saw a worried parent considering the ...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Apr 30, 2020 9:17 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Cottage Pie
Replies: 10
Views: 498

Re: Cottage Pie

There's a lot to like, Trevor, and the effort is a valiant one, but for me it's a bit too long. Some lines could be cut without it affecting the content. My first thought, not too surprisingly, was to rhyme this poem using meter. Triple meter would work a treat but it's not easy. There's a heartines...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Apr 30, 2020 9:08 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dandelion (V4)
Replies: 11
Views: 509

Re: Dandelion (V4)

It's the second strophe that counts with the first being the set up. My preference is V3. I think V5 is too suggestive, given the gentleness of the other versions. You could leave something for the reader EG only " When I hear you stir/ how envious I am of the morning sun". Just a thought. Enjoyed B...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Apr 30, 2020 8:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Promised Land (v4)
Replies: 29
Views: 1211

Re: The Promised Land (v3)

Clever, entertaining poem, Not, and one that put a wry smile on my face. Your triple meter is very good, for the most part, but does falter in a few places, particularly the last line V3. . v3 The Promised Land Trumpety-Dumpety built a great wall ...perfect meter, and nice punning. of hot air and li...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Apr 30, 2020 8:22 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: The Durdle Door (revised)
Replies: 11
Views: 1463

Re: The Durdle Door (revised)

Thanks for getting back to me, Perry. I must admit that I like the changes, myself, for the very reasons you cite. The scale and perspective is much clearer with the revisions. Delighted you liked. JJ The changes are good. I like them. The figures on the beach give the picture more perspective.
by JJWilliamson
Wed Apr 29, 2020 6:02 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: The Durdle Door (revised)
Replies: 11
Views: 1463

Re: The Durdle Door

Thank you very much, Perry, for looking at this painting and for offering your impressions. Appreciated. The detail is likely not so apparent because of distance. With this in mind, and because of mac's concerns, I have revised the painting to show more in the way of scale. I've added some highlight...