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by Macavity
Fri Oct 23, 2020 1:47 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 129
Views: 19783

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

https://poeticareview.com/janet-harper/

The very personal concluding line is electric. I had to check out the painting.
by Macavity
Fri Oct 23, 2020 1:40 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7614
Views: 973151

Re: Haiku Train

mothers bones withered
but not their tongues that lusted
with tasty gossip
by Macavity
Fri Oct 23, 2020 1:32 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Giant of Crabber Nas
Replies: 1
Views: 20

Re: The Giant of Crabber Nas

My immediate response: I thought it was fun and muchly enjoyed.
by Macavity
Fri Oct 23, 2020 1:19 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Flotsam
Replies: 2
Views: 41

Re: Wave

Thanks for taking a look Pauline. My attempt at humour :oops: In my head, a T-shirt washes up on the shoreline with the message of living life to the full, but for N. it has either shrunk in the water or is not the right size or N. has not the 'personality' for it to 'fit' - perhaps the message has ...
by Macavity
Thu Oct 22, 2020 2:14 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 129
Views: 19783

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

Rather like the rhymes in this:

https://poetryarchive.org/poem/eden-rock/
by Macavity
Thu Oct 22, 2020 1:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: January 4th
Replies: 1
Views: 26

Re: January 4th

Like ghosts they trace what stood that night in each now dustless space. Intriguing Jackie, but I'm still outside the poem at the moment. Something been stolen from the garden? But the transgression, the weight of guilt, seems greater judging by the behaviours. Since it is a Christmas theft, perhap...
by Macavity
Wed Oct 21, 2020 4:23 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Teacher and Student
Replies: 1
Views: 27

Re: Teacher and Student

:) But does the humour detract from the point made?
by Macavity
Wed Oct 21, 2020 4:05 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 129
Views: 19783

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

the holes in the carpet where love wiped the dirt off its feet, the closet door I leave open so that my clothes don't get scared These lines are from a poem by Deborah Ketai called Sanitized for Your Protection: http://www.millerspondpoetry.com/index.php/current-issue/vol23web3 I like a poem with a...
by Macavity
Tue Oct 20, 2020 5:37 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 129
Views: 19783

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

anyone can wear the mask..... but you can take it off
Tired of those ancient myths? Well, there's always pop culture :)

http://www.freezeraypoetry.com/kate-wilson.html

Of course, there is more than one mask theme playing out here.
by Macavity
Tue Oct 20, 2020 5:10 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7614
Views: 973151

Re: Haiku Train

exchange of profit
in leaf and root and branches
promises of blossom
by Macavity
Tue Oct 20, 2020 4:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pandora's Jar
Replies: 5
Views: 34

Re: Pandora's Jar

hi Not Google tells me box was a mistranslation, which was interesting. Who blames the axe for the severed head? Just a thought. Felt the opening was restrained, but perhaps that was your intention? Who carried us into your house? The question here seemed to focus not on the object, but the person c...
by Macavity
Mon Oct 19, 2020 2:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Chrysalis - revised
Replies: 10
Views: 102

Re: Chrysalis

I did wonder about abuse, but thought the showing of photos ruled that out.
by Macavity
Mon Oct 19, 2020 5:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Memorial lies
Replies: 1
Views: 22

Re: Memorial lies

Yes, there are many tragedies in the world Amadis, some get more press than others, some are written in history books, some are passed down from generation to generation.
by Macavity
Sun Oct 18, 2020 9:01 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Love or Gas
Replies: 8
Views: 81

Re: Love or Gas

I don't find the car metaphor an issue.

No one wants my love, but being wise was never an option.
I find a gas station and fill up the tank. I see a forgotten youth
grinning in the wing mirror.
Just a thought.

best

mac
by Macavity
Sun Oct 18, 2020 6:37 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7614
Views: 973151

Re: Haiku Train

what memories made
swimming that river border
because it was there
by Macavity
Sun Oct 18, 2020 5:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Seasonal Adjustment
Replies: 7
Views: 75

Re: Seasonal Adjustment

Hedgehogs sleep beneath last season’s rumpled sheets. Like the quaintness of that Eira. buttoned with buds is a lovely phrase. Phrasing such as pillows of hopelessness. and melancholic shadows feel overwritten to me. I draw the drapes across twilight, slump deeper into my pillows Just a thought for...
by Macavity
Sun Oct 18, 2020 5:21 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 129
Views: 19783

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

I like the ambush in a poem. I'm not keen on polemical poems. This poem takes an observation of a child/father interaction and delivers an extinction message. The title could have been more subtle, the label is the opposite of an ambush, and I may not have read the poem if I hadn't been checking-out...
by Macavity
Sun Oct 18, 2020 4:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Love or Gas
Replies: 8
Views: 81

Re: Love or Gas

I often strive to write an upbeat poem Perry, a life-affirming one, but it has proven more an ambition than an actuality. Sometimes I wonder if it is the medium. I certainly find painting a more positive experience. Perhaps end with that familiar consolation from Tennyson: https://www.poetryfoundati...
by Macavity
Sat Oct 17, 2020 6:30 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7614
Views: 973151

Re: Haiku Train

compound interest
for validation is how
much money you make
by Macavity
Sat Oct 17, 2020 6:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Making Sense
Replies: 3
Views: 66

Re: Making Sense

Thanks Ray and Adamis. That sounds great, at first glance, but I don't know what it, or the rest of the poem, means. In a sense, some self-mocking. I've used the critique mantra of more sight/sound/taste/touch/smell, and less abstraction of thought, but if those experiences can't be rationalised, to...
by Macavity
Sat Oct 17, 2020 5:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Alfred Wallis: A Fisherman No More (revision2)
Replies: 10
Views: 146

Re: Alfred Wallis: A Fisherman No More (revision2)

ray miller wrote:
Fri Oct 16, 2020 9:04 am
I'd be wanting to keep "his wife is graveyard stone". Wouldn't "Each day he paints those times..." be truer?
Yes, it would. Restored the wife. Thanks for revisiting Ray.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Sat Oct 17, 2020 5:25 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Chrysalis - revised
Replies: 10
Views: 102

Re: Chrysalis

Liked it Ray. The parallels and progression work for me. just find a height where they feel safe Just a thought Not because their brains fall out Agree with Eira, this is an expression that's right for the child context. I read the ambition/extrovert/exhibitionism of the older sister and the insecu...
by Macavity
Fri Oct 16, 2020 4:24 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 129
Views: 19783

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

I noticed this poet is not a Jones/Thomas/Williams etc, but the poem does reflect the superstitious minds of some Welsh upbringings (including mine).

The poem is called Capel Salem by Judith Wozniak:

https://www.cardiffreview.com/post/2020/08/10/capel-salem/
by Macavity
Fri Oct 16, 2020 4:09 am
Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
Topic: Who's reading what?
Replies: 493
Views: 194818

Re: Who's reading what?

A number of summer re-reads persuaded me to re-visit the C20. My default is to say he/she was a 'writer of their time', but the anti-semitism of Scott's Ivanhoe just irritated as did the gender stereotypes (I know there are genre excuses). Dickens's idealisation of women, Esther in Bleak House , was...