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by Macavity
Sun Nov 17, 2019 3:49 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: dic (v4)
Replies: 11
Views: 532

Re: dic (v4)

Like V4 Not. Enough, but not too much ditch. The centring felt appropriate too! I don't think you need the dangling But empty are ...
by Macavity
Sun Nov 17, 2019 3:36 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 51
Views: 3500

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

England in 1819 By Percy Bysshe Shelley An old, mad, blind, despised, and dying King; Princes, the dregs of their dull race, who flow Through public scorn,—mud from a muddy spring; Rulers who neither see nor feel nor know, But leechlike to their fainting country cling Till they drop, blind in blood...
by Macavity
Sun Nov 17, 2019 3:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Changing Times (new ending?)
Replies: 10
Views: 159

Re: The Changing Times (new ending?)

No one bemoans the loss of the old ways.
I'm in a minority on this one, but that simple statement delivers for me in the context of the poem. Possibly because it has a dry, understated tone that plays against the magnitude of that loss of cultural identity.

best

mac
by Macavity
Sun Nov 17, 2019 3:05 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Shelley in Sainsbury's : 2019 (revision)
Replies: 3
Views: 244

Re: Shelley in Sainsbury's : 2019 (revision)

But mostly my ending was inspired by seeing so many superb female political editors and interviewers standing in groups patiently (with wry smiles and raised eyebrows) explaining to us what just happened. Journalism is a cut-throat, traditionally male- dominated business . . . you don't rise to tho...
by Macavity
Sun Nov 17, 2019 2:44 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: England, 2019
Replies: 5
Views: 56

Re: England, 2019

Welcome to the forum Dylan. A skilful outpour, particularly liked the cardigans/stamps lines, and the rhyming is inventive. A bold, fat, blond and privileged, lying chief Only two of those adjectives are relevant and, since L1 sets the tone, I feel this undermines the integrity of the poem. Perhaps ...
by Macavity
Sat Nov 16, 2019 7:44 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 51
Views: 3500

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

This is from Emily Hinshelwood's On Becoming a Fish. The collection is based around walking the Pembrokeshire coast. It is one of my fav. books.

by Macavity
Sat Nov 16, 2019 7:26 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Brinkmanship
Replies: 2
Views: 115

Re: Brinkmanship

Enjoyed this Ray, like the notion of the heavy world above that threatens/to burst through and swallow the ocean,
but Everything flashing before our eyes is hoary and and then this change in perspective is telly.
by Macavity
Sat Nov 16, 2019 6:51 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Matins (revision)
Replies: 5
Views: 180

Re: Matins (revision)

Thanks JJ. Restored the original L1 and elaborated a little.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Fri Nov 15, 2019 5:58 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Congratulations to David on his winning poem
Replies: 4
Views: 97

Re: Congratulations to David on his winning poem

The poem is listed in the index on the second link Perry, this one

https://www.culturevannin.im/poetry_map.html#poetry_map

It is called Alleluia
by Macavity
Fri Nov 15, 2019 5:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Changing Times (new ending?)
Replies: 10
Views: 159

Re: The Changing Times

Enjoyed the poem Perry. The contrast of coats/pelts was most effective. I prefer the more familiar fluent than fluid.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Thu Nov 14, 2019 10:11 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Congratulations to David on his winning poem
Replies: 4
Views: 97

Congratulations to David on his winning poem



This poem by David was the winning poem of the Poetry Map of the Isle of Man.

https://www.culturevannin.im/poetry_map.html#poetry_map
by Macavity
Thu Nov 14, 2019 2:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Poet Smith
Replies: 9
Views: 161

Re: The Poet Smith

What shall he forge?

The coding need to be wrapped around the text Sid

What shall he forge?
by Macavity
Thu Nov 14, 2019 11:06 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Matins (revision)
Replies: 5
Views: 180

Re: Matins (revision)

Glad you enjoyed Sid. I've tweaked some in light of your comments.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Thu Nov 14, 2019 7:15 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Matins (revision)
Replies: 5
Views: 180

Matins (revision)

revision Outside the stoop of sky broods a hunchbacked cumulus, the weight of dreams will linger long into the breakfast hour. She switches on another blink of electric light and mumbles along the margins tying curtains that bind rituals of waking with tea and toast and thick cut marmalade. Repeati...
by Macavity
Thu Nov 14, 2019 6:40 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Dome of Myrtle - V3 (was Myrtle)
Replies: 5
Views: 274

Re: Dome of Myrtle - V3 (was Myrtle)

Hey stack-speaker" could be an address to a poet, so the tone is half ironic, half serious self-congratulation/celebration of maturity This is very buried Jules, especially since you have fixed the image of the myrtle and bees into the reader's mind. self sound' is the curse of all audiophiles (tho...
by Macavity
Wed Nov 13, 2019 10:38 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Themed mag editions...
Replies: 107
Views: 34375

Re: Themed mag editions...

I think this is quite an interesting theme:

https://magmapoetry.com/call-for-submission-magma-77-act-your-age/

And for those seeking fame in competitions:

https://www.acumen-poetry.co.uk/international-poetry-competition/

One of the judges is the editor of London Grip.
by Macavity
Wed Nov 13, 2019 10:28 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: I wrote 3 poems in hope
Replies: 2
Views: 115

Re: I wrote 3 poems in hope

hi TS
Like the notion of hiding poems. Perhaps it would be too schematic to specify an individual recipient for each poem, but the rogermcgoughiankindaway poem at least deserves one.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Wed Nov 13, 2019 4:37 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Bogie Man
Replies: 4
Views: 146

Re: Bogie Man

I'd still drop the Hancock reference Jules. It blinkers the slant too much in that world. Anyway the write doesn't need that prop or framing summation. I once knew this guy or rather, I was thrown into his company. The whole thing was a strangely violent escapade - I don't come out of it at all well...
by Macavity
Tue Nov 12, 2019 6:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Jammie Dodgers (revision3)
Replies: 22
Views: 740

Re: Jammie Dodgers (revision3)

Good point about the 'lead' Jules. Restored the sentence.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Tue Nov 12, 2019 6:32 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: MAGA RAKA fooka rooka (Oswald on Bass) was Shack-Kerouac
Replies: 15
Views: 836

Re: Shack-Kerouac (revision)

Enjoyed. Definitely a separate piece. A lot of dense referencing. The story is there, though it has the rush of amphetamine rather than the sleazy drawl of noir. The influence of Hancock I guess.

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Mon Nov 11, 2019 9:55 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A poem that I read today by Mac
Replies: 51
Views: 3500

Re: A poem that I read today by Mac

Some Plath -



That pristine New England accent...a must listen.

I have the Collected Poems edited by her reliable husband!
by Macavity
Mon Nov 11, 2019 9:12 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Rising Mists of Enchantment
Replies: 10
Views: 408

Re: Rising Mists of Enchantment

hi Sid, mist/weight/space were the interesting elements for me. Suggested edits are to cut down on the -ing and the more abstract elements such as L6. hope that helps some mac Rising mist, weighted upon the ground, claims space as its own, enthralling to venture forth into its realm where hazards li...
by Macavity
Mon Nov 11, 2019 9:01 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: MAGA RAKA fooka rooka (Oswald on Bass) was Shack-Kerouac
Replies: 15
Views: 836

Re: Shack-Kerouac (revision)

wild Jules, wild
by Macavity
Sun Nov 10, 2019 5:49 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The bookshop antiquarian removes her glasses (revision5)
Replies: 23
Views: 819

Re: The bookshop antiquarian removes her glasses (revision5)

Thanks for coming back Jules and Sid.

Appreciate the thumbs up Sid.

More for me to ponder on Jules :) I was more interested in the girl than Bogart so I don't want to weight the poem there. I'd be interested to read a Bogie Man write from Jules...a performance poem? :D

cheers

mac
by Macavity
Sat Nov 09, 2019 5:20 am
Forum: Forum News and Support
Topic: Epic fail
Replies: 2
Views: 288

Re: Epic fail

Thanks for the update Nicola. I haven't noticed any missing posts.

cheers

mac