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by bodkin
Wed Jun 28, 2017 1:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Antikythera, and other mechanisms
Replies: 6
Views: 756

Re: Antikythera, and other mechanisms

Thanks all, I'm not sure what message I'll take from this. I wondering if you're all reading something different into it from what I intend... Or maybe it's because I know the subject matter better...

Hmm, maybe one to sit on for a while.

Thanks!

Ian
by bodkin
Wed Jun 21, 2017 6:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The day science fiction is obliged to save the world
Replies: 7
Views: 1190

Re: The day science fiction is obliged to save the world

I realise it would not say all of what you want to say. But I like the poem that consists simply of the first four stanzas. Seth Yes, there is something it that. I was thinking of those as the introduction, a sort of volta at the end of those four bits... Then a slightly different theme until the l...
by bodkin
Tue Jun 20, 2017 8:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Antikythera, and other mechanisms
Replies: 6
Views: 756

Antikythera, and other mechanisms

Antikythera, and other mechanisms Captain Τιμόν(*) views the device Caesar has ordered strictly, that no one turns the handle —the technikós(***) Αλέκος(**) staggers slightly in the swell, his hand upon the opened crate— nobody is to see events from future time laid out. The Gods alone know this by...
by bodkin
Tue Jun 20, 2017 3:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The day science fiction is obliged to save the world
Replies: 7
Views: 1190

Re: The day science fiction is obliged to save the world

Thanks all, The overall critique that the parts of this don't sit easily together may be valid. For me there is a sort of link, but it is perhaps about the relationship between SciFi and the so-called "real world" rather than any specific aspect of the world. This may not come over to the typical re...
by bodkin
Thu Jun 15, 2017 8:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The day science fiction is obliged to save the world
Replies: 7
Views: 1190

The day science fiction is obliged to save the world

The day science fiction is obliged to save the world The day science fiction is obliged to save the world the alien fleet decloaks, apologises; says— it isn't us, it's them— and takes their vinyl collection back into hyperspace. The day science fiction is obliged to save the world a mutant traffic ...
by bodkin
Sun Jun 11, 2017 9:20 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Red Boots
Replies: 9
Views: 809

Re: Red Boots

Hi Sheila,

Similar thoughts to NQS from me...

Ian
by bodkin
Sun Jun 11, 2017 9:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In My Image - revised
Replies: 7
Views: 715

Re: In My Image - revised

Enjoyed, not 100% sure I understand the end, are you saying the daughter inherited scepticism from you? And thus calls the holy water "nothing" (meaning "nothing special")? Is the first strophe entirely necessary as a set up? Could you start with the striking bathroom image and only reveal why it's ...
by bodkin
Sun Jun 11, 2017 9:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: How to lose your mum - Revision
Replies: 24
Views: 1386

Re: How to lose your mum

Very good. Ray called this a form, is it a "formal" form? e.g. does it have a name?

Ian
by bodkin
Sun Jun 11, 2017 9:10 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Elvis has left the village
Replies: 20
Views: 2179

Re: Elvis has left the village

Enjoyed very much.

"and" instead of "but" in the final line? To make it more a consequence than a quibble? After all, isn't loneliness the natural companion to greatness?

Ian
by bodkin
Sun Jun 11, 2017 8:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)
Replies: 22
Views: 2265

Re: On not knowing where to look for you (revised)

Of this I am certain. That the universe is full of matter Colon instead of fullstop? Lose the "that"? and gravity pulls all matter together. Don't repeat "matter" so soon? "things" or just "all together"? That the expansion of the universe has not been slowing, You need this "that" if you need that...
by bodkin
Sun Jun 11, 2017 8:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Coming to naught
Replies: 12
Views: 2527

Re: Coming to naught

Second bite: There are some puzzles in this wonderful piece which may well have been thrown to us as wabi-sabi-style bones to chew on . . . Perhaps I can persuade the poet to give us a close reading of at least L4 by spilling my own version of what I think is going on. Have I explained enough above...
by bodkin
Sun Jun 11, 2017 8:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Coming to naught
Replies: 12
Views: 2527

Re: Coming to naught

Thanks all, A couple of people question "prime of the flow"... but all I mean is the obvious (I thought it obvious) e.g. "life". Prime as in main part, a parent is (or was once) the main part of your life, and flow as in river as in time as in life, etc etc... NQS -- I like "iced" for its double mea...
by bodkin
Fri Jun 09, 2017 8:51 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Coming to naught
Replies: 12
Views: 2527

Re: Coming to naught

Hi all,

Sorry, the board's been down and after that I've not been paying attention.

I'll try to reply properly and thank people tomorrow...

Ian
by bodkin
Fri May 26, 2017 8:29 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Coming to naught
Replies: 12
Views: 2527

Re: Coming to naught

Or the set of all sets that cannot be used to form paradoxes...

Thanks Seth! I maybe agree with you on the end, it is just that ending on "we're done." felt too abrupt...

Ian
by bodkin
Fri May 26, 2017 11:06 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Coming to naught
Replies: 12
Views: 2527

Coming to naught

Coming to naught All zeros are the same zero, they say scribbling on the whiteboard in that winter's day seminar. Your car was iced and bitter that morning as you chipped out of your bed and drove away from the news of a parent rubbed out slowly from the prime of the flow. Where do you go, when mat...
by bodkin
Sat May 06, 2017 7:43 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: April comp
Replies: 3
Views: 2175

Re: April comp

OK, it seems to be back now... weird...
by bodkin
Sat May 06, 2017 6:02 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: April comp
Replies: 3
Views: 2175

Re: April comp

Something seems to have gone awry... I can see that post in "view your posts" but not in the forum.

I must rush now, but later I'll try moving it elsewhere and back, that might fix it...

Ian
by bodkin
Wed May 03, 2017 7:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: April 29th
Replies: 2
Views: 1253

Re: April 29th

I've never been prompt, and indeed I used no prompt for this...

http://www.ianbadcoe.uk/2017/05/napowri ... ge-on.html
by bodkin
Wed May 03, 2017 7:44 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: April 27th
Replies: 7
Views: 2155

Re: April 27th

Crayon wrote:
bodkin wrote:From Marie Lightman's "irrational robot" prompt...

http://www.ianbadcoe.uk/2017/05/napowri ... ience.html
Good one, robodkin. One of my favourites of your many strong poems for NaPoWriMo. And I think I understood almost all of this one.
Thank you!
by bodkin
Tue May 02, 2017 8:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: April 28th
Replies: 11
Views: 2880

Re: April 28th

T minus 3, don't ask what prompted this:

http://www.ianbadcoe.uk/2017/05/napowri ... s-and.html
by bodkin
Mon May 01, 2017 3:58 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: April 27th
Replies: 7
Views: 2155

Re: April 27th

From Marie Lightman's "irrational robot" prompt...

http://www.ianbadcoe.uk/2017/05/napowri ... ience.html
by bodkin
Sun Apr 30, 2017 8:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: April 24th
Replies: 9
Views: 3670

Re: April 24th

Thanks JJ, I wondered if you'd appreciate my 25th one also...
by bodkin
Sun Apr 30, 2017 8:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: April 26th
Replies: 8
Views: 2159

Re: April 26th

I did yesterday's "space" prompt...

http://www.ianbadcoe.uk/2017/04/napowri ... space.html
by bodkin
Sat Apr 29, 2017 5:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: April 25th
Replies: 7
Views: 3107

Re: April 25th