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by the stranger
Fri Aug 03, 2018 8:17 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: The Chain
Replies: 407
Views: 184552

Re: The Chain

I second that emotion...

Windmill, windmill for the land
Turn forever hand in hand

by the stranger
Fri Aug 03, 2018 8:55 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Methodically (v2)
Replies: 16
Views: 878

Re: Methodically (v2)

Ok that is a pointer, but for the rest, I preferred the original -
Yes, me too.

You seemed to have lost much of the flow and a touch of the elusive with the revision.

TS
by the stranger
Fri Jul 27, 2018 9:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Day We Turned Into Abstract Paintings
Replies: 9
Views: 955

Re: The Day We Turned Into Abstract Paintings

Fun and very clever.

This to me is a "long" poem, but held me to the very end.

There's some good poems around at the moment.

Nice one.
TS
by the stranger
Fri Jul 27, 2018 9:06 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Cistercian (revision2)
Replies: 26
Views: 1154

Re: Cistercian

I can't quite tie it all together, who's who? But i'm sure all will be revealed on further reading.

That aside, wonderfully evocative and some great language, especially:
Will they atrophy in this heat? Leaf
like long lost scrolls.
Lovely stuff.
TS
by the stranger
Fri Jul 27, 2018 8:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Methodically (v2)
Replies: 16
Views: 878

Re: Methodically

It certainly does paint an intriguing picture! Very Cormac McCarthy: Wild animals, lonesome minstrels, and me having to make use of google translator... Personally I enjoyed the sharper language set against the somewhat sombre surroundings, "adopted curs" was necessary i think to set the scene, and ...
by the stranger
Tue Jul 24, 2018 8:29 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Blurb
Replies: 0
Views: 1207

Blurb

So, of late I've seen on FB a variety of friends self-publishing, mainly through Amazon, but also via more substantial/reputable outlets. Whilst pondering my own approach to this I remembered Blurb! The self-publishing phenomenon that never really was. BUT it is quite handy (and relatively easy and ...
by the stranger
Fri Jul 13, 2018 11:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition
Replies: 8
Views: 744

Re: From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

The beauty of PG is that you can post a poem like this, of quite obvious self-indulgence and have lovely polite replies.

We've all done it, everyone.

A pound title, backed-up by a child's introspection

Nice.
by the stranger
Sat Jun 16, 2018 5:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Visitations (revision5)
Replies: 37
Views: 7690

Re: Camping (revision4)

I quite like your new S5, but I think I preferred the (lightly) loaded mystery of your labrador barking at "something". (Despite the intervention of The Stranger.) You know what, maybe that is the case, perhaps no justification is required? More often than not I engage with poetry, and this poetry ...
by the stranger
Thu Jun 14, 2018 10:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Inside the Banga
Replies: 10
Views: 2396

Re: Inside the Banga

by the stranger
Thu Jun 14, 2018 10:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Visitations (revision5)
Replies: 37
Views: 7690

Re: Camping (revision3)

I do love captured moments, and there are some great lines, but I think the bread above the filling needs work, at both ends?

The nonchalant:

"Our labrador barks
at something."

Ok, we can imagine what he barks at and I guess that's "dynamic poetry" but is it engaging or interesting?

Cheers
TS
by the stranger
Thu Jun 14, 2018 10:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Away
Replies: 4
Views: 1318

Re: Away

"to let my going go." I'll echo Mac's comment - Roethke indeed! one of my favourite poems. I'll also echo David's comment: " I do find it hard to associate chivalry with self-interest" Only a self-obsessed poet could write a line like that! But I'm sure that wasn't your intention. I like it, it flow...
by the stranger
Fri Jun 08, 2018 8:28 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: In Particular
Replies: 5
Views: 1497

Re: In Particular

Thanks dudes. Issues with trying to write a poem with no punctuation and realising it doesn't quite work. All or nothing? It's a good thing to try though, your words takes precedence, full control, I failed here, but it's certainly something I'm interested in. For a starter though - 'splinter-arsed'...
by the stranger
Thu Jun 07, 2018 12:48 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: In Particular
Replies: 5
Views: 1497

In Particular

I was in Particular today and I didn’t like it I felt too immediately present the wallpaper was reactionary all plums and flightless birds puce and spruce on raven-black backgrounds - full of people who seemed to belong: Ersatz jazzers bowl-haired fakirs - high-brow makers and low-brow fakers idiots...
by the stranger
Fri Apr 13, 2018 10:28 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: On realising you have no discernible talent
Replies: 5
Views: 1259

Re: On realising you have no discernible talent

Thanks dudes. See root crops commanding light, as Angels might, in some Italian piece. Gold earthen nuggets from a wretched life. (This is a brilliant stanza) Agreed, that is probably one of the finest stanzas I've ever written. I am very proud of it. As for the rest, I may well have aimed my misant...
by the stranger
Wed Apr 11, 2018 2:49 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: On realising you have no discernible talent
Replies: 5
Views: 1259

On realising you have no discernible talent

One can try to hang on/off the coat tails of genius by simply referencing said genii. This will in the short term allow potential pseudo intellectuals (like you) to engage with pseudo intellectuals (like me) and we will come to agreeable terms of engagement, both happy that neither really know what ...
by the stranger
Wed Mar 21, 2018 8:48 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A Task Done
Replies: 9
Views: 1067

Re: A Task Done

"It's all in the details" and such wonderful details.

I like poems where it's obvious you have to work some things out for yourself, but the crux is there and if you can't work the rest out for yourself, it doesn't necessarily matter.

Good stuff

Cheers
TS
by the stranger
Wed Mar 21, 2018 8:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love
Replies: 4
Views: 644

Re: Love

Love - THE abstract concept. Well, there are other abstract concepts, but Love is probably the main culprit. "Abstract poetry is a form of poetry which doesn't necessarily depend upon the depth or meaning of the words. It is something where the words maybe vague and cannot be easily pictured. Like t...
by the stranger
Wed Mar 21, 2018 8:19 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Half a Person
Replies: 8
Views: 1200

Re: Half a Person

PaulDreadful - Excellent moniker, any relation to PennyDreadful? Are you new in town? If so I'll check you out. In a weird way, this works for me like a good song lyric works I'm glad it does. I was as a "poet" born from song lyrics: Dylan, Cohen, Waits, Reed et al, then progressed to actually readi...
by the stranger
Fri Feb 09, 2018 8:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: How to write a list poem
Replies: 6
Views: 1054

Re: How to write a list poem

Cheers Ray.

You're probably right about 11 and 12, it was a stream of consciousness addition. Awful advert though!
What are dune tunes?
Well, I reckon they are background soothing tunes - dunes, the sea, the open sky...
by the stranger
Thu Feb 08, 2018 8:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Counting The Cracks (revision2)
Replies: 16
Views: 1571

Re: Counting The Cracks

I don't. I am a big non-fan of noun-verbing.
So that's the terminology. Thanks David.

Personally I'm a fan. It's the awkwardness, i think.
by the stranger
Thu Feb 08, 2018 6:05 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Counting The Cracks (revision2)
Replies: 16
Views: 1571

Re: Counting The Cracks

A wholly condensed piece, I can almost see the reasoning, going along... I am a fan of less is more and this wee poem gives the reader much to ponder in a very short space. Like other's comments I'm not too sure about the mixed tenses used? Tenses aside, in its intricacy it holds together well, BUT ...
by the stranger
Thu Feb 08, 2018 5:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Loneliness
Replies: 6
Views: 836

Re: Loneliness

I agree with Tristan, much to like here. "A brook of whiskey" is one of those beautiful phrases, that you wished you'd written. It continues well with a doomed metaphor, splashing against the rocks, rattling the glass. For me it starts to go a bit awry with "Technicoloured rays" it doesn't seem in k...
by the stranger
Thu Feb 08, 2018 5:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: How to write a list poem
Replies: 6
Views: 1054

How to write a list poem

1. 20 Sterling 2. A half of the finest blended 3. An obscure idea or 4. A conspicuous one 5. A quiet room 6. With broken lighting 7. A sturdy pen (just in case) 8. Some thickset paper 9. And its history 10. A computer 11. “What’s a computer?” 12. Fuck off you foul child 13. A simmering hatred for so...