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by Suzanne
Sat Nov 10, 2018 7:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Staying Safe
Replies: 14
Views: 2439

Re: Staying Safe

Well, that was pleasant to read.

Thanks.
I think I need to write another poem. :)
by Suzanne
Sat Nov 03, 2018 8:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Staying Safe
Replies: 14
Views: 2439

Re: Staying Safe

Thank you, Ross from down under. The couplets were an accident. I agree with you about that.
Thank you for your thoughtful comments.

And thank you, Jackie, for yours, too. I liked that you felt the tension in this. Enjoyed your comments very much.

:)
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Thu Nov 01, 2018 8:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Hands
Replies: 7
Views: 958

Re: Hands

This is lovely. I think that if it was titled Holding hands, so words that would covey the last stanza you wanted to add, it wold work. the tile, now, is fine and good but it could be even better if it did a little of the work for your message. Also: so my grandad said, and her hands would have been...
by Suzanne
Thu Nov 01, 2018 8:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Staying Safe
Replies: 14
Views: 2439

Re: Staying Safe

Hi. Thank you for the replies and apologies for the long delay in thanking you for your time. I have tweaked it a bit. Seems like i wrote it a very long time ago. Poetry, it is like deciding to take a long bath. You don't always have the time to do it. No matter how pleasant. Just saying. Warmly, Su...
by Suzanne
Thu Nov 01, 2018 8:28 am
Forum: Current Features
Topic: The reckoning
Replies: 28
Views: 11125

Re: The reckoning

Pauline,

This is still fantastic. Takes my breath away.
Did it get published? do it. Send it.

So rich. I think it's alive.


Warmly,
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Tue Jan 23, 2018 10:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Haiku Train
Replies: 7524
Views: 745721

Re: Haiku Train

The number is five,
I don't know why that matters:
It's my new guitar.
by Suzanne
Mon Jan 22, 2018 9:10 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Staying Safe
Replies: 14
Views: 2439

Staying Safe

Staying Safe He tells me we need a fence. I adjust the twists of barbed wire. The flesh of my shoulder has a moment of relief from the weight of the spool carried through the dry, or muddied, beige seasons. Another fence. I feel my eyes roll, my eternal ageless self balking in a subtle release of en...
by Suzanne
Mon Jan 22, 2018 9:06 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Madness in Three Sections
Replies: 8
Views: 1499

Re: Madness in Three Sections

Hi Ray,

I think the title I great.

My favorite lines were the last four of the first section. Nice imagery and sound.

You've caught your subject so well.
I'm left feeling an endearment for this character. :)

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Mon Jan 22, 2018 8:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: lost life
Replies: 4
Views: 1048

Re: lost life

Hi firebird,

I think adding some color or sound would enhance the whole. Just a thought.

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Mon Nov 27, 2017 6:41 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Fish supper
Replies: 5
Views: 1113

Re: Fish supper

I love this. The crisp colors reflect life. Well done, Pauline. And I love the title.
by Suzanne
Mon Nov 27, 2017 5:27 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Who's running the show?
Replies: 12
Views: 3859

Re: Who's running the show?

Here.

:)

Well, I peek now and again, too.
Not writing these days but always wanting to...

I miss you people and the place.

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Sat Dec 31, 2016 5:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Poem
Replies: 5
Views: 888

Re: A Poem

Thank you, Mac and 68degrees.

I thought my last lines read awkwardly. I was not completely sold on the word vapor for the clouds but could not think of another word. Ether didn't seem right...

And wondered about my title.

This seems like a poem unfinished.

Thanks for the comments.
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Sat Dec 31, 2016 5:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Farther Than it Looks
Replies: 16
Views: 1610

Re: Farther Than it Looks

I apologize if it came across rude. It was not my intention. I honestly believe it is good to have diversity here. I equated your preference to those who have a preference for minimalism. Saying I will remember when I critique next time was meant to be supportive of your preference because the under...
by Suzanne
Sat Dec 31, 2016 5:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Farther Than it Looks
Replies: 16
Views: 1610

Re: Farther Than it Looks

You asked: Why should a poem be any different? Well, a poem hanging in a museum or published in an equivalent honor, maybe should, or shouldn't but this poem is not that. This poem was posted in a Writer's Workshop, in the experienced section which assumes you wanted critical feedback to work on it....
by Suzanne
Fri Dec 30, 2016 8:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Farther Than it Looks
Replies: 16
Views: 1610

Re: Farther Than it Looks

We understood what Dorothy was saying and assumed, unless she's mad, that it had meaning to her. It is the poet's meaning we are not understanding. And the title. But I have gathered, from your replies, the desire was to leave the reader puzzled about the meaning of the poem. Which implies our comme...
by Suzanne
Thu Dec 29, 2016 7:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Poem
Replies: 5
Views: 888

A Poem

A Poem I said, just as tenderly as butterflies rise and fall when I hear your voice, each word of a poem is set into its place. Write me a poem, you said, then rolled me onto my back under a sky of white round dandelion tufted clouds and I laced them together placed a crown upon your head. And told ...
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 28, 2016 3:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies
Replies: 12
Views: 1430

Re: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies

Well spotted, David. So clever!

I love how, in poetry, so much can alter with a change of a word or two.

I will ponder this and the upside down.

Warmly,
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 28, 2016 6:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Blake's rough kiss
Replies: 16
Views: 3477

Re: Blake's rough kiss

It's about a specific poem? One or his general method of kissing? A rough kiss is not always negative, that's for sure.

I know little of him. And know you all know him well.
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 28, 2016 6:15 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies
Replies: 12
Views: 1430

Re: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies

Hi peter, Thank you. That squirrel climbed down the chain and hung by its feet upside down like an acrobat. I thought hung and clung was a strike of luck but, yes, I can see it could be seen as unfortunate. Being the first poem written in about a year, I was just happy it landed on the page! Always ...
by Suzanne
Wed Dec 28, 2016 5:32 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Farther Than it Looks
Replies: 16
Views: 1610

Re: Farther Than it Looks

Yes, no comments at all says something. And other meanings to " free" also crossed my mind. I said dying because I have an experience of a woman saying that often before she died. We readers understand through our experiences, of course. Same with companionship. To be lead into a more specific concl...
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 27, 2016 8:10 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: black and white (revised again)
Replies: 23
Views: 2380

Re: and yet in sweeter climes

Hi,

It seems to say that in sweeter climes, a red woolly hat would be perfect. But not in this snowy place. ?
I am envious of the snowy landscape with just one black twig. We have all twigs exposed. Rode my bike yesterday. Weird weather.

Suzanne
by Suzanne
Tue Dec 27, 2016 8:03 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Farther Than it Looks
Replies: 16
Views: 1610

Re: Farther Than it Looks

Hi, I am very fond of brevity. for me, it is admirable to have the ability to stimulate the reader's imagination with so few words. The poem, though, seems to have a rock in its shoe as it has been read but no clear comments made, yet? Maybe? I read it is either about feeling death on the horizon, w...
by Suzanne
Fri Dec 23, 2016 7:56 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies
Replies: 12
Views: 1430

Re: Establishing Boundaries with Bullies

Thank you, Ian. I appreciate it and am encouraged.
Poetry is such a workout for the rusty. Its quite time consuming, in a good way, mostly.

Thanks,
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Fri Dec 23, 2016 7:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Over My Shoulder
Replies: 17
Views: 1632

Re: Over My Shoulder

Great. I like being nice. Post more poems.
Suzanne
by Suzanne
Thu Dec 22, 2016 2:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Over My Shoulder
Replies: 17
Views: 1632

Re: Over My Shoulder

My thoughts are that poet writes to express an idea, feeling or thought and, of course, wants to be understood by an audience. Not the entire world audience but their selected audience. There is a dilemma when what was written i understood differently than what was intended. I have a hard time seein...