The Poets' Graves Workshop

20181012_071916(1).jpg JJ. Sorry to hit and run. I'm seriously impressed with your latest post. I'm sorry i'm not able to critique your post right now. I've left my computer at my studio so i'm using my crappy tablet. (With a magnifying glass) to post this. So frustrating. Not even sure if this wil...

I am so sorry Ross.
Please ignore my previous posts.
How condescending do I come across.
That honestly was not how I meant to portray my message.
All I wanted to say was your video did not come across as a confident piece.
Sorry for being an arse.

Sorry you didn't like it Pauline, if it sucks it sucks. It doesn't suck Ross. What sucks is your can't be arsed approach to it. This was recorded years ago. I'm in my 70's now, no longer creative except for the very occasional poem. Ross, age is just a number. You have a creative mind, use it. I've...

Wow, wow, wow !!! Love it. I don’t know where to start. Ok, colours are gawjus. I particularly love the foreground rocks. The pink/red/ orange rock, the blue/green and the ochre rock pull me towards them every time my eyes start to wander away to explore. There’s a lot of movement in this painting. ...

OMG! Ross, what where you thinking when you posted this? It's absolutely dire. Holy jayzus.! You've wrote this. It's an emotional piece that means something to you. So, why on earth did you not take the time to memorize the words and deliver them with feeling??? It's like you can't be arsed. You bar...

Hi Ross. I like the slightly naive feel of it, also the drama of the sea and sky. Thanks for that :) But the bridge is my least fav. part, it looks too much like something drawn with a ruler and stylistically it is at odds with the rest of the painting. I fully understand this is not everyone's flav...

Wonderful sky, magnificent bridge (and very clever) with a touch of Lowery in the background. :D Cheers JJ. The sky was a good 2 thirds of the painting. I needed that as a backdrop for this piece. I purposely kept the buildings simple as I wanted this to be about the bridge. I felt it would be a st...

Thanks Ross.
Whichever angle you look at at this.
As long as you get something from it I'm pleased.
Thanks for taking the time to look at it and comment.

You haven't posted any of your painting for a while.
I look forward to seeing what you have been up to.
Thanks again

Exquisite

A 90x90 acrylic
I kept the buildings simple as its all about the bridge.
I stitched it on in blue wool as I wanted it to stand proud and I also thought it would add strength to the structure.

An untravelled road leads me past pale skulls of herbivores and dry tumble-weed rolls the streets. Black eyed stores from a bygone age stand silent. There’s no spirit left beneath the dust. The bar stands silent though shades sit in every chair. The world has moved on. A weary sun sets, dragging the...

Ghost Town Much to like here Not (God, that sounds so sarcastic. The lack of a comma saves me ) I like the pace and atmosphere. OK, some images are clichéd. The pale skulls and rolling tumbleweed… However, there is still enough to engage me An untravelled road led to this place, Nice opening. past t...

Your shape imprints foam.
Low, and barely audible.
A song within songs.

i find conceptual art intriguing.

Hmmm. Not mad keen on the layout of this. A running sentence/thought clipped posing as a poem. The line breaks do not work for me nor the lack of punctuation. There is no movement. I sense the emotion behind this but the delivery falls short. Sorry Mac, just being honest. I feel you could do so much...

The Falls are spectacular and your painting does them proud. WHOO. WHOOO. WHOOO. That mean a lot to me JJ. I struggle with water, and yet I'm draw to it. The Wordsworth link makes them a must for me and actually elevates the painting in my eyes. Love him or hate him he had impact. Interestingly, Do...

28 views and not one comment! It can't be that bad, surely! I AM depressed. Now you have 3750 views and only a handful of comments. WTF :shock: What is going on? Now, unless you are constantly going in and looking at your own work JJ ( and I'm pretty sure you are not ) and maybe I can account for a...

I'd better slow down.
I just want to talk to you.
I'll take the long route.

lots of fine energy in this canvas Yay, thanks Lotus. Thrilled I managed to capture that. on a side note i might suggest casting a different tone for the signature for my eye it distracts Ah, now then. I totally get where you are coming from. I can see how it could be a distraction. However, in the...

Here's the final revised version to show the general scale of things. Stunning :) Told ya it was a fabulous size canvas. Small enough to house but large enough to make an impact. JJ. I love your other paintings. I can see them in the background. Proudly displayed, and rightly so but... C'mon, look ...

Mirrorball wrote: ↑

Sun Sep 02, 2018 7:27 pm

My poems are almost always eclipsed by the stories that go with them. I need to sort that out.

So don't tell the stories.
Let your poems stand alone.
I'll come back to your poem shortly.
I won't try to rewrite it.

Phew.
So please you weren't offended by my fiddling with your poem.
I'm rubbish at critique.
It's easier for me to rearrange words rather than explain what I feel works and doesn't for me.

It's not a great photo. There's a glare on the main rock. Its a lot darker than the photo.
A 90x90cm acrylic.

It was just a suggestion Perry.
Of course, it's your poem and you know just how you want it to look.
I was simply offering my thoughts
Like I said, I found this an enjoyable read.
Cheers

Hi Mirrorball.
Welcome.
Nice to see you around.
You will get some friendly, constructive feedback here.
Some of course you may not agree with but it is all offered in a take or toss way.
We're all here to help each other.