Search found 193 matches

by Leigh
Thu Jan 07, 2010 12:48 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Winter remember the autumn leaves.
Replies: 5
Views: 506

Winter remember the autumn leaves.

Night light air storm snow high up waits to kisses her apple cheeks red raw if the rooftops are whiter than the floor tender skin is a price she’ll pay- she climbs into the attic, I lift the tiles away. Church bells drop knells and bitter tears, when in gruesome light tomorrow’s head rears you’ll be...
by Leigh
Fri Jan 01, 2010 3:28 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love at the execution.
Replies: 17
Views: 898

Re: Love at the execution.

Oh God I don't know but does anyone ever think that definition gets in the way of art, this obsession with form.
by Leigh
Thu Dec 31, 2009 12:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love at the execution.
Replies: 17
Views: 898

Re: Love at the execution.

Peter, I realise that wheher or not like something is not something you can controll- I didn't mean toinsinuate otherwise.

Leigh.
by Leigh
Wed Dec 30, 2009 11:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love at the execution.
Replies: 17
Views: 898

Re: Love at the execution.

Hi there.I just want to assure everyone that I'm not offended by anything anyone has said and appreciate your being frank. I agree with much of what you say Ros, though there is a simile in there. There are few other devices but I'm not entirely sure what they're called e.g. when a person or people ...
by Leigh
Wed Dec 30, 2009 8:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love at the execution.
Replies: 17
Views: 898

Re: Love at the execution.

I'm not sure if it is or isn't poetry really- I don't mind if anyone see's it as peotry or not. It would be nice, I think, just to find out how it makes people react, how it makes the reader feel. I think its more important to express myself in a manner I feel is true to me, if my work is peotry or ...
by Leigh
Wed Dec 30, 2009 7:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love at the execution.
Replies: 17
Views: 898

Re: Love at the execution.

I'm not sure what you mean by peotry.
by Leigh
Wed Dec 30, 2009 7:19 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love at the execution.
Replies: 17
Views: 898

Re: Love at the execution.

Normally I don't understand my writing, but this one does a loose progression of plot. It's about a soildier imagining, perhaps halucinating, that he saves the life of and falls in love with one of the prisoners he has to execute, because she refuses to wear a hood during the execution. In real life...
by Leigh
Wed Dec 30, 2009 3:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love at the execution.
Replies: 17
Views: 898

Love at the execution.

A line of hooded heads and strung wrists led out to the mark in front of the pock filled wall. One lone head amoung them, one unhooded womans face. She slipped her cuffs beautif'li I no'iced before the rest, told her run with my eyes while I laid down cover left and right. Watched her scale the peri...
by Leigh
Wed Dec 30, 2009 2:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: After
Replies: 5
Views: 338

Re: After

I think this reads really well. I enjoy writing where every word seems necessary. Just a suggestion but I'd cut 'the' out of the last line so it would read "and on this shut door".

Cheers.
by Leigh
Wed Dec 30, 2009 2:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: I got a new tent for christmas
Replies: 10
Views: 706

Re: I got a new tent for christmas

Charming. Some beutifull images. A real feeling of warmth surrounds this poem- even with the chill round the tent.
by Leigh
Mon Dec 28, 2009 8:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Several irreverant numbers ( wiching everyone was phonemic)
Replies: 2
Views: 401

Re: Several irreverant numbers ( wiching everyone was phonemic)

Cheers suzanne, thanksfor the reply. I don't really understand it myself. I feel like a robot sometimes and so thought I might try and write like one.
by Leigh
Mon Dec 28, 2009 12:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Several irreverant numbers ( wiching everyone was phonemic)
Replies: 2
Views: 401

Several irreverant numbers ( wiching everyone was phonemic)

try not to think about self, turn backto sight of ruined mental health. Shadow fears insight concern, phones talk to ghosts at home alone. Dead pianos played by no fingers, rehydrate sustain but death still on lingers. Disident bones rebel against their spirits, prepare by severing head for brainles...
by Leigh
Fri May 15, 2009 11:00 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: I worte this immediately afterwards.
Replies: 5
Views: 510

I worte this immediately afterwards.

burning as if to shirk the heat comes in the lamp lit hung, over the east. Trussed up still in the long time quiet. remember december ill, black coal teeth: on a diet. he takes his seat Loud blood a man drops to his knees on the siding in one singular motion his hand fallen his head bowed sliding A ...
by Leigh
Fri May 15, 2009 10:36 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: She kneaded- backroom edit
Replies: 17
Views: 1533

Re: She kneaded- backroom edit

This made me laugh. Excelent: so innocent, without reproach. Beuatifull
by Leigh
Fri May 15, 2009 10:33 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Babysitting
Replies: 7
Views: 460

Re: Babysitting

A very informal direct piece. I feel as though I heard you read it. The onlly thing i would change is to remove the parenthesis on slowly: it would have the same effect without it.
by Leigh
Sun May 03, 2009 2:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Scriptures - ( contains some blue words)
Replies: 4
Views: 652

Re: Scriptures - ( contains some blue words)

This is trully great. Its that pit which surrounds us like white washed courtyard walls, blinding in the sun; yet still our feet know the truth of the sodden mud floor. Also, it reminds me of what happened to me yesterday. You have a real tallent for describing dour filth.
by Leigh
Sun May 03, 2009 2:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: In the Mix
Replies: 8
Views: 603

Re: In the Mix

Seems like a very personal piece. I get the impression that real inidents are being reffered to and, by way of balance, in specific being specific the references retain a sureall quality: a surrealnes coupled with a refence to what is often termed reallity- I can't think of a good word for it. Like ...
by Leigh
Sun May 03, 2009 2:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Cab Queue (strong language)
Replies: 11
Views: 755

Re: The Cab Queue (strong language)

It seems like quite an apt analogy for life: a taxi queue at lest it would have if you had of n had of been stabbed and died; not that I think the end of the poem doesn't have legitimacy, it seems to suggest the beginning pf a cycle. Incidentally, i think queue is one the strangestly spelt words in ...
by Leigh
Sun May 03, 2009 1:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: end waste.
Replies: 7
Views: 588

Re: end waste.

maybe its part of a poem. I think its easy to imagine the rest.
by Leigh
Sun May 03, 2009 11:54 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: end waste.
Replies: 7
Views: 588

end waste.

Either you have someone else, you think I need discipline like an unruly dog or you are just being a bitch.



I believe you are trying to force me out of love with you. everything is a construct
by Leigh
Wed Apr 29, 2009 11:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A gentle taping
Replies: 7
Views: 565

Re: A gentle taping

Hey, the he and it thing are different. It is the panic and he refers to a halucination. The a title is reerence to a E. A. Poe poem. Cheers guys.
by Leigh
Wed Apr 29, 2009 11:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: That's all.
Replies: 7
Views: 684

Re: That's all.

You are right coop, it is rushed and without thought, but it made me laugh. Sometimes I write without any consideration whatsoever, just let the words out. I think if I invented a context for them it would be a misrepresentation of whatever inspired them. I think throw away rushed things can be appr...
by Leigh
Tue Apr 28, 2009 9:05 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A gentle taping
Replies: 7
Views: 565

Re: A gentle taping

Its about a terrfic anxiety, a needless horror that defies words.
by Leigh
Tue Apr 28, 2009 9:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: That's all.
Replies: 7
Views: 684

Re: That's all.

It could be any incident, pick one. It could also be the infliction of the cut.
by Leigh
Tue Apr 28, 2009 3:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A gentle taping
Replies: 7
Views: 565

A gentle taping

I rememebr it from years ago, it clawed in during a fever and re-aranged the furniture, everything was wrong, I heard him say he wants me dead mirror writing. That was the worst time. It still visits, I still have no word for it because it has no reason. the sheet of my bed are always uneven loud an...