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by Macavity
Thu Sep 19, 2019 8:29 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Adelphophagy (v5)
Replies: 9
Views: 521

Re: Adelphophagy (v4)

Maggot-white, blind in the womb-black sea of her, wriggling like the earthbound feasting on eggs. Hatchling, hunger birthed toothed and pricking, unthinking ache of instinct, a rivalry of blood spurs, seduces even before it is spilt. In the forming skulls, caverns flood fill with the promise-threat...
by Macavity
Thu Sep 19, 2019 8:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Art Lover
Replies: 4
Views: 268

Re: Art Lover

Thanks Not. Comma duly added.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Thu Sep 19, 2019 11:57 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Art Lover
Replies: 4
Views: 268

Art Lover

Growing up with Nan
I spent my idle times
spying through lace curtains.
Vagueness became a friend.
My Impressionist bride.

Older now, inherited
the flat, and there are blinds
giving a slant on outside.
A sort of Cubist crime.
Art moves on, and so do brides.
by Macavity
Wed Sep 18, 2019 5:39 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Adelphophagy (v5)
Replies: 9
Views: 521

Re: Adelphophagy (v3)

hi Not Grim topic, but that is the reality. Made me think of a Godless world. There is something Paradise Lost there. The diction suggests a knowledge of the world, which contradicts the first person, present tense, perspective? What would they know of the 'earthbound''? External referencing for an ...
by Macavity
Sun Sep 15, 2019 3:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Autumnal (was Diagnosis)[rev2]
Replies: 9
Views: 447

Re: Diagnosis

hi JJ Your title frames a reading of the poem to the human condition. Liked that dialect feel of the word 'fettle'. It personalises. Couplet writing can become mechanistic, but that is not the case here. There is a balance in form that underpins content. still I find the peace and grace that blossom...
by Macavity
Sun Sep 15, 2019 2:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: My girl friend is pint-sized (revision)
Replies: 7
Views: 484

Re: My girl friend is pint-sized (revision)

Many thanks for your close reading JJ. As always very insightful and empathetic to the text. I do love a walking poem I share your 'love' of the genre too JJ. The trudging back is difficult to unravel, I was hoping that the fact he is carrying the 'weight' would provide a reason for him turning back...
by Macavity
Fri Sep 13, 2019 10:10 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Califragile
Replies: 5
Views: 510

Re: Califragile

Cheers David. I plod on :)
by Macavity
Thu Sep 12, 2019 6:58 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Califragile
Replies: 5
Views: 510

Re: Califragile

Thanks Tristan (and for the other one). And for your, and others, help.

all the best

mac
by Macavity
Thu Sep 12, 2019 1:33 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: 2,3,4… (V2)
Replies: 5
Views: 194

Re: 2,3,4… (V2)

hi Jules

ate rather than eat? (or is that a dialect thing).

An option to capitalise quartet?

Like the dog addition and the ellipsis.

enjoyed the fun sonics

best

mac
by Macavity
Wed Sep 11, 2019 10:44 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Cheapside protocol
Replies: 10
Views: 614

Re: The Cheapside protocol

Nay sure, he’s not in hell; he’s in Arthur’s bosom , if ever man went to Arthur’s bosom. ’A made a finer end, and went away and it had been any christom child. ’A parted ev’n just between twelve and one, ev’n at the turning o’ th’ tide; for after I saw him fumble with the sheets, and play with flow...
by Macavity
Tue Sep 10, 2019 5:54 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 34
Views: 1215

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

Patrick Kavanagh - The Great Hunger

https://allpoetry.com/Patrick-Kavanagh

Just a link because it is rather long. I'm finding this poem quite addictive.
by Macavity
Tue Sep 10, 2019 4:47 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Califragile
Replies: 5
Views: 510

Califragile

I have a poem appearing here:

https://califragile.org/2019/09/10/pontneddfechan-by-phil-wood/

all the best

mac
by Macavity
Sat Sep 07, 2019 5:48 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Simmering - an alternative version
Replies: 25
Views: 959

Re: Simmering

Thumbs up on the cheesecake.
by Macavity
Sat Sep 07, 2019 5:44 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: It started with a Selfie
Replies: 14
Views: 361

Re: It started with a Selfie

hi Alex The title gives a modern slant, though the religious and emotional bind is an older narrative. your head on his shoulder as you kneaded putty making a doll full of pins and self-destruction Liked the appearance of security and contentment juxtaposed with the internal hell. The pagan imagery ...
by Macavity
Fri Sep 06, 2019 6:04 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Cheapside protocol
Replies: 10
Views: 614

Re: The Cheapside protocol

Hi David, This is a teasing one, referencing Shakespeare (though I started looking at a play by Middleton, which I now must read!) and the present day phrasing. Rejection leading to Arthur's Bosom is more than a consolation. The drinking life - Chimes at Midnight - as opposed to the quiet life. So t...
by Macavity
Fri Sep 06, 2019 5:40 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Nine Muses Poetry
Replies: 3
Views: 186

Re: Nine Muses Poetry

Cheers Luke. Pleased you enjoyed.
by Macavity
Fri Sep 06, 2019 5:39 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Alex says hi
Replies: 3
Views: 379

Re: Alex says hi

Welcome Alex. Your location sounds inspirational!

best

mac
by Macavity
Fri Sep 06, 2019 5:36 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: How the Oyster Got His Pearl v2
Replies: 14
Views: 429

Re: How the Oyster Got His Pearl v2

My 2p

1. It is his silence that condemns them. I don't feel you should confuse the narrative by then refencing their silence as a consequence.

2. I like the psychology that he is now 'condemned' to a world of silence: his silence is his only companion.

Best

Mac
by Macavity
Fri Sep 06, 2019 1:15 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 34
Views: 1215

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

Marin-an by Gary Snyder sun breaks over the eucalyptus grove below the wet pasture, water’s about hot, I sit in the open window & roll a smoke. distant dogs bark, a pair of cawing crows; the twang of a pygmy nuthatch high in a pine- from behind the cypress windrow the mare moves up, grazing. a soft...
by Macavity
Thu Sep 05, 2019 8:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: My girl friend is pint-sized (revision)
Replies: 7
Views: 484

Re: My girl friend is pint-sized (revision)

I preferred Distance to Stature, which seems to spell things out too much
I think you're right Ray. I'll change it back. Cheers.
by Macavity
Thu Sep 05, 2019 6:40 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Simmering - an alternative version
Replies: 25
Views: 959

Re: Simmering

She made me quiches, pies and pizzas.
I was told by a working man that quiches were not for men. I like a quiche. Homemade pie fair enough, but pizza? How about some bakes like mamarlade cake. Something sweet in the lunchbox.
by Macavity
Thu Sep 05, 2019 8:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: How the Oyster Got His Pearl v2
Replies: 14
Views: 429

Re: How the Oyster Got His Pearl v2

hi Not now stained with a terrible darkness. Like the addition of stained because of its connotations. into his hand, in front of his mouth , he coughed a single grain of sand. As his first teardrop fell he caught it in his hand I don't feel the detail of the hand's proximity to the mouth is needed ...
by Macavity
Wed Sep 04, 2019 6:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: My girl friend is pint-sized (revision)
Replies: 7
Views: 484

Re: My girl friend is pint-sized

Thanks Tristan and Not. 'hoary' (which I misread as 'horny') doesn't seem quite right (old and grey/whitish fur/trite?). I was using the word in the banal sense and also liked the connection with hoarfrost . Will have a think. I think, your N has taken the contents of his girlfriends rucksack and ha...
by Macavity
Wed Sep 04, 2019 11:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Reading People
Replies: 7
Views: 271

Re: Reading People

hi Tristan, I'm taking the title as a play on meaning and therefore this is as much about people as books. If there are parallels, then S1L4 I presumed was the observation/hearsay of strangers. S2L3 I don't understand. Nice to read you again! best mac Some books are on my shelves on the strength of ...
by Macavity
Tue Sep 03, 2019 5:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: My girl friend is pint-sized (revision)
Replies: 7
Views: 484

My girl friend is pint-sized (revision)

revision A winter's pace, the frost winking, ... my rucksack weighted with your checklist. I trudge back. Unbridled, you stride on. Distance ... defines us. At the top you waving. Me frowning from afar. original A winter's pace, frost winking at me, ... this rucksack weighted with hoary thirst. I tr...