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by Ros
Fri Feb 15, 2019 10:04 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In My Mother's Bedroom After the Funeral
Replies: 27
Views: 1353

Re: In My Mother's Bedroom After the Funeral

Just a thought... Could you say something like
... could not now comprehend it...

And leave the dementia left unsaid? I think the reader would still understand.
by Ros
Fri Feb 15, 2019 10:12 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: EveryPoet.org?
Replies: 3
Views: 770

Re: EveryPoet.org?

Hi Michelle, It used to have a reputation for shredding anyone they didn't approve of. I'm rather pleased if it's dying! Forums tend to have ups and downs but in general I have an impression many are struggling to keep committed members. It takes time to do it properly. We are rather more welcoming ...
by Ros
Thu Feb 14, 2019 4:48 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Antiphon issue 24
Replies: 7
Views: 439

Antiphon issue 24

Delighted to announce the new issue of Antiphon. You may recognise a couple of names: http://antiphon.org.uk/wordpress/

Ros
by Ros
Fri Feb 08, 2019 3:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In My Mother's Bedroom After the Funeral
Replies: 27
Views: 1353

Re: In My Mother's Bedroom After Her Funeral

My pleasure!
hmm, I thought heaven was implied anyway, but reading it again, I wonder if it would be so obvious she had passed away without it. But I do feel something a bit less literal might work well.

Ros
by Ros
Fri Feb 08, 2019 3:20 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Still Life (was Boots)
Replies: 25
Views: 885

Re: Still Life (was Boots)

I like the revision, Luke - I think it says all that is necessary.

Ros
by Ros
Fri Feb 08, 2019 3:13 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Perry's Opinions (on minimalism and more)
Replies: 15
Views: 1219

Re: Perry's Opinions (on minimalism and more)

Dear Perry, The number of mods is more historic than anything - many of them are no longer around much, as you'll have noticed. I've never found anyone reluctant to argue with me just because I was a mod! Their main use has been to keep an eye on the place and turf out the very occasional person who...
by Ros
Fri Feb 08, 2019 9:05 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In My Mother's Bedroom After the Funeral
Replies: 27
Views: 1353

Re: In My Mother's Bedroom After Her Funeral

I like it as it is, and think the style fits the poem well. It might be good to introduce a few more half-rhymes into the first verse, if possible. Like you, I think it needs both verses. The only cut I'd suggest is 'to heaven ' - it spells it out rather, and I like the idea of her climbing without ...
by Ros
Sat Jan 12, 2019 4:31 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Inclusion
Replies: 20
Views: 975

Re: Inclusion

I liked it too - agree you could end a little sooner, as discussed. I think Perry has hit on something - I'd imagine this could be true: "The narrator, at one and the same time, seems to be annoyed or repelled by the scene, but also affected by it." - a sort of attempt to stay a bit distanced from i...
by Ros
Fri Dec 14, 2018 3:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Remembering Zeus
Replies: 16
Views: 1181

Re: Remembering Zeus

This is very effective, and it like it. I wonder though about the last line - you've already implicitly mocked the idea that fur could protect, so for me the narrator wishing for it when he already knows it doesn't work seems wrong.

Ros
by Ros
Sun Dec 02, 2018 3:37 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Elderly Japanese couple, Agrigento (revised)
Replies: 13
Views: 1060

Re: Elderly Japanese couple, Agrigento

I like it, and don't have any strong suggestions. I think it's very effective.
I'd be tempted, perhaps, to leave the lines long but go for 7 strong stresses per line.

Ros
by Ros
Sun Dec 02, 2018 3:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Eating Breakfast While the Rohingya Flee
Replies: 13
Views: 950

Re: Eating Breakfast While the Rohingya Flee

I rather like Tony's rewrite. The title says what the poem is about. The point becomes that, for the narrator, he has the luxury of contemplating his sandwich, leaving unsaid the horrors that others are at that moment experiencing. I found When fleeing through mud to foreign lands, you don’t get to ...
by Ros
Wed Nov 07, 2018 3:04 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Armitage
Replies: 1
Views: 344

Re: Armitage

I think this was his application.

I rather liked '(not) someone who is a shop-steward for contemporary values first and a poet second (or third).' No point at all if the poetry doesn't come first.

Ros
by Ros
Wed Oct 24, 2018 8:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Lonely Children
Replies: 7
Views: 923

Re: Lonely Children

The only real effect of being an editor is that I get to read a lot of poetry, good and bad. I make no particular claim about the endings of poems in general - my personal preference is for not spelling things out too much. Whether fashions have changed, I don't know. I suppose my comment was really...
by Ros
Wed Oct 24, 2018 12:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Lonely Children
Replies: 7
Views: 923

Re: Lonely Children

I think you could effectively lose the last 5 lines, which rather spell out what the reader has already gathered. I like 'wind-burned and sore', and agree with Ray about the bleed line. I enjoyed this.

Ros
by Ros
Wed Oct 24, 2018 11:05 am
Forum: Forum News and Support
Topic: Meet the new mods (not the same as the old mods)
Replies: 10
Views: 1437

Re: Meet the new mods (not the same as the old mods)

I am sort of around. Trying to give poetry generally more attention, but other things keep getting in the way. Thanks for stepping up to the plate, Tristan. Everyone seems very well behaved at present.

Ros
by Ros
Sat Sep 29, 2018 3:44 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Antiphon open for submissions
Replies: 6
Views: 1805

Re: Antiphon open for submissions

Thanks, Tristan - I always love to hear if people have liked the mag. I thought the theme was a bit of a risk but it worked really well.

Ros
by Ros
Fri Sep 21, 2018 10:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: My Battle with ADHD
Replies: 12
Views: 1399

Re: My Battle with ADHD

A day out at Eastnor, perhaps?

I thought it followed the train of thought of an ADHD kid well. I think the title is misleading - implies the writer has ADHD.
by Ros
Sun Jun 17, 2018 2:51 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Antiphon open for submissions
Replies: 6
Views: 1805

Antiphon open for submissions

Antiphon issue 23 - submissions now open! We're looking for poems with some link to science, in the broadest sense - poems that stretch beyond the day to day human concerns. Poems that celebrate the vastness of it all, or consider beginnings, or endings, or how we know anything at all. See submissio...
by Ros
Sun May 13, 2018 2:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: May’s bovine stasis
Replies: 11
Views: 2994

Re: May’s bovine stasis

Very nice!
by Ros
Sun May 13, 2018 2:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: In Joan's Garden
Replies: 18
Views: 2740

Re: In Joan's Garden

Thank you for letting us know, Emmanuel. Yes, it's very similar.
Lovely was banned a while back, though not for plagiarism. If he was still active, I'd be inclined to take action, but since the whole Lovely event was some years ago it's probably best to let the whole thing die now.

Ros
by Ros
Tue Apr 17, 2018 2:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Mr. Drew Wears Armani
Replies: 7
Views: 1403

Re: Mr. Drew Wears Armani

I don't believe I knew that, either.

Ros
by Ros
Wed Mar 21, 2018 9:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Silk & Soup
Replies: 15
Views: 1822

Re: Silk & Soup

Hello silent lotus, nice to see you around. An interesting contrast, although I'm not really seeing the connection between the two parts. I like the introduction of solidly technological streetlamps into a poem that emphasises the natural setting. I'm confused by 'her speak' - why not 'her speech'? ...
by Ros
Wed Mar 14, 2018 10:57 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Snow Hoard (v3)
Replies: 12
Views: 1599

Re: Snow Hoard

I think it's lovely, the idea of the snow bringing treasures from the far north. Good stuff.

Ros
by Ros
Sat Feb 24, 2018 1:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Pea (V2)
Replies: 14
Views: 1676

Re: The Pea

I think it's a clever take on the original. Does rather depend on what the pea symbolises, though, and I'm not sure what to make of the last line.

Ros
by Ros
Sun Feb 11, 2018 11:42 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Antiphon issue 22 now live!
Replies: 5
Views: 895

Re: Antiphon issue 22 now live!

Thanks, Tristan. I'm very pleased you are enjoying it.

Ros