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by Macavity
Sun Jan 12, 2020 5:34 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Mac's Watercolour Attempts January
Replies: 4
Views: 215

Re: Mac's Watercolour Attempts January

Thanks David. An old published poem, which I just posted for fun with the pic and hadn't thought of revising. Perhaps it does need a new starting point and direction. Not sure I can write like that anymore, but I'll have a ponder. Hope all is well with you.

best

mac
by Macavity
Fri Jan 10, 2020 2:15 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Mac's Watercolour Attempts January
Replies: 4
Views: 215

Re: Mac's Watercolour Attempts January

Thanks Not. It is an old poem that appeared in this now defunct publication:

https://issuu.com/centrifugaleye/docs/tceautumn2013-jeweled/29

Unusually, they made several editorial suggestions, which I ran with.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Fri Jan 10, 2020 4:53 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Permacultural
Replies: 5
Views: 152

Re: Permacultural

Interesting one Jules (if the reader takes analogies outside of the garden and applies defintions of integrity/invasive - the end point of 'me' nudges that thought process). There is a our/we/you/me progression to separateness. def of permaculture: the development of agricultural ecosystems intended...
by Macavity
Thu Jan 09, 2020 10:06 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: The Dawntreader
Replies: 7
Views: 162

Re: The Dawntreader

Well done Not. Which ones are being published?

congrats

mac
by Macavity
Thu Jan 09, 2020 10:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: If Poetry Could Hold Water : The Landlockeds of Europe
Replies: 12
Views: 312

Re: If Poetry Could Hold Water : The Landlockeds of Europe

Yes! Moldovan plumbers do it with alcohol, their volatile spirits rising like bellicose balloons to declare themselves Belarus. Sorry to see that bit go and missed the Corgi validation. Also think you need a boiler in there :D Title could be just landlocks A thought crossed my mind, but then I read...
by Macavity
Thu Jan 09, 2020 3:31 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Island Fiction (revision 8)
Replies: 23
Views: 633

Re: Island Fiction (revision 8)

A highlight for me was getting the 'counterfeit gleam' as the audio play between the kettle and the gulls - a shame if we lost that. It is too judgemental for this version Jules and I like the notion of 'winging it' against the discipline of knitting patterns. I know it would be a real stretch but,...
by Macavity
Thu Jan 09, 2020 1:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Island Fiction (revision 8)
Replies: 23
Views: 633

Re: Island Fiction (revision 8)

Thanks Not. I feel more happy with the poem now that I have discarded Defarge (though she was the genesis). The tradition/revolution and code/script elements felt forced and muddled the poem. The insularity is a more convincing theme. 'burgandy sky' doesn't work Perhaps. The geographical contrast/di...
by Macavity
Thu Jan 09, 2020 5:00 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Lunate
Replies: 2
Views: 74

Re: Lunate

excellent ray, really enjoyed that, congratulations

best

mac
by Macavity
Wed Jan 08, 2020 10:51 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Mac's Watercolour Attempts January
Replies: 4
Views: 215

Mac's Watercolour Attempts January

tintagel.jpg Tintagel Her loving voice is like a dripping tap. Tip-tap, tap-tip, a dripping tap, he twists so tight the washer snaps. A break is best, the sea maybe, perhaps a cup of tea? He drives past hives that brim with honeyed lives, a winding road along a smugglers' coast of coves where lover...
by Macavity
Mon Jan 06, 2020 7:31 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Island Fiction (revision 8)
Replies: 23
Views: 633

Re: Island Fiction (revision6)

Thanks for coming back Not. I suspect the poem lost some coherence and focus in the revising. One to let rest I guess.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Mon Jan 06, 2020 1:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Island Fiction (revision 8)
Replies: 23
Views: 633

Re: Island Lessons (revision5)

Thanks Not. A comprehensive and helpful collection of options for me to take into account. her claws purling patterns - do you need 'her'? I'm not sure this is working. It was meant to convey the crippling effect of too much knitting. drunk on a burgundy sky. - like these two lines, but struggle to ...
by Macavity
Mon Jan 06, 2020 1:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Island Fiction (revision 8)
Replies: 23
Views: 633

Re: Island Lessons (revision5)

Poet wrote:
Sat Jan 04, 2020 12:43 am
Interesting but what is the moral of the poem?
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No 'moral' intend P. except indicating the consequences of following tradition rather than revolution.

best

mac
by Macavity
Sat Jan 04, 2020 6:22 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: If Poetry Could Hold Water : The Landlockeds of Europe
Replies: 12
Views: 312

Re: Plumbing Without Tears ~ Landlocked Eurasia

hi Jules, I like maps and the word playing with country names is an entertainment and kept my interest in the poem. I can visualise the map if not the plumbing. I wondered if the 'plumbing angle' could be related to climate issues to give the poem more purpose? best mac ps just read through the comm...
by Macavity
Fri Jan 03, 2020 6:10 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Island Fiction (revision 8)
Replies: 23
Views: 633

Re: Island Lessons (revision5)

To another year of searching :lol: Nudging me from hibernation Jules :) 'her claws' 'Her gran' - is that the same person? I suspect not, but ambiguous. I've edited to clarify because there are consequences to 'knitting'. falsifying dream - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uL3vCYSR-Y0 all the best mac
by Macavity
Tue Dec 31, 2019 6:41 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Snakeskin - December 2019
Replies: 4
Views: 319

Re: Snakeskin - December 2019

hi David,
My experience is that poetry forums change - often disappear - and naturally posters lose interest or pursue other interests. Anyway always been a fan of your writing so thank you for sharing.

all the best

mac
by Macavity
Mon Dec 30, 2019 10:54 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Booker T. and the M.G's
Replies: 0
Views: 107

Booker T. and the M.G's

by Macavity
Fri Dec 27, 2019 3:48 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: .
Replies: 8
Views: 259

Re: NAJA

Nice title Miles, learnt something there. Wasn't sure if the poem was overwritten at first, almost parody, but on re-reading it has drawn me in a dark fun sort of way. The voice has an interesting detached, observational tone at times. Not too much sibilance either, though My precious obviously trig...
by Macavity
Thu Dec 26, 2019 4:16 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Snakeskin - December 2019
Replies: 4
Views: 319

Re: Snakeskin - December 2019

Thanks for sharing David. Excellent as always. Particularly enjoyed the seasonal warmth of the concert poem.

congrats

mac
by Macavity
Thu Dec 26, 2019 3:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Repaired v2
Replies: 16
Views: 442

Re: Repaired

Nicely done Not. Particuarly like the isolation of gone. Not sure how much a good polish effaces, but I'll cling to the poem's positives!

best

mac
by Macavity
Sun Dec 22, 2019 4:28 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Festiveness
Replies: 6
Views: 581

Re: Festiveness

I was wondering!

Happy festive period to you and family David

best

P.
by Macavity
Sun Dec 22, 2019 4:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Short of the Moon (V3)
Replies: 14
Views: 413

Re: Short of the Moon (V3)

Maybe I am layering this too much and just the emotional investment in the boiler is enough. I liked the layering in this. I watched Hanks in the humour part of his career and not followed him so much in his 'serious' roles. The humour roles were in my head plus the Hollywood heroics - that was the...
by Macavity
Sun Dec 22, 2019 3:53 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7534
Views: 830464

Re: Haiku Train

my lies stall the shame
though the ocean breaks breathing
along the bay's curve
by Macavity
Sun Dec 22, 2019 3:32 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Short of the Moon (V3)
Replies: 14
Views: 413

Re: Short of the Moon (revision)

I wonder if you'll think the 'clarifications' are a step backwards :) :lol: At least I got the 'illness' :) But somewhere in this Byzantine machine You'll probably experiment and revise Jules, though I'm not sure that will convince readers with a different poetry template. My view on the poem is to...
by Macavity
Sun Dec 22, 2019 3:04 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Abstraction (revised)
Replies: 14
Views: 893

Re: Abstraction (revised)

Thanks for taking a look P. The poem does seem open to interpretations.

best

mac
by Macavity
Sat Dec 21, 2019 8:14 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Cinders
Replies: 5
Views: 240

Re: Cinders

So the fairy tale wasn't true? Reality always feels more real because it is :) Apt title, good last line, and the poem delivered its caustic gloom.