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by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 16, 2019 6:02 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Onshore Wind
Replies: 4
Views: 111

Re: Onshore Wind

Thanks again, mac Apologies JJ. I didn't articulate my viewpoint very well. I guess it is the medium that has drawn my eye to composition. In reality I would be absorbed by colour and application of paint. That is my Art interest. And afterall 'waves' by definition come in lines and therefore when f...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Jun 14, 2019 12:42 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Onshore Wind
Replies: 4
Views: 111

Re: Onshore Wind

Thanks for looking at this one mac and thanks for the comments. Appreciated. I thought I HAD broken the waves closest to the shore or are we talking about different waves? Incidentally, the palette was: Titanium white, phthalo blue, French ultramarine, cad red, cad yellow, burnt umber, Payne's grey....
by JJWilliamson
Fri Jun 14, 2019 6:41 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3
Replies: 26
Views: 763

Re: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3

Thanks again, Leaf

I wish my lupins were as good as those shown on the link you provided. Top-notch lupins!

Never thought I'd hear myself say that. :)

Best

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Thu Jun 13, 2019 6:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Swirls (version 2)
Replies: 23
Views: 242

Re: Swirls

Beautiful pantoum, Leaf, and very enjoyable. The iambic tetrameter is perfect to my ear, although I scan an extra syllable in places, notably 'the' before 'piano'. You could easily drop 'the' from that line. I'm not sure how it concludes or if it kind of peters out a bit. Instinctively I missed a co...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Jun 13, 2019 5:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Elevenie for one cygnet
Replies: 7
Views: 138

Re: Elevenie for one cygnet

Hi Leaf I really hope Solo is still ticking along nicely. A most enjoyable elevenie, even more so because I know the background story. Your title might help out in that department if you were to develop it a little. You've used a touch of licence in the close, but that's ok because it doesn't affect...
by JJWilliamson
Thu Jun 13, 2019 5:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A reluctant dog and dutiful owners (revision4)
Replies: 22
Views: 295

Re: A reluctant dog and dutiful owners (revision3)

Hi mac I love a good a rain poem and this IS a good rain poem. :) The original definitely had a urination theme lurking secretly beneath the surface, and I must say it put a big smile on my face. BUT! That wasn't your initial intent and so the revisions began. The second suggests a bit of outdoor ro...
by JJWilliamson
Mon Jun 10, 2019 5:24 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Onshore Wind
Replies: 4
Views: 111

Onshore Wind

Oil on canvas 50 x 40 cms. This is a simple painting of the sea at South Shields main beach. Third of four paintings. Interestingly, for me, this is the kind of seascape I like best. Just the sea and a few gulls. See what you think. tTe palette was: Titanium white, phthalo blue, French ultramarine, ...
by JJWilliamson
Mon Jun 10, 2019 5:19 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Causey Pike
Replies: 8
Views: 1001

Re: Causey Pike

Hi Pauline Thank you very much for the detailed reply. I enjoyed it. :) My wife bought me some canvas boards for Christmas, which was very thoughtful of her, but they were a bit coarse, too rough for delicate brush work. So, here is my first palette knife painting for your perusal. I used the small ...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Jun 07, 2019 6:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3
Replies: 26
Views: 763

Re: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3

Thank you very much, Not, Leaf, mac and Jules for the further comments and suggestions. Great stuff! Sorry about the late response but I've been mulling this over for some time. . Hi JJ, hope you enjoyed your digression. ...I did indeed. Just a passing thought, or three: you'd need to tweak L4 but h...
by JJWilliamson
Fri Jun 07, 2019 6:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I was turning 13 (V4) Portobello Road
Replies: 16
Views: 242

Re: Portobello Road

I enjoyed this rendering of life at the market, Jules, although I had to read it a few times to follow the flow. The run on sentence has its merits but part of me longed for a breath pause. The cap's didn't help much and actually hindered my progression, even though I know you're partial to your hea...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 02, 2019 10:37 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Usurped Excerpts
Replies: 3
Views: 112

Re: Usurped Excerpts

An intriguing and somewhat mysterious poem, Lotus, and one that ignites the imagination. The Guerilla and war threat is followed by an extraordinary image of 'mother' facing towards the land, not the sea. To sit with your back to the sea represents the awareness of a deep threat, with the ocean offe...
by JJWilliamson
Sun Jun 02, 2019 10:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Brent Aubade
Replies: 19
Views: 348

Re: Broken

The lack of Romanticism in this one makes it for me, Jules, (which was unexpected) where the observer approaches the scene with a fresh eye. I'm also partial to your avifauna poem because you've given me a sense of place with so few words; at least that's how I'm reading it. The starlings and pigeon...
by JJWilliamson
Sat Jun 01, 2019 6:49 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3
Replies: 26
Views: 763

Re: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3

Morning, Not and Jules, and what a fine morning it is. I'm off to the Lakes today to see some old relatives and the weather's looking good. Sorry, I digress. . Thanks for the further feedback and thoughts, Not Afternoon JJ. Yes, I don't think 'everything' works, maybe 'all'? But both are are bit wea...
by JJWilliamson
Thu May 30, 2019 11:28 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Causey Pike
Replies: 8
Views: 1001

Re: Causey Pike

Thank you very much, Lotus, for the analysis and comments. Always appreciated.

The dimensions are rather small and a little bit odd at 31 x 26 cms.

I enjoy using the knife, mainly for the effects it can bring to a painting, but to use it exclusively is something of a challenge.

Best

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Thu May 30, 2019 11:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3
Replies: 26
Views: 763

Re: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 2

Hi Lotus Thanks for dropping in to share your thoughts. Much appreciated. dear JJ i wish i could offer you more yet i am not one at one with rules and licenses though i admire your choice for such challenges so know i keep reading but am not qualified to offer seasoned comment on this one ...Good to...
by JJWilliamson
Thu May 30, 2019 6:23 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3
Replies: 26
Views: 763

Re: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 2

Morning, Not I hope this day finds you well. . Hi JJ, it wasn't the 'interesting' that made me laugh, it was the (doth protest too much) 'genuinely' that did the trick. ...Yes, I realised that. I used 'genuinely' to show sincerity. It's a light moment. :) While you're cogitating, what about revisiti...
by JJWilliamson
Wed May 29, 2019 6:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3
Replies: 26
Views: 763

Re: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 2

Thanks again, Not, for some super thoughts, suggestions and the exchange. Appreciated. . Hi JJ, yes it was a cross-posting. So, revision 2 ... Like the change to 'Violas' (resolves the ambiguity issue as far as I'm concerned), but I still struggle with 'force', might they be 'demanding'? ( 'merrily'...
by JJWilliamson
Wed May 29, 2019 6:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Lady from Madrid (revision)
Replies: 8
Views: 183

Re: Lady from Madrid

Hi RC I love the title and am intrigued by this lady from Madrid, so much so that it merits a second and third read. I will come back later to offer you some feedback, but in the meantime I'll just say I enjoyed this very much. It had a enigmatic feel, or rather she did, that I found captivating. Be...
by JJWilliamson
Tue May 28, 2019 5:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3
Replies: 26
Views: 763

Re: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 2

Hello again, Not I wonder if we cross-posted or is this a crit of the revision? Can't be sure. They are bashful, of course, given their coy nature. That's "how" they are. Come on! :) I get that the pansies are bashful (in a strictly botanical sense :) ) but 'forcing' (which surely relates to the tit...
by JJWilliamson
Mon May 27, 2019 2:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey
Replies: 17
Views: 506

Re: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey

A super little vignette, Not, and one that carries the humanity and mutual respect of all who fight on the battlefield. It's a bit like the WW1 footy game, on Christmas Day, between the German and Brit troops, where the human spirit prevailed. I also like the title and how it refers to the mutual ag...
by JJWilliamson
Mon May 27, 2019 9:22 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A royal birth (version 2)
Replies: 26
Views: 885

Re: A royal birth (version 2)

I hope Solo makes it, Leaf. Keep us posted, please. I like your revisions and tend to agree with mac about 'chortling snorts'. I'm wondering if it is the adults that are snorting. This is usually a defensive or warning strategy adopted by mute swans, often accompanied by loud hissing. If so, is that...
by JJWilliamson
Mon May 27, 2019 9:02 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Trow Rock from the Dunes
Replies: 7
Views: 514

Re: Trow Rock from the Dunes

Nee botha!

J
by JJWilliamson
Mon May 27, 2019 9:01 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Hole in the wall
Replies: 10
Views: 584

Re: Hole in the wall

AH Pauline! The photo shows the bridge perfectly. That's pretty much what I meant.

Incidentally, I think it's quite brilliant of you to have spotted this opportunity, and the more I look the more I like it.
What is particularly gratifying is the discussion this has engendered. Now that's art!

JJ
by JJWilliamson
Mon May 27, 2019 7:36 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Windblown (triple elevenie) revision 3
Replies: 26
Views: 763

Re: Windblown (triple elevenie) revised

Thank you very much for the comments and suugestions, Not, Leaf and mac. Some excellent points there. . Hi JJ, interesting form. Can see how this could polish up nicely. S1 I don't think L3 satisfies the structural requirements, specifically 'how' ...They are bashful, of course, given their coy natu...
by JJWilliamson
Sat May 25, 2019 10:37 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: But to me
Replies: 22
Views: 589

Re: But to me

I like this very much, Harbal, and will take a closer look later if I can, especially regarding metre. Are you UK based, USA, Australia, New Zealand etc? I need to know because we stress certain words differently and this, of course, will affect how I view your metre. The same can be said for spelli...