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by JJWilliamson
Fri Dec 06, 2019 7:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Writing a Poem
Replies: 4
Views: 106

Re: Writing a Poem

Here's a pared down version, Sid See what you think of this very contemporary approach. I'm not sure how you feel about fragments but this seemed to distil your intentions, AND it's all yours. You wrote it. ripe orange tear rip thick skin reveal flesh dig deep juice spills overflowing squirting citr...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Dec 06, 2019 7:34 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Congratulations to Ray - London Grip
Replies: 3
Views: 74

Re: Congratulations to Ray - London Grip

Very well done, Ray.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Fri Dec 06, 2019 7:30 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Rapture
Replies: 7
Views: 581

Re: Rapture

Thank you very much, Jules. Your comments are spot on. Appreciated.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Fri Dec 06, 2019 7:27 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Facing the Matterhorn
Replies: 1
Views: 3

Facing the Matterhorn

Oil on canvas, 50 x 40 cms. Wet in wet from start to finish. Palette: Titanium white, Paynes grey, ivory black, cadmium yellow, cad red, phthalo blue, cerulean blue and blood. One year, many moons ago, my wife, Diane, travelled to Zermatt, Switzerland, on a school skiing trip. She still tells me tha...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Dec 06, 2019 7:19 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Mac's Watercolour Attempts December
Replies: 3
Views: 81

Re: Mac's Watercolour Attempts December

Excellent crit from Pauline, mac, for this very good drawing. Your colours are working, up to a point, and the depth is definitely coming through. So a lot of positives. I find developing a contrast between light and dark the easiest route to follow, although "easiest" is probably not the right word...
by JJWilliamson
Sat Nov 30, 2019 9:39 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: From Buda to Pest. (revision on top) (Over the Danube)
Replies: 8
Views: 797

Re: From Buda to Pest. (revision on top) (Over the Danube)

Thanks, Not and mac, for getting back to me. I'm using an old pc, now that I've cleared some disk space, because I have some issues with my usual laptop, hence the delays. ALWAYS something! Off to buy a new lead this morning to see if that helps. I'm pleased the new angle helps and, yes, I could do ...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Nov 24, 2019 5:02 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: From Buda to Pest. (revision on top) (Over the Danube)
Replies: 8
Views: 797

Re: Cruising the Danube

Thank you very much, Not, Perry, mac and Sid, for the great comments. Much appreciated. Yes, the title IS a bit dodgy, Not. Consider it changed. :) The paint was a bit wet and the angle somewhat misleading. I'll post a revision showing a different angle to show how it looks in reality (or closer to ...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Nov 24, 2019 9:37 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hi all!
Replies: 4
Views: 562

Re: Hi all!

Greetings and welcome, Riverrose.

So, SO many writers return to poetry as time passes, especially after commercial success, often citing poetry as their first love.

I hope you have a very fruitful and productive time here and look forward to reading your work.

Best

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Sun Nov 24, 2019 9:30 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Mac's Watercolour Attempts November (revised)
Replies: 8
Views: 452

Re: Mac's Watercolour Attempt

Good for you, mac! Delighted to see a painting from you and a watercolour to boot. I echo Pauline's comments regarding this medium because it IS very unforgiving. One of the great things about oil, as a medium, is it's forgiving nature. If you cock things up you can simply scrape it off and start ag...
by JJWilliamson
Wed Nov 20, 2019 10:08 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Rapture
Replies: 7
Views: 581

Re: Rapture

Thank you very much, Tristan, Sid, mac and Not, for the kind replies. Appreciated.

Yes, I think the title could do with a nudge, Not. Agreed. :)

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Tue Nov 19, 2019 7:24 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Rapture
Replies: 7
Views: 581

Rapture

My sonnet "Rapture", which was workshopped here, has managed a first place in November's IBPC competition.

http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/

Thanks to everyone for the great comments and suggestions along the way.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Tue Nov 19, 2019 8:30 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: From Buda to Pest. (revision on top) (Over the Danube)
Replies: 8
Views: 797

From Buda to Pest. (revision on top) (Over the Danube)

Oil on canvas board 51 x 31 cms. This was painted from a photo my son took when visiting Budapest on a city break. He asked me if I could paint this most iconic of Parliament buildings, so I agreed to give it a bash. No doubt I'll return at a later date to tidy it up, but for now, this is it. Incide...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Nov 15, 2019 1:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Poet Smith
Replies: 9
Views: 363

Re: The Poet Smith

An acrostic poem! HA!! Great! I missed it completely but the poem is great fun and cleverly put together. Enjoyed Best JJ A damned poet Carefully Exercising his craft Reminiscent of a smith striking glowing steel with the hammer, crashing, Sparking Iridescent upon the Cooler anvil. What shall he for...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Nov 15, 2019 1:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Changing Times (new ending?)
Replies: 13
Views: 481

Re: The Changing Times

I agree with the others, Perry. The last line weakens the impact, I think, because it brings an almighty conclusion that I believe would have carried more power had it remained unspoken. It's too presumptive for my taste. I've often wondered how many Inuit people still hang on to the old ways, whils...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Nov 15, 2019 1:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Matins (revision3)
Replies: 16
Views: 682

Re: Matins (revision)

I like how the morning's rituals are expressed as prayers, mac, and how you highlight the mundane. Enjoyed! revision Outside the stoop of clouds brood ..."broods" seemed right. Why the change? a hunchbacked cumulus, the weight of dreams will linger long into the breakfast hour. She switches on anoth...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Nov 15, 2019 12:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Bogie Man
Replies: 5
Views: 320

Re: Bogie Man

Philip Marlowe meets Rick Blaine, and who should walk in but Lisa Lund. "Of all the gin joints in all the towns in all the world, she walks into mine." Couldn't help but think of this, Jules, mainly because of the short, sharp delivery and matter-of-fact tone, which I enjoyed enormously. The writing...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Nov 07, 2019 12:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pageantry
Replies: 12
Views: 703

Re: Pageantry

Hi Lotus! The ephemeral nature of the tides makes S1 for me, where the temporary influences are juxtaposed with her altruism. The giving, unrestricted and absolute assertions are comforting in a naive sort of way. The imagery of the second strophe is wonderful, even to the point of including smells ...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Nov 07, 2019 11:55 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Jammie Dodgers (revision3)
Replies: 22
Views: 872

Re: Jammie Dodgers (revision2)

I see you've ditched "anger", mac. Good! Now what does hwyl mean? Just checking.
Ah, passion, spirit and a sense of direction or purpose. Is that it?

Completely missed the four humours thing btw. Is it relevant?

Still enjoying.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Thu Nov 07, 2019 11:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Unwrapping
Replies: 11
Views: 770

Re: Unwrapping

Ha! The close is crushingly unimaginative. The speaker has very high expectations of his partner, yet does he contemplate a Superman costume for himself, a Tarzan outfit or a Rambo on heat kit? Nope! Socks and undies. I AM depressed. :) A very entertaining sonnet with some super rhymes and slant-rhy...
by JJWilliamson
Tue Nov 05, 2019 7:00 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Congratulations to Seth and Tristan
Replies: 2
Views: 460

Re: Congratulations to Seth and Tristan

Read and enjoyed them all, mac!

Well done Seth and Tristan for some super poems.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Tue Nov 05, 2019 6:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Jammie Dodgers (revision3)
Replies: 22
Views: 872

Re: Jammie Dodgers (revised)

Enjoyed this one, mac, as always with yours. I like the wordplay with the title and wondered who was dodging who or what, in a good way. There's a lot of dodging going on. :) You have three beats per line until the last two. I checked, just for the fun of it, fancying there was quite a tight rhythm ...
by JJWilliamson
Tue Oct 29, 2019 6:55 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The bookshop antiquarian removes her glasses (revision5)
Replies: 23
Views: 1012

Re: Marlowe (revision3)

And so it all fits neatly into place. I did wonder if this was a snippet but couldn't be sure.

You begin to interest me...vaguely :)

Actually, that's a cracking line.

An ekphrastic piece methinks. Good to see.

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Tue Oct 29, 2019 6:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The bookshop antiquarian removes her glasses (revision5)
Replies: 23
Views: 1012

Re: The bookshop antiquarian removes her glasses (revision2)

It reminds me of an opening tease, mac, something to arouse the curiosity. I was left wondering about the girl and what it all means,
but in a good way. Rev 2 is easier to follow and the split helps..

Enjoyed.

Best

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Tue Oct 29, 2019 5:54 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Postpartum (Version 2)
Replies: 9
Views: 604

Re: Postpartum

So much to enjoy with this one, Luke, but like Tristan I found one or two lines to be distracting. S1...Takes some unravelling. I got the milk reference and the holding cell/room but the parchment, covenant and infinitesimal small hours were a stretch, at least they were for me. However, I DO have m...
by JJWilliamson
Mon Oct 28, 2019 6:37 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tyrone n Jessica
Replies: 12
Views: 571

Re: Tyrone n Jessica

Enjoyed this, Ray, very much in fact. The rhythms and rhymes work for me. Top drawer, I'd say. The close is weak by comparison, but you've a rhyme to consider and that can sometimes force the hand. Could they arrange to meet somewhere else? A strong word would help to tie this one up nicely. I used ...