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by mesmie
Sat Jan 01, 2011 6:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: dream
Replies: 2
Views: 195

Re: dream

hello gavin

corrr..I really like your word use, i dunno after the last screaming..i sorta got overloaded with images and perhaps because of that
maybe there could be two writes here?..of course, it is all so very subjective isn't it?

Anyways I liked

mes :)
by mesmie
Sat Jan 01, 2011 6:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: My heart needs to be changed
Replies: 5
Views: 263

Re: My heart needs to be changed

hello lovely :)

A write, I think, full of love..
nice one
mes
by mesmie
Mon Feb 15, 2010 8:33 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: humility bay
Replies: 7
Views: 407

Re: humility bay

hello Joy two moons :)

Thoroughly enjoyed this. So many good lines..in the wrong country with the wrong husband.. I agree some of the emotions are a little mixed up but at the same time..I guess they would be :) Didn't deter from the reading though..

warmly
mes x
by mesmie
Sat Feb 13, 2010 5:37 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Abruption
Replies: 10
Views: 541

Re: Abruption

hello Dante :)

As soon as I saw the title I knew this...You dealt with your subject tenderly and with thoughtfulness, some cracking lines.


That's how it made me feel

mes x
by mesmie
Sat Feb 13, 2010 5:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Eating Mango
Replies: 19
Views: 548

Re: Eating Mango

Hello Joy Two Moons :) Thanks for that considered reply..National Geographical it may be but it was my NG..total fantasy and yeah I guess I did go on a bit.. :lol: I like the two verses you have chosen and agree the other stuff was just surplus, but god I how enjoyed writing it.. again thanks mes x
by mesmie
Sat Feb 13, 2010 5:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Eating Mango
Replies: 19
Views: 548

Re: Eating Mango

hello P :)

Many thanks for that reply and yes...a bath whilst eating Mango sounds great to me!...But only in India.. :lol:

thanks again
mes x
by mesmie
Sun Feb 07, 2010 10:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Jason
Replies: 6
Views: 270

Re: Jason

hello :) This caught me, you have captured the moment well..I thought the end line was good, you gave him two eyes in the last stanza though!..dunno what you are going to do there as saying 'his eye ignites' well that doesnt seem quite right does it?.. A strong read, one that I came back to a few ti...
by mesmie
Sun Feb 07, 2010 10:15 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: First Glance (revised)
Replies: 14
Views: 525

Re: First Glance (revised)

Hello Dante :)

I like it ... I do understand what Suz means but to me the picture is now finished.. :)

mes x
by mesmie
Sun Feb 07, 2010 10:15 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: First Glance (revised)
Replies: 14
Views: 525

Re: First Glance (revised)

Hello Dante :)

I like it ... I do understand what Suz means but to me the picture is now finished.. :)

mes x
by mesmie
Thu Feb 04, 2010 8:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: yellow flower carpet (Tanka)
Replies: 8
Views: 1803

Re: yellow flower carpet (Tanka)

:lol: ahhh I see Aru I buy my wine in boxes!! :)

mes x
by mesmie
Thu Feb 04, 2010 7:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: First Glance (revised)
Replies: 14
Views: 525

Re: First Glance

hello Dante :)


I have read this a few times now and belive you have something rather special going on.

As said the first two stanzas are great, I got lost on the last two (cept for the grass line) ..but I am sure you will sort this out and look forward to reading again!

mes x
by mesmie
Thu Feb 04, 2010 7:44 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: I wonder if you know
Replies: 18
Views: 507

Re: I wonder if you know

lots of good vibes coming your way Lovely..xx
by mesmie
Tue Feb 02, 2010 8:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Bucketfuls
Replies: 4
Views: 160

Re: Bucketfuls

hello :) I had great fun reading your lines. Somewhere in the back of my mind I remember my grandad using a big garden sieve to break up soil and calling it a riddle! Now I may have got the word wrong, but it gave extra meaning to your perforated line! I think Suz has got it right with her take on y...
by mesmie
Tue Feb 02, 2010 7:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Obsessed
Replies: 7
Views: 210

Re: Obsessed

oooo :D

Very nice, yet no curves would drive me potty!

I have no nits Aru. I thoroughly enjoyed your poem.

mes x
by mesmie
Tue Feb 02, 2010 7:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Ultimate Sacrifice
Replies: 9
Views: 231

Re: Ultimate Sacrifice

hiya firefly :)

I dunno if torture is the right word to use here firefly?.I know where you are coming from but I think it will throw the reader off track?..mind you having gone through all that nonsense perhaps torture is the right word :lol:

thanks
mes x
by mesmie
Tue Feb 02, 2010 7:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Garden Robin
Replies: 16
Views: 539

Re: The Garden Robin

gosh Suz I almost missed this one :?

This has recieved comprehensive crit and I really enjoy reading a poem followed by all the different opinions!
unafraid of new lights hung on a hewn post..lovely.
so many good lines within.
I thought it glorious :D

many thanks

mes x
by mesmie
Tue Feb 02, 2010 7:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: yellow flower carpet (Tanka)
Replies: 8
Views: 1803

Re: yellow flower carpet (Tanka)

hello aru :)

a wish embryo is a lovely idea!

I have googled your tree and a wonderful sight it is too!

Please forgive this thicko, but is the casket, wine? I am afraid I got a little lost there.

But I do enjoy your words Aru

mes x
by mesmie
Tue Feb 02, 2010 7:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Bound
Replies: 6
Views: 213

Re: Bound

hello Suz :)

Very much enjoyed the imagery and the word restraint works well for me..but..if you expand you will have to be careful not to give too much away..(it was about work? Coughs, how dreary) :lol:

nice one

mes x
by mesmie
Tue Feb 02, 2010 7:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Burnout
Replies: 8
Views: 403

Re: Burnout

hello Aru :)

Thanks for that and yes, our own private space works well..gonna tinker with this somewhat.

Thanks for dropping by

mes x
by mesmie
Mon Feb 01, 2010 12:05 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: My Mistress
Replies: 11
Views: 394

Re: My Mistress

hello :)

winks at Dante :wink:

Some nice lines within and as Dante has given quite a comprehensive crit, I cannot think of anymore to say except I think your idea on this is a good one and would love to see it revised..

looking forward to reading you again

mes x
by mesmie
Sun Jan 31, 2010 7:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Burnout
Replies: 8
Views: 403

Re: Burnout

hello :)

Many thanks on all the above crits and comments...I shall take this one back and have a rethink..

again thanks so much for taking time x

mes x 8)
by mesmie
Wed Jan 27, 2010 7:44 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Burnout
Replies: 8
Views: 403

Burnout

With nothing left to say we turn to private space, not much inbetween except a soiled heaviness. Sadness pulls shoulders, lights memories as loves dies. In a new day's tear full of emotion, bitten nails sting. The mind jumps never quite landing. Corners don't meet and angles appear skewed. The shape...
by mesmie
Wed Jan 27, 2010 7:36 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Gray
Replies: 7
Views: 291

Re: Gray

hello Ad :)

I really like the thought behind your write.

Powerful imagery, Aru has tightened your lines somewhat, maybe you can do a little tweaking of your words?.the use of the word awareness three times is a bit of a mouthful in so few lines.

All the same I did enjoy

mes x
by mesmie
Wed Jan 27, 2010 7:29 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Gift From Winter
Replies: 11
Views: 331

Re: The Gift From Winter

hello Stephen :)

late in but wanted to add my h'penny worth! It has a certain something about it..Aru beat me to saying which was my one of my favourite lines, nice one sir

mes x
by mesmie
Wed Jan 27, 2010 7:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Paralysis
Replies: 23
Views: 635

Re: Paralysis

:lol: ...ooo this IS a lively board... :lol: