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by Suzanne
Tue May 12, 2020 5:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Spring in the Hollow
Replies: 7
Views: 889

Re: Spring in the Hollow

Thanks for the comments. I used some of them and edited. I'd not written a poem since my last visit! I know it's a little dull but, I wrote a poem. Lol. I always wonder if I still can do it. Thanks, Jackie, for the Jesse reference! Best compliment that it was brought to mind. Hi, David! Thank you, I...
by Suzanne
Sat May 09, 2020 3:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Spring in the Hollow
Replies: 7
Views: 889

Spring in the Hollow

Spring in the Hollow The leaves are still buds on the branches of the birch and the breeze blows bitter through the window. That blue of the sky reminds me of something I cannot quite put my finger on... Was it the water in your bath or your now unused coffee cup? You taught me that emptiness was be...
by Suzanne
Sat May 09, 2020 3:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Joyful Builder, Searching Student
Replies: 5
Views: 1062

Re: Joyful Builder, Searching Student

Hi bjondon,

The title doesn't seem connected to the thing. I'm not sure what message you are trying to convey to the reader more than the N is a shit.

I just don't know.
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Sat May 09, 2020 3:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Promised Land (v4)
Replies: 29
Views: 2330

Re: The Promised Land (v4)

Hi, The first lines were fun to read, good rhythm. The topic brings an immediate emotional response, like trauma. Red Hatters was not as smooth as red hatted hero. I also don't believe they deserve capitalization no matter how aroggant they seem. He says he's built a wall. He says lots of things. Su...
by Suzanne
Mon Nov 18, 2019 4:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Brian
Replies: 5
Views: 978

Re: Brian

Oh Ray, you are quite a creative writer, amazing poet. You must have books of them now.

I fully enjoyed this.

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Mon Nov 18, 2019 5:49 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: *
Replies: 19
Views: 1517

Re: England, 2019

"the Church as meaningful as cardigans;
the Monarchy clutching stamps in wrinkled hands—"

A very strong visual encompassing the vulnerabilities of both historical and present citizens.

Dylan is a lovely name.
by Suzanne
Sat Nov 10, 2018 7:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Staying Safe
Replies: 14
Views: 3721

Re: Staying Safe

Well, that was pleasant to read.

Thanks.
I think I need to write another poem. :)
by Suzanne
Sat Nov 03, 2018 8:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Staying Safe
Replies: 14
Views: 3721

Re: Staying Safe

Thank you, Ross from down under. The couplets were an accident. I agree with you about that.
Thank you for your thoughtful comments.

And thank you, Jackie, for yours, too. I liked that you felt the tension in this. Enjoyed your comments very much.

:)
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Thu Nov 01, 2018 8:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Hands
Replies: 7
Views: 1605

Re: Hands

This is lovely. I think that if it was titled Holding hands, so words that would covey the last stanza you wanted to add, it wold work. the tile, now, is fine and good but it could be even better if it did a little of the work for your message. Also: so my grandad said, and her hands would have been...
by Suzanne
Thu Nov 01, 2018 8:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Staying Safe
Replies: 14
Views: 3721

Re: Staying Safe

Hi. Thank you for the replies and apologies for the long delay in thanking you for your time. I have tweaked it a bit. Seems like i wrote it a very long time ago. Poetry, it is like deciding to take a long bath. You don't always have the time to do it. No matter how pleasant. Just saying. Warmly, Su...
by Suzanne
Thu Nov 01, 2018 8:28 am
Forum: Current Features
Topic: The reckoning
Replies: 28
Views: 18954

Re: The reckoning

Pauline,

This is still fantastic. Takes my breath away.
Did it get published? do it. Send it.

So rich. I think it's alive.


Warmly,
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Tue Jan 23, 2018 10:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7627
Views: 984298

Re: Haiku Train

The number is five,
I don't know why that matters:
It's my new guitar.
by Suzanne
Mon Jan 22, 2018 9:10 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Staying Safe
Replies: 14
Views: 3721

Staying Safe

Staying Safe He tells me we need a fence. I adjust the twists of barbed wire. The flesh of my shoulder has a moment of relief from the weight of the spool carried through the dry, or muddied, beige seasons. Another fence. I feel my eyes roll, my eternal ageless self balking in a subtle release of en...
by Suzanne
Mon Jan 22, 2018 9:06 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Madness in Three Sections
Replies: 8
Views: 2139

Re: Madness in Three Sections

Hi Ray,

I think the title I great.

My favorite lines were the last four of the first section. Nice imagery and sound.

You've caught your subject so well.
I'm left feeling an endearment for this character. :)

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Mon Jan 22, 2018 8:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: lost life
Replies: 4
Views: 1511

Re: lost life

Hi firebird,

I think adding some color or sound would enhance the whole. Just a thought.

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Mon Nov 27, 2017 6:41 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Fish supper
Replies: 5
Views: 1846

Re: Fish supper

I love this. The crisp colors reflect life. Well done, Pauline. And I love the title.
by Suzanne
Mon Nov 27, 2017 5:27 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Who's running the show?
Replies: 12
Views: 7730

Re: Who's running the show?

Here.

:)

Well, I peek now and again, too.
Not writing these days but always wanting to...

I miss you people and the place.

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Sat Dec 31, 2016 5:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Poem
Replies: 5
Views: 1391

Re: A Poem

Thank you, Mac and 68degrees.

I thought my last lines read awkwardly. I was not completely sold on the word vapor for the clouds but could not think of another word. Ether didn't seem right...

And wondered about my title.

This seems like a poem unfinished.

Thanks for the comments.
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Sat Dec 31, 2016 5:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Farther Than it Looks
Replies: 16
Views: 2786

Re: Farther Than it Looks

I apologize if it came across rude. It was not my intention. I honestly believe it is good to have diversity here. I equated your preference to those who have a preference for minimalism. Saying I will remember when I critique next time was meant to be supportive of your preference because the under...
by Suzanne
Sat Dec 31, 2016 5:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Farther Than it Looks
Replies: 16
Views: 2786

Re: Farther Than it Looks

You asked: Why should a poem be any different? Well, a poem hanging in a museum or published in an equivalent honor, maybe should, or shouldn't but this poem is not that. This poem was posted in a Writer's Workshop, in the experienced section which assumes you wanted critical feedback to work on it....
by Suzanne
Fri Dec 30, 2016 8:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Farther Than it Looks
Replies: 16
Views: 2786

Re: Farther Than it Looks

We understood what Dorothy was saying and assumed, unless she's mad, that it had meaning to her. It is the poet's meaning we are not understanding. And the title. But I have gathered, from your replies, the desire was to leave the reader puzzled about the meaning of the poem. Which implies our comme...
by Suzanne
Thu Dec 29, 2016 7:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Poem
Replies: 5
Views: 1391

A Poem

A Poem I said, just as tenderly as butterflies rise and fall when I hear your voice, each word of a poem is set into its place. Write me a poem, you said, then rolled me onto my back under a sky of white round dandelion tufted clouds and I laced them together placed a crown upon your head. And told ...
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 28, 2016 3:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies
Replies: 12
Views: 2364

Re: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies

Well spotted, David. So clever!

I love how, in poetry, so much can alter with a change of a word or two.

I will ponder this and the upside down.

Warmly,
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 28, 2016 6:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Blake's rough kiss
Replies: 16
Views: 4424

Re: Blake's rough kiss

It's about a specific poem? One or his general method of kissing? A rough kiss is not always negative, that's for sure.

I know little of him. And know you all know him well.
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 28, 2016 6:15 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies
Replies: 12
Views: 2364

Re: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies

Hi peter, Thank you. That squirrel climbed down the chain and hung by its feet upside down like an acrobat. I thought hung and clung was a strike of luck but, yes, I can see it could be seen as unfortunate. Being the first poem written in about a year, I was just happy it landed on the page! Always ...