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by kozmikdave
Mon Jan 30, 2012 8:18 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Poets’ Graves Blues Train
Replies: 455
Views: 125614

Re: Poets’ Graves Blues Train

I take that blues train every day
But the fare don't come so cheap.
I take that blues train most every day,
But the fare don't come too cheap
Between the Blues Train and my woman,
I have to live here on the street.




Been a long time, Marten.... Too long.
by kozmikdave
Sun Jan 08, 2012 6:13 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Those words
Replies: 13
Views: 692

Re: Those words

Entertaining replies on this one, CMB. (Does no one know how to use a spell checker?) You certainly got a reaction. I was struck by the unintelligibilty of it all. I am hoping young Gavin isn't representing Australians - I seemed to see some reference there. Ah, but to your poem.... I was struck by....
by kozmikdave
Fri Jan 06, 2012 11:31 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: (Acrostic) Love came down at Christmas
Replies: 4
Views: 407

Re: (Acrostic) Love came down at Christmas

Hey Anaisnais This is ambitious. You certainly put (your?) beliefs out there. I have a couple of suggestions: The first is a nit-pick. Try playing with the text editor and make the first letter of each line BOLD . I found the repeated first letter gets in the way of a simple read. The second is a pl...
by kozmikdave
Thu Jan 05, 2012 11:30 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Insomnia (edited and retitled)
Replies: 9
Views: 508

Re: Insomnia (edited and retitled)

Hi Richard I prefer the revised edition. Good imagery in both versions, but (dare I say it) crisper in the second. My only real criticism is the last line of the first stanza. The metre is not consistant with the other lines. (...or perhaps it is my accent which makes it so jarring!) Overall, a plea...
by kozmikdave
Thu Jan 05, 2012 11:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Here I stand
Replies: 5
Views: 317

Re: Here I stand

I agree with Richard about the imagery, but I love the last three lines. They were a pleasant surprise to this reader. It immediately took me to visions of the American adventists of the 1840's standing on their rooftops in white robes, waiting for the second coming of Christ. Any shared futile exer...
by kozmikdave
Thu Jan 05, 2012 10:59 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Poets’ Graves Blues Train
Replies: 455
Views: 125614

Re: Poets’ Graves Blues Train

So sick of this vociferating
On th' trestle bridge over th' vale
I’m so sick of this vociferating
On th' bridge over th' vale
Screaming it out so vehemently
I’m waiting for you to inhale.
by kozmikdave
Thu Jan 05, 2012 10:50 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: It's been a while
Replies: 7
Views: 2486

Re: It's been a while

Thanks

Not sure how active I can be on the site but its a long time since the muse has whispered in my ear, and I'm hoping for a great year. Looking forward to seeing what everyone is doing.
by kozmikdave
Wed Jan 04, 2012 10:15 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Guitar with 8 necks !
Replies: 7
Views: 1029

Re: Guitar with 8 necks !

Bit of a cheat really. The top was a mandolin and the next was a ukulele.

Nice to see you still around Geoff.
by kozmikdave
Wed Jan 04, 2012 10:09 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: It's been a while
Replies: 7
Views: 2486

It's been a while

Gidday from Brisbane, Australia. Just dropped in to see who I can see. Been far too long really.

Have a great new year, everyone.
by kozmikdave
Sun Nov 01, 2009 4:30 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: I hurt Myself Today I Did
Replies: 15
Views: 431

Re: I hurt Myself Today I Did

Gidday Lovely The constant tossing around of NIN "Hurt" lines made it somewhat unreadable for me. Great lyrics slashed (there's an irony for you). Bowie used to do the same sort of thing, but not with lines from well-known works. I must look up his sources. A good experiment in dadaism but it didn't...
by kozmikdave
Sun Nov 01, 2009 4:20 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7524
Views: 753678

Re: Haiku Train

Slurping tasty brains
can pass on kuru - so you
walk like a zombie
by kozmikdave
Sun Nov 01, 2009 3:32 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Poets’ Graves Blues Train
Replies: 455
Views: 125614

Re: Poets’ Graves Blues Train

That woman ain't a patch on you, girl
But she helps me through the night
She ain't no patch on you
But she helps me through the lonesome night
She cooks and cleans for nothin', babe
And then turns out the light
by kozmikdave
Sun Nov 01, 2009 2:56 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love Letter (with mp3)
Replies: 4
Views: 613

Re: Love Letter (with mp3)

Gidday Gardenhead I liked the simplicity of this. Reminded me of "Something in the Way" - Nirvana. I can't say I understand it yet, but I obviously need to look at some of your poetry for a hint. The imagery is curiously surprising as the chorus strikes. Technical question: are you using a box to al...
by kozmikdave
Sun Nov 01, 2009 2:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Never Marry a Burton Boy
Replies: 4
Views: 387

Re: Never Marry a Burton Boy

Gidday Geoff The link was one of the better ones I've seen. It has a few references I'd not seen before. I omitted the one about the Burton who discovered the source of the Nile (Burton & Speke, I think), but very good all the same. Using it as a line in the song didn't (still doesn't) seem appropri...
by kozmikdave
Sun Oct 18, 2009 12:31 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: the one and only
Replies: 4
Views: 652

Re: the one and only

Love the clip. Ah, you can't beat the old formula of chucking in a 15 minute guitar solo of that standard. Saw Neil young recently and it was that in almost every song. Never tired of it. So I wonder what was in that "cigarette" Slash was smoking? I agree with your abhorence of losing all those frie...
by kozmikdave
Sun Oct 18, 2009 12:14 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Paris
Replies: 12
Views: 1548

Re: Paris

Hey Beau, I commented on this almost a year ago and just got back to hear the piece being played. I like the sound generally, althought I'm with Marten about the maracas. But I find playing percussion to be such a foreign enterprise, it is better than I would have done, I'm sure. I don't know that t...
by kozmikdave
Sun Oct 18, 2009 12:00 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Never Marry a Burton Boy
Replies: 4
Views: 387

Re: Never Marry a Burton Boy

No recording yet, my laptop is a bit overloaded and is causing difficulties, so I might invest in another desktop dedicated to recording. I might do a really simple recording of it using a minidisk and see how that goes. My father was Wide Bay speedway champion. All his brothers rode as well. I used...
by kozmikdave
Sat Oct 17, 2009 4:55 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Never Marry a Burton Boy
Replies: 4
Views: 387

Never Marry a Burton Boy

When she was six or seven Up in Charters Towers Her father read a story from the newspaper Some boys from down the south Made gunpowder in a jar They set themselves on fire while they played CHORUS 1 [and he said…] [tab][/tab]Never marry a Burton boy [tab][/tab]Never fire a loose cannon [tab][/tab]N...
by kozmikdave
Sat Oct 17, 2009 4:23 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7524
Views: 753678

Re: Haiku Train

We watch film on-line,
wading into pop corn and
sofacose staring.
by kozmikdave
Sat Oct 17, 2009 4:12 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Gidday again!
Replies: 6
Views: 1074

Re: Gidday again!

Been playing a bit. Got a gig tomorrow, actually. I am involved with running a music venue called "Brisbane Unplugged" - or "The BUg". Not very unplugged in reality, but we put up acoustic-based music ranging from traditional folk to roots and blues. "Folk" is a wide net these days. Been going for 6...
by kozmikdave
Fri Oct 16, 2009 12:11 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Gidday again!
Replies: 6
Views: 1074

Gidday again!

Hi all, I've been in hiding for over a year. Thought I'd drop in and say "Hi". A lot of names I haven't seen before, but some of you old stagers still about. Makes me feel homesick. I might spend some time here again. I haven't written much over the past year. Have to see if I can still put two word...
by kozmikdave
Fri Oct 16, 2009 12:04 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Poets’ Graves Blues Train
Replies: 455
Views: 125614

Re: Poets’ Graves Blues Train

My matchstick pointin' at the rain
It ignores my soggy cigarette
Matchstick pointin' at the rain
Ignores my soggy cigarette
I'm just aching for long slow draw
And tear off this Nicorette



Hehe, this train going nowhere!
by kozmikdave
Sun Jan 11, 2009 7:46 pm
Forum: Barrie
Topic: VERY SAD NEWS
Replies: 40
Views: 19242

Re: VERY SAD NEWS

Gidday Been stuck hre in London without the internet (mostly) but I heard the sad news from Geoff. A great loss to all who have had the privilege of communicating with. He was intelligent, knowledgeable, gentle, funny and generous (lots more accolades from me). All I can do is echo the sentiments of...
by kozmikdave
Tue Dec 30, 2008 12:59 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Poets’ Graves Blues Train
Replies: 455
Views: 125614

Re: Poets’ Graves Blues Train

I can't complain about you baby
Though you never done me any good
I can't complain about you lady
Though you never done me any good
This time you supply the fire
And pretty mama, I'll supply the wood.
by kozmikdave
Tue Dec 30, 2008 12:53 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Caveman Blues
Replies: 4
Views: 734

Re: Caveman Blues

Gidday The rhythm and rhyme of this reminds me of Ian Dury (Hit me with your rhythm stick.) That's a good thing. Whatever you were on the night before, there should be more of it. I've had to temporarily leave Australia as the flocks of kangaroos keep landing on my roof. The mob of kangaroos in the ...