The Poets' Graves Workshop

Far too small to critique Mac.

Macavity wrote: ↑

Sun Nov 22, 2020 4:47 am

should have picked the 'best'...but they are all on the same plateau

Be proud of your work.
It's unique.
There's not another one like it

Cam and Nicky. Huge, huge thank you from me. I know I've been a pain in the arse on several occasions and you have been massively supportive each and every time. I joined PG a total novice. Knew nothing about poetry. Thought a few rhyming words at the end of a sentence made a poem. I have learned so...

No wave no life
washes up
but the
T shirt does
not fit the
metaphysics
shrink.

Excuse my ignorance Mac but
I don't understand this.

Hi Trev. Feel really bad about saying this but .... it did nowt for me. Slow, much like your dig. I was bored. There was very little to keep me interested. I feel if you wrote this in the present tense and shaved some of the waffle it would make for a better read. A careless nudge sends settled ash ...

Welcome YDS
C'mon dive in.
It's not cold.
You'll find it's lovely once you've got your skin wet.

Pauline.

Nobody knows if it's true or it's not, because, really, would you want to risk getting shot just to find out if it's true or it's not That's the poem for me Not. I have to agree. OK then mac, but what's the title? [/quote Hmmm :idea: How about.... Secret? or.... Who knows? or.... Head fuck? :lol: :...

Really like elements of this Pauline: the colour and vigour of the sky; the spikiness and texture of the foreground; the curve of land and the perspective of sky in relation to that curve. Yay. Thanks Mac. :D What blues are you using in your sky? What size and kind of brushes are you using? Did you...

Agreed, though 'craft' will always nag in my mind, Doesn't nag at my mind Mac. :wink: Probably because I'm not overly clued up on the subject. I kinda just go with what I like. I've not studied Art, or been to college so my mind is free to explore. My studio partner who has a degree in Art told me ...

Thanks for taking a look Pauline. I do have fun with painting. :) That@s what it's all about Mac. Pleasure. If you ain't enjoying it then why bother. I do have some one point perspective efforts lying around somewhere, but my dabblings have gone more free verse as it were . :lol: :lol: :lol: That's...

Bloody hell Mac. 100+ views and not a soul had anything to offer you re your paintings. :shock: I will say you are not presenting them in the best light. Shot down on the dining room table, " Ere, av done these. Wadda ya think?" :lol: Ok. Here goes. If I remember rightly, you paint in watercolour. A...

Hi Trevor. I love the idea, and the fun you could have with this. At the moment, for me, the opening stanza reads like a fat birds shopping list. There were some fine lines that stood out for me. a biscuit welcomes tea like a brother, warps to its weight, but soon it droops Only the daring or foolis...

Perry. If you keep this in the first person, I feel it's a much stronger piece. Is the part where we become friends? After the love has died and our kisses turn to texts which trail off because I am now someone you never miss. I remember the days you couldn’t live without me. Perhaps I should be gla...

Merry Christmas to you and Mrs D David.
I too have not been as productive as I may have liked.
Life n all that......

And a Merry Christmas to all on PG.

Pol.

Mac. I love the innocence to this painting, You did a great drawing of Dyffyn House . You painted a splendid sky and some foreground. Touched some of the house, sat back and thought "Yeah" ! Nuff said. You managed to control your colours. No bleeding. That is way more than I could ever do. However, ...

Great attempt Mac. Watercolour is the most unforgiving medium. I've tried and failed many times to control this bitch without success. OK. The tree is top heavy and seriously out of proportion. I ask this with tongue on cheek (as a non artist) Is it an abstract bunny rabbit down by the water passing...

This made me chuckle :D so I started off trying to write something Chaucerian in modern dress. And failed miserably. Don't think you have like. I think you nailed it. I can even picture the characters :D I was hearing Noddy Holder as I read it! I heard Jasper Carrot :lol: :lol: Nice one Ray. Thanks ...

WOW. Looks like a photograph JJ. You've handled the reflections and rippling water with your usual expertise. Totally agree. I'm envious of your water. :) Overall, I think the painting is quite nice. I agree. Overall I think the painting is well done. I agree. I'm sure your boy is thrilled to bits w...

Am I the last PG-er to catch on to this site? Hi Jules. That may be me. :wink: Thanks for the link. I've just dropped mine in half an hour ago. :) Middlesbrough. Some great stuff posted there. In my rush, I posted a random poem. I thought it was about poets from all areas posting their poem of choi...

Hey Perry. I like this. I feel it would be better if you kept it in first person throughout. I'm shite at critique as I can't explain what I mean so if you don't mind I juggled your words to make it sit comfortably with me. Hey, take or toss my suggestions. I won't be offended. Like I said. Simply a...

Isn't it fabulous we all have different takes on a piece of writing. : I hope you can take something positive from my offering. The old man in the window seat is setting quietly to his routine, rolling the sleeves of his Oxford shirt and repositioning his table until the sun falls across his bared a...

My wife bought me some canvas boards for Christmas, which was very thoughtful of her, but they were a bit coarse, too rough for delicate brush work. So, here is my first palette knife painting for your perusal. I used the small trowel shaped knife all the way through. Trickier than you might imagin...

AH Pauline! The photo shows the bridge perfectly. That's pretty much what I meant. I knew that was was you meant JJ. However, that was not what I was aiming for. That was simply a reference photo so I could try and capture the angle of the bridge. Incidentally, I think it's quite brilliant of you t...

Hi Mac. Thanks for dropping by. The photograph has a number of transitions: there is a band of light on the grass, then a distinct band of shadow, and finally the light seen through the 'hole' to the sky. It certainly does. However, this is a daytime photograph. It's not my reference photo. I only p...

You are so canny.
Thanks for that