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by David
Tue Apr 09, 2019 4:35 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: National Poetry Competition
Replies: 7
Views: 211

Re: National Poetry Competition

I done it.
by David
Tue Apr 09, 2019 3:15 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Interplanetary Love (revision 2)
Replies: 13
Views: 232

Re: Interplanetary Love

I like the idea of distance being an emotion - there's the makings of a nice little equation there - but I don't think your next two lines develop that idea. So either you change them or you change the opening. But I like the opening.

Cheers

David
by David
Tue Apr 09, 2019 2:54 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: National Poetry Competition
Replies: 7
Views: 211

Re: National Poetry Competition

Very good, Joao. (I see that's exactly what I said at the time.)

Well done!

David
by David
Fri Apr 05, 2019 7:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A Lapsed Catholic at Prayer
Replies: 7
Views: 198

Re: A Lapsed Catholic at Prayer

Charles, I don't like to come between a lapsed Catholic and his God, but I like the conceit of this while agreeing with Perry that more metrical and wittier would be better. I admire your argumentativeness, your willingness to buttonhole the Big Feller, but would like it more if it were a bit punchi...
by David
Fri Apr 05, 2019 4:10 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Tyranny of Love
Replies: 3
Views: 129

Re: The Tyranny of Love

A nice alternative view on the Cities of the Plain, Perry. (You've read Proust, I presume. Male love abounds. Not sure if that's the appropriate term nowadays.)

The (alleged) oddness of God is not disputed. Not by me, anyway.

Cheers

David
by David
Sat Mar 30, 2019 4:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Sweet
Replies: 10
Views: 332

Re: Sweet

Not another poem about the evolution of trichromatic vision in primates! This is getting tedious.

Actually, the cones start to make sense now. I'll revisit this, now that I have a new way of seeing it.
by David
Fri Mar 29, 2019 6:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Sweet
Replies: 10
Views: 332

Re: Sweet

"Two-coners" seems completely resistant to Googling, which doesn't help.
by David
Thu Mar 28, 2019 6:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Tenant
Replies: 14
Views: 446

Re: The Tenant

Yes, I like it too. And I agree, conversational poems definitely have their charms - often more so than more strenuously poetical things. There's always a danger that the heat on such poems is turned down too low, so that things start to get less interesting, but I think this one works pretty well. ...
by David
Tue Mar 26, 2019 8:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On Gleneedle Road
Replies: 16
Views: 437

Re: On Gleneedle Road

Isn't "it" a linguistic device in itself? You might be right, Perry. It sounds right, but I'm not very good on the technical names for such things. Thanks Not. I may overuse "the" - but just try not using it - but here I think the "the" x 2 are opposing terms - it is one thing, not another - so I'm...
by David
Tue Mar 26, 2019 6:48 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The parishioners’ trail (tweaked)
Replies: 10
Views: 312

Re: The parishioners’ trail

I really like it, Luke. I find it repays repeated readings - always nice to be able to say (even if quite difficult, with all those re- words). If you must have "abandoned" on a line of its own, I think I'd quite like it like this: The path to St Denys’ is lined with saplings boxed in post and wire....
by David
Tue Mar 26, 2019 5:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Round (V2)
Replies: 14
Views: 422

Re: Round (V2)

bjondon wrote:
Tue Mar 26, 2019 3:06 pm
Thank you David, . . . The Clash or the nursery round?
The Clash, Jules. Showing my age there. Again.

But I very much prefer it uncentred. Don't know why, but I do. It somehow looks too neat now, like a suburban lawn.

Cheers

David
by David
Mon Mar 25, 2019 7:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Round (V2)
Replies: 14
Views: 422

Re: Round (V2)

I think this is really good, Jules. It absolutely captures that sense of the ongoing urban buzz (which I vaguely remember, and which my daughter now lives in) of the city that never sleeps (or only sleeps five hours a night). It reminded me - in a muted way - of Lahndahn's Burning . Which is no mean...
by David
Sat Mar 23, 2019 7:37 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Pontypool Park: A Formative Year (revision5)
Replies: 31
Views: 1197

Re: Pontypool Park: A Formative Year (revision4)

Okay, we're back to something good now, but I miss the crisps. Who cares what flavour? But the salt and vinegar is a nice touch (and, I imagine, almost metaphorical. Damn these metaphors.)

Cheers

David
by David
Sat Mar 23, 2019 4:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Grooming
Replies: 11
Views: 373

Re: Grooming

I'm a fan of this thread of your work, Ray, as you know not - that I dislike the other stuff, but this subject often brings out something special in you - and I think I only need to say that this is another good one. None of the obscurities reported by others seemed that obscure to me, but that's th...
by David
Fri Mar 22, 2019 9:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On Gleneedle Road
Replies: 16
Views: 437

Re: On Gleneedle Road

Phew! Thanks Tristan. (But the "it" is the noise. This seems to be a slippery little thing.)
by David
Fri Mar 22, 2019 8:40 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On Gleneedle Road
Replies: 16
Views: 437

Re: On Gleneedle Road

Firebird wrote:
Fri Mar 22, 2019 8:28 pm
I didn’t get the drunken river. Nice image. Worthy of a poem I think.
But not the current one, Tristan? Ouch.
by David
Fri Mar 22, 2019 8:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On Gleneedle Road
Replies: 16
Views: 437

Re: On Gleneedle Road

Oh lads. Not everything has to be an extended metaphor. And this isn't. It's just me, walking up the Gleneedle Road, which is very narrow and has high hedges, so that you have to keep an eye out for traffic coming both ways. And, after the heavy rain, I did find myself turning round to watch out for...
by David
Tue Mar 19, 2019 8:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On Gleneedle Road
Replies: 16
Views: 437

On Gleneedle Road

Looking back, there is no car
labouring through the lower gears
between these high hedges.

It is only the river,
grown garrulous with rain.
by David
Tue Mar 19, 2019 7:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Global
Replies: 9
Views: 869

Re: Globular (formerly - Globe-Tastic/The Angloshericals)

Sorry, Jules, I'm just not getting it. That doesn't mean I'm not enjoying it. I am, in a pleasantly befuddled way. I like the energy of your poems, even when I'm not sure what they're doing. They're often mystifying, but at least not drearily.

Cheers

David
by David
Sun Mar 17, 2019 7:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Nominate features!
Replies: 90
Views: 37085

Re: Nominate features!

Spose I'd better do something about it then.

Done. Check out Current Features, Luke.

Cheers

David
by David
Sun Mar 17, 2019 7:53 pm
Forum: Current Features
Topic: Birch Polypore (revised)
Replies: 33
Views: 1922

Re: Birch Polypore (revised)

We've moved Luke's poem to Current Features - the first we've had for a while - by popular acclaim. Well, as much popular acclaim as we seem able to muster these days, which is not very much.

But we do think this poem is really good, like.
by David
Thu Mar 14, 2019 7:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Nominate features!
Replies: 90
Views: 37085

Re: Nominate features!

Macavity wrote:
Sun Feb 24, 2019 6:27 am
We haven't had a nomination for a while. I'd like to nominate Luke's poem:

viewtopic.php?f=3&t=23778&p=201007#p201007

cheers

mac
Yes, seconded. That's all we need, isn't it?
by David
Thu Mar 14, 2019 7:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: RIFF ME A ROSE (V11)
Replies: 29
Views: 916

Re: Slick Rose (V4)

Never mind Blake - "O Rose" sounds remarkably Yeatsian, Jules. Not sure whether you want to make anything of that or not.

Cheers

David
by David
Thu Mar 14, 2019 5:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: My Day in Hell
Replies: 10
Views: 307

Re: My Day in Hell

That's a pretty good crit from Jules, I think, Perry - I particularly enjoyed his nod to Edgar Allan there. I also agree with him that the metre works well with the subject matter, and I share his reservations about some of the repetitions. Just to venture a remark of my own, S2 L2 doesn't work, doe...
by David
Tue Mar 12, 2019 7:28 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A sentimental family one
Replies: 11
Views: 298

Re: A sentimental family one

Thank you James! You're a gent.

Cheers

David