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by JohnLott
Fri Dec 09, 2011 10:26 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poetry should be beautiful
Replies: 33
Views: 4405

Re: Poetry should be beautiful

Jeez Brian lighten up! Yeah, I spend far too much time thinking about this stuff. A lifetime being aggravated about other people's anxiety about the fate of their souls. Arrrgghh! B. In passing, on my way to East Sussex, something to help you look on the bright side: The Emperor, being a god of hig...
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 11:10 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Back Woods
Replies: 22
Views: 801

Re: Back Woods

Good poem Ben.
I think this could be a solid read; but at the moment the change of voice and mood in S2, S3 disrupt the read. Not that the voice is bad, it isn't - but you should have one or the other.

I think the title word is 'Backwoods'?

J.
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 10:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The cries of animals
Replies: 22
Views: 852

Re: The cries of animals

I'm in the group of 'left alignmentists'.
The words are about right now - I like it.

J.
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 10:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A fictional disparity (was - On reading separate books)
Replies: 28
Views: 988

Re: A fictional disparity (was - On reading separate books)

Some of the warmth of 'contented couples' emotion is now missing: Homely has been replaced with a slightly colder 'clinical'
Sorry

J.
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 10:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Buying the lie
Replies: 5
Views: 287

Re: Buying the lie

A freeze frame on a human story, Vincent. It is untidy and needs smoothing out: especially in separating the good bits from the mediocre: and rise from the bed swallowing us with large hungry arms a happy, hairy, ogre of love. is a good bit We saw the kids with no dads in school they bound the playg...
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 6:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: After life
Replies: 9
Views: 395

Re: After life

Thanks for sharing this Ian.
I understand and respect what you are doing.

J.
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 1:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Small Sounds
Replies: 8
Views: 392

Re: The Small Sounds

I agree that this is a moody reminisce - if it was a song it would be moody-blue. I like the pace. 'rolling' is the wrong word for me; and sometimes the beat goes astray, especially not helped by the punctuation (or lack of it). I particulary like S1, 2 and 4. S3 breaks the mood and S5 seems a bit w...
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 12:27 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poetry should be beautiful
Replies: 33
Views: 4405

Re: Poetry should be beautiful

David wrote:but what there was of Mercian Hymns (1971!) - quite a lot, actually - made me think that it must be one of the great modern collections.
I tried those and sank without trace

J.
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 12:22 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poetry should be beautiful
Replies: 33
Views: 4405

Re: Poetry should be beautiful

brianedwards wrote: Did I say otherwise?

B.
No.
I was agreeing and expanding

J.
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 12:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Anguish of the Agnostic
Replies: 12
Views: 622

Re: Anguish and Agnostic

small edits done. the wax cascades down the bottle/the wax has cascaded down the bottle; as an arctic waterfall will (frozen in form) when winter arrives. Tomorrow the wax cascades are frozen, as arctic waterfalls will be at the onset of winter. Tomorrow the wax will be seen to have cascaded as arct...
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 11:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Anguish of the Agnostic
Replies: 12
Views: 622

Re: Anguish and Agnostic

Sorry Ant, we cross posted.
Perhaps my reply to Ray covers your concerns.
I'm glad you can get the wax/waterfall simile.

8)

J.
by JohnLott
Wed Dec 07, 2011 11:57 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Anguish of the Agnostic
Replies: 12
Views: 622

Re: Anguish and Agnostic

Hi Ray, Did not Jesus say he was the light? And did he not go up to his father in heaven, and have we not gone into the heavens in our Geminis and such? And have we found heaven or seen god? And don't the faithful believe we are attacking their faith with science? And as an agnostic is our doubt bec...
by JohnLott
Tue Dec 06, 2011 10:49 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poetry should be beautiful
Replies: 33
Views: 4405

Re: Poetry should be beautiful

Well I find this kind of comment profoundly frustrating, that a man of such obvious intellect and talent should become so bound up in such a pointless endeavour. B. Don't all those with 'religion' get hung up on a 'pointless endeavour' - genius or otherwise? If one can't define 'beauty' how can one...
by JohnLott
Tue Dec 06, 2011 10:41 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Ah, Humbug.
Replies: 4
Views: 1366

Re: Ah, Humbug.

Hi Suzanne, yes, Happy Christmas.
A skillful harmony; especially the colours and grain across the whole.

:)

J.
by JohnLott
Tue Dec 06, 2011 10:35 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Last leaf of autumn
Replies: 9
Views: 551

Re: Last leaf of autumn

Hi Richard, your focus between both leaf and tree distracts, although employee (leaf) and tree (employer) is a relevant metaphor. For awhile I tried no punctuation in following a modern trend but it didn't always work - as it hasn't here, for you. In S1 I would use 'despite' instead of 'in spite'. I...
by JohnLott
Tue Dec 06, 2011 10:21 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: An unexpected inheritance - V3
Replies: 25
Views: 1123

Re: An unexpected inheritance - V3

Nicky B, I think this is building into a good thought-provoking work. For me there are still some issues with a confusion between invisibility and spreading (observable) contagion - the presence of both together has not been justified. I don't have a problem with S3; but it would help if it was re-d...
by JohnLott
Tue Dec 06, 2011 10:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Anguish of the Agnostic
Replies: 12
Views: 622

Re: Anguish and Agnostic

Ros, Arian, Ant Thanks for the read and your comments. At this stage perhaps it might help comprehension if I tell you that 'Titans' are the US expendable carrier rockets which were part of their space program. If this is unclear is there another way I can express man's quest to the stars (physical)...
by JohnLott
Tue Dec 06, 2011 7:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Anguish of the Agnostic
Replies: 12
Views: 622

Anguish of the Agnostic

Bottles gilded for Christmas. Candles pointing like Titans thrusting hope into the sky. Beyond which lies impropriety and the barren void for faith. Tonight the wax cascades as arctic waterfalls will at the onset of winter. Where are you now that I might feel your warmth on my open palms as darkness...
by JohnLott
Mon Dec 05, 2011 6:53 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A fictional disparity (was - On reading separate books)
Replies: 28
Views: 988

Re: On reading separate books

The dog is integral to their lives, the dog links the dichotomy of we are together but we are apart -public space, private space. It would be a pity to put him down, so to speak.
Good poem.

:)

J.
by JohnLott
Mon Dec 05, 2011 11:14 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Keeper
Replies: 24
Views: 631

Re: The Keeper

This has changed into a nice poem - young David as a Shepherd learning to use his sling.
I'm not fond of the word 'discern' -perhaps 'select' is what is happening.
The timline with the stones seems out of kilter.
However, my nits are small.
Good work.

:)

J.
by JohnLott
Sun Dec 04, 2011 9:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: When I was Born
Replies: 12
Views: 518

Re: When I was Born

OK Blogsworth

Crescent (new) Moon

J.
by JohnLott
Sun Dec 04, 2011 4:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: When I was Born
Replies: 12
Views: 518

Re: When I was Born

OK k-j
it's a typo. Put me in gaol.

I own up to an own goal :lol:

J.
by JohnLott
Sun Dec 04, 2011 3:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The old croft house nearby on a frosty day
Replies: 18
Views: 578

Re: The old croft house nearby on a frosty day

Hi Ant,
coming late to this.
The poem (story) started with promise and fell away - all the way to the Frostesque finale.
I think you have it in you to write your own tale, without the constraints of Frost - and failing Frost.

8)

J.
by JohnLott
Sun Dec 04, 2011 3:18 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: How similies ought to be, like.
Replies: 8
Views: 1711

Re: How similies ought to be, like.

:lol: like :lol:

J.
by JohnLott
Sun Dec 04, 2011 3:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Of Owls and Apple Trees
Replies: 3
Views: 357

Re: Of Owls and Apple Trees

Thanks Suzanne,
I enjoyed doing this (perhaps Megan did too) and it's a pity that those that signed up signed off instead.

Onward to the mad xmas fest.........

8)

J.