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by David
Fri Jul 19, 2019 4:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Sun-Struck
Replies: 3
Views: 41

Re: Sun-Struck

I rather like this, Perry, but I'm going to do what you hate. I'm going to rearrange your poem. I'm not going to rewrite it. (I have cut it a bit.) But I like this ... The sun has been spoken about too much by petroleum-coiffed TV weathermen recently released from Chortling School. The sun hides dem...
by David
Thu Jul 18, 2019 6:38 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today
Replies: 12
Views: 93

Re: A poem that I read today

Nice one, Mac. I have been through the Collected Poems - not that many, sadly - a couple of times, and I thought I didn't remember this one. Until I got to the last line. I remembered that.

Cheers

David
by David
Thu Jul 18, 2019 6:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Serendipity-doodah
Replies: 15
Views: 188

Re: Serendipity-doodah

Perfect, Geoff! I actually think I remember seeing that film at the cinema. Not when it first came out, perhaps. True story And so it is. Sort of. Ryder, indeed. You've not been around for a while. Hope all's well with you. Oh Not, I don't think I want baskets. But thanks for the thought. Cheers all...
by David
Wed Jul 17, 2019 6:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Serendipity-doodah
Replies: 15
Views: 188

Re: Serendipity-doodah

Thanks all. You've all been very kind. Thank you! On particular points ... Geoff, that's a very reasonable quibble about "consented". Let me think about that. JJ, Not ... there is no end to my ignorance of the bee's anatomy. Wasn't quite sure how to describe it. Mac, thanks. You are not the first to...
by David
Wed Jul 17, 2019 6:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Serendipity-doodah
Replies: 15
Views: 188

Re: Serendipity-doodah

Hi Perry. I will check with Mrs C about the bees. Nope, the workers - who collect the pollen - are definitely females. The males are drones, and pretty useless apart from the one lucky lottery winner who gets to impregnate the queen. I must say I prefer "unlooked-for". I'm not sure you're familiar w...
by David
Wed Jul 17, 2019 4:57 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Roy's greatest song ...
Replies: 8
Views: 111

Re: Roy's greatest song ...

Like this? Brilliant!

by David
Wed Jul 17, 2019 4:30 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Still alive.
Replies: 3
Views: 221

Re: Still alive.

Only just spotted this. (I was on holiday.)

This is genuinely good to know.

Cheers

David
by David
Tue Jul 16, 2019 5:19 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Getting my poetry published
Replies: 8
Views: 126

Re: Getting my poetry published

Our Great Progenitor, here at PG - now largely dormant, sadly - has a great poem on this subject: Zen and the Art of Submitting Poetry Rejection does not make you a bad poet. Acceptance does not make you a good one. Therefore, neither should trouble you. Chase after fame, however, and you put your ...
by David
Tue Jul 16, 2019 4:41 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Roy's greatest song ...
Replies: 8
Views: 111

Re: Roy's greatest song ...

ray miller wrote:
Tue Jul 16, 2019 9:40 am
The song David posted is the Cricketer song then, is it?
It is. I loves it, I do.

But how did you do that, Mac? There used to be a working YouTube app (or whatever) here, but it don't work no more.
by David
Tue Jul 16, 2019 4:35 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Epistle to Ms Austen
Replies: 14
Views: 190

Re: Epistle to Ms Austen

I suppose the first and last lines could sound a bit like her, but I don't think what comes in between does. And she'd probably rather gnaw her right foot off than write something like "For muddles marinate in solitude" (although I fear you'll refute that with some well chosen quotation now). But th...
by David
Mon Jul 15, 2019 6:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Flevoland - revised
Replies: 8
Views: 132

Re: Flevoland

I lived in Nederland for a few years, back in the fabulous 80s, but I don't think I ever visited Flevoland. It had something of a reputation for provincial dreariness, if I remember correctly. I can see how the poem might work in relation to it, though, although I don't see what is distinctly Flevol...
by David
Sun Jul 14, 2019 6:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Gay Pride
Replies: 11
Views: 194

Re: Gay Pride

Well ... S3, at least, is a little prosaic, I think. That could do with some touching up. Very nice closing line, anyway.

Cheers

David
by David
Sun Jul 14, 2019 5:16 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Getting my poetry published
Replies: 8
Views: 126

Re: Getting my poetry published

I don't know, Perry! I can see the attraction of the blog thing, but it might be dispiriting to do that and still no garner no attention from the outside world. I thought there were quite a lot of formalist mags - on-line and off - in the States now? The only thing I've submitted to Rattle - ages ag...
by David
Sun Jul 14, 2019 10:36 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Epistle to Ms Austen
Replies: 14
Views: 190

Re: Epistle to Ms Austen

I read this when it was only called Epistle , and I didn't pick up on Jane at all. Perhaps I should have done. I'll try again now. It isn't too late to read one of her novels. Which one do you recommend most highly? Pride and Prejudice is the great crowd-pleaser, Perry - and rightly so. I'm pretty s...
by David
Sun Jul 14, 2019 9:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Serendipity-doodah
Replies: 15
Views: 188

Serendipity-doodah

I had just stopped to admire a bumble-bee reversing out of a foxglove's flower, an amiable burglar with her swag between her feet, when a butterfly alighted on my shoulder. I stood stock still, frozen by this chance promotion, this unlooked-for epaulette, and hardly daring to breathe, as though the ...
by David
Sun Jul 14, 2019 9:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Pub's Boot Room (revised)
Replies: 21
Views: 260

Re: The Pub's Boot Room (revised)

Is "banter" the only change? Not a word I'm fond of. It is redolent of what the Americans call "locker-room" talk to me, with a vaguely nasty, often misogynistic edge, which I'm sure can't be appropriate here. I much prefer laughter. To almost everything. Cheers David P.S. Mac, you're mocking my cha...
by David
Sat Jul 13, 2019 6:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Pub's Boot Room (revised)
Replies: 21
Views: 260

Re: The Pub's Boot Room (revised)

Nice one, JJ. Very evocative, both of pubs and of fells. I'm a fan of both.

https://ringobellskendal.webs.com/

Looks good! I'd like to think this is within walking distance for you.

Cheers!

David
by David
Fri Jul 12, 2019 6:36 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Roy's greatest song ...
Replies: 8
Views: 111

Re: Roy's greatest song ...

Ah well, if we're talking in fairness, I would have to admit that I don't know an awful lot of his other songs either. But, if any of them are better then this, I'll be very surprised. And mightily impressed.
by David
Thu Jul 11, 2019 7:15 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Roy's greatest song ...
Replies: 8
Views: 111

Roy's greatest song ...

No, not the Big O, or the Big W. Big H.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GJCqECUmx44&fbclid=IwAR29KRqMg5BVgSp8csSvZ3hK_hx-Alx3rrE9tGnIXvtnISgQVfPJbDd5CJw
by David
Thu Jul 11, 2019 6:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Shack Kerouac
Replies: 10
Views: 144

Re: Shack Kerouac

It's years - decades, even - since my only romp through On the Road, but this seems like a great and resonant evocation of it. Could be a bebop solo in itself, Jules.

Cheers

David
by David
Thu Jul 11, 2019 6:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Community Gardening At St Peter's (revision)
Replies: 23
Views: 278

Re: Community Gardening At St Peter's

Terrific, Mac. Really good. A new favourite of yours of mine. I only deplore the presence of an apostrophe in "clothe's" (although I'm really not sure what you're trying to say there). And I think there's two t's - okay, make that three - in "tattooed". Somehow I can imagine this, in pictorial form,...
by David
Thu Jul 11, 2019 6:31 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: To the Murderer of Edgar Garzon
Replies: 8
Views: 155

Re: To the Murderer of Edgar Garzon

The title, and some of the poem, remind me of one of Bob's early protest songs - The Lonesome Death of Hattie Carroll, that sort of thing. So it's sort of noble, and lofty, and angry. but It does also seem rather distanced from the crime, as though you were looking down at it from far away, or from ...
by David
Wed Jul 10, 2019 4:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: History Speaks for Me (was TWEET...) v4
Replies: 15
Views: 321

Re: History Speaks for Me (was TWEET...) v4

I have to say that I think you're trying to satirise the unsatirisable, RC. Nothing you can invent could be as ridiculous as what he comes up with himself on a regular basis. I agree with your sentiments, but I think you're wasting your breath. On the other hand, it may have been a healthy outlet fo...
by David
Tue Jul 09, 2019 5:25 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Onshore Wind (revised)
Replies: 22
Views: 593

Re: Onshore Wind

Perry wrote:
Wed Jul 03, 2019 9:37 am
Now that I am using the Active Topics link to see everything on the board, I am suddenly seeing things -- like paintings -- that I didn't know that people were posting.
Yay! That's the attraction of it, isn't it, Perry?
by David
Tue Jul 09, 2019 4:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Interplanetary Love (revision 4)
Replies: 28
Views: 804

Re: Interplanetary Love (revision 3)

I like what you're trying to say, JJ, but I still don't think you're saying it. The first line is, again, very arresting, but sets up a conundrum that the next two lines don't solve. If distance was love ... It's arresting, but it doesn't give you a lot to play with. Distance and love are a forbiddi...