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by David
Fri May 24, 2019 4:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Duende (oh oh)
Replies: 24
Views: 403

Re: Duende (oh oh)

Apologies for not replying until now. I have had internet problems, and now I'm about to go on holiday for two weeks, so tonight is last minute packing.

I will get back to you all on my return.

Cheers

David
by David
Fri May 24, 2019 4:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Homophones
Replies: 6
Views: 165

Re: Homophones

Apologies for not replying until now. I have had internet problems, and now I'm about to go on holiday for two weeks, so tonight is last minute packing.

I will get back to you all on my return.

Cheers

David
by David
Fri May 24, 2019 4:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: But is He?
Replies: 5
Views: 124

Re: But is He?

Apologies for not replying until now. I have had internet problems, and now I'm about to go on holiday for two weeks, so tonight is last minute packing.

I will get back to you all on my return.

Cheers

David
by David
Mon May 20, 2019 6:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Flowers
Replies: 11
Views: 204

Re: Flowers

On the whole, I like it, Perry. It's flowery, appropriately, and rather ornate and ceremonious, but that seems right for the subject. And it's also quite moving. My late condolences to you.

I should say that the use of "thighs" surprised me too. I'm not sure why, but it did.

Cheers

David
by David
Mon May 20, 2019 4:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: untitled senryu
Replies: 4
Views: 74

Re: untitled senryu

I certainly don't agree, with Perry, that every poem should be poignant - either painfully affecting the feelings or being deeply affecting, although perhaps in the original sense of pricking, piercing or stinging - but I don't think the poem scores in either of those senses. It's bit general and bl...
by David
Sun May 19, 2019 7:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Mum's Old Watering Can (revision)
Replies: 11
Views: 168

Re: Mum's Old Watering Can (revision)

Nice one, Mac. I really like this, especially the characterisation of the herbs and the weeds. And the final verse is quite uplifting.

I don't really know why you've capitalised the robin, though.

Cheers

David
by David
Sat May 18, 2019 2:20 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: I Want No Part of Your Layered Cake
Replies: 9
Views: 199

Re: I Want No Part of Your Layered Cake

I like it too, Jackie - up to (or down from) and including the title. I've never come across either "ulcerate" or "perforate" as intransitive verbs, but apparently that's fine. I rather like "gleamed unctuous". You couldn't get "glaucous" in there as well, could you? I think I'd like that. I do wond...
by David
Fri May 17, 2019 7:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: But is He?
Replies: 5
Views: 124

Re: But is He?

An Easter poem. A bit late.
by David
Fri May 17, 2019 7:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: But is He?
Replies: 5
Views: 124

But is He?

The sense of a mystery from which we are excluded permeates our ordinary rising. Bells would once have called us, willingly or not, into the heaving churches, stuffed to the gunwales and bound for heaven. That destination is grown doubtful. Ships still sail, but on the decks the crowds have thinned....
by David
Wed May 15, 2019 5:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A royal birth
Replies: 12
Views: 205

Re: A royal birth

I like this too, Leaf. The first eight lines - the octet, I suppose - move particularly well. You're right, though: knowing about the pike does throw a dark shadow over the poem. Actually, if you could bring a foreshadowing of the pike into the poem - in the sestet, shall we say - it would be a diff...
by David
Tue May 14, 2019 6:37 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Understanding Meter
Replies: 10
Views: 215

Re: Understanding Meter

Impressive stuff, Perry. There are technical words in here I've never heard before - for good reason, perhaps. They seem pretty obscure, but that may be my loss.

Have you read James Fenton's Introduction to English Poetry? That's a book I'd recommend to a beginner - or a non-beginner.
by David
Tue May 14, 2019 4:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Homophones
Replies: 6
Views: 165

Re: Homophones

Thanks Mac. It just happened! Although bear and bare and road strike me as three pretty primal words anyway.

Cheers

David
by David
Sun May 12, 2019 4:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Onlie Begetter (V3)
Replies: 10
Views: 297

Re: The Onlie Begetter (V2)

'the onlie begetter' - if like me you've read prefaces to Shakespeare's Sonnets more often than the things themselves you might remember academics frothing at the mouth trying to decipher the dedication to 'W.H.' on the title page. H -> W ? Jules D'oh! I should have got that. Thus explained, I like...
by David
Sun May 12, 2019 12:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Homophones
Replies: 6
Views: 165

Homophones

When I heard the sheep speak
in the voice of my father,
and I almost jumped out of my skin,
I wondered what question he answered
with his bare or bear or bayr.

Note: bayr = road in Manx.
by David
Fri May 10, 2019 3:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In a Cemetery of Oak and Ash
Replies: 13
Views: 226

Re: In a Cemetery of Oak and Ash

. Hi David. OK, assuming I've understood 'crib' correctly (don't think I've ever used the word before :) ) It's about the disposal of a body as told from the perspective of the place where the body is dumped, prompted by an the beginning of an epigram attributed to Erinna ("I am the tomb of Baucis,...
by David
Thu May 09, 2019 4:40 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In a Cemetery of Oak and Ash
Replies: 13
Views: 226

Re: In a Cemetery of Oak and Ash

No crib, then? Okay, can anybody else explain what's going on here? Unless its obscurity is its purpose.

Outlandish explanations will be welcomed - and probably necessary.

David
by David
Wed May 08, 2019 5:56 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Hi
Replies: 6
Views: 320

Re: Hi

Yes, hi Leaf, and welcome.

David
by David
Wed May 08, 2019 5:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In a Cemetery of Oak and Ash
Replies: 13
Views: 226

Re: In a Cemetery of Oak and Ash

I'm not really getting this, and think I require a crib of some sort. I like "perideipnon" - a new word for me - but is your "salebrous" (also new) really necessary?

I'm prepared to enjoy this more when I understand it better.

Cheers

David
by David
Sun May 05, 2019 11:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Duende (oh oh)
Replies: 24
Views: 403

Re: Duende (oh oh)

Yes, that was the duende that I found, Perry. But I wanted to undercut my understanding of it by invoking a well known popular song. The duende was real enough, and that's what the poem's about.

Performed, that ending might work pretty well. I'll let you know if I ever do it.
by David
Sun May 05, 2019 5:20 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poems That You Love
Replies: 94
Views: 14336

Re: Poems That You Love

bjondon wrote:
Sun May 05, 2019 5:12 pm

Yes, I'm another Rattle Bag fan (not least of the Dafydd Ap Gwilym title poem)
… like two poet-DJ's at the top of their game on some long hot long lost summer's evening.
Jules
Perfect analogy, Jules. I like it.
by David
Sun May 05, 2019 4:51 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Duende (oh oh)
Replies: 24
Views: 403

Re: Duende (oh oh)

Oh no. The original football connection was wrong - I was thinking of Volare, not Vieira - so every additional one is another wrong step. Fun idea, though. Maybe that's what the poem should have been about. I was in Seville with Mrs D for her birthday, but could not persuade her that the local derby...
by David
Sat May 04, 2019 7:10 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Walking Football
Replies: 4
Views: 96

Re: Walking Football

I think it's just fine as it is. I've never tried this sport, but - as a former 5-a-side supremo (on a good day) - I must ask around. I've always been mostly a walking footballer.

Cheers

David
by David
Sat May 04, 2019 7:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Ferret
Replies: 14
Views: 305

Re: Ferret

Nicely done, Tony. I like the picture, and the revised ending is an improvement. Although part of me says that the repetition of "it" mirrored - or echoed - the yips, in a way.

Cheers

David
by David
Sat May 04, 2019 11:49 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poems That You Love
Replies: 94
Views: 14336

Re: Poems That You Love

When you said, "Sometimes it's good to talk about such things", what were you referring to? Poems that we love! Nothing more complicated than that. Not that fond of that Stallings either, I'm afraid. Perhaps she's a blind spot of mine. This seems to be a colloquy of just the two of us, but at least...
by David
Sat May 04, 2019 11:11 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Duende (oh oh)
Replies: 24
Views: 403

Re: Duende (oh oh)

Thanks Tony. Yes, that's the very thing I'm talking about, I think. Exciting, isn't it?

Cheers

David