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by Sharra
Wed Feb 17, 2016 9:10 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Father
Replies: 6
Views: 530

Re: The Father

Ahh I read the poem a few times before reading your comment about watching a play. Now it makes sense. I was trying to work out if 'The Father' was the narrator or... and the last stanza made me wonder if it was about someone beginning to decline with dementia or something similar. I think there's s...
by Sharra
Wed Feb 17, 2016 9:00 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Hello everyone :)
Replies: 8
Views: 1213

Re: Hello everyone :)

Other than that there was just the Nobel Peace Prize, breaking the land speed record, becoming accredited as a professional necromancer... nothing big. Professional necromancer? Wow that's an achievement - are you able to make a living from that? ;) I had a look at your blog, I love that Feminine P...
by Sharra
Sun Feb 14, 2016 9:30 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Hello everyone :)
Replies: 8
Views: 1213

Re: Hello everyone :)

Aww it's nice to be remembered :) Whither hast I wandered..... well.... went and did an MA in Creative writing (which was awesome, did lots of poetry translation, but also shattered my writing style lol) and at the moment I'm working to get accredited to facilitate poetry therapy. I'm on a mission t...
by Sharra
Sun Feb 14, 2016 3:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Cloud Life
Replies: 5
Views: 484

Re: Cloud Life

I really liked the writing in this, and the perspective it gives of looking up at the clouds. I think the beginning works really well for me, although ice-white feels a little clichéd and doesn’t feel as good as the rest of the poem. I think my main question comes from the names that are given, it f...
by Sharra
Sun Feb 14, 2016 2:58 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Hello everyone :)
Replies: 8
Views: 1213

Hello everyone :)

Hiya, Ros poked me and said I should come back, and I need some motivation to get writing, so here I am. It's good to see some familiar faces :)
xx
by Sharra
Mon Dec 19, 2011 7:57 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Drug Lunch
Replies: 16
Views: 462

Re: The Drug Lunch

I liked the idea behind this a lot, and you have some great images in here. For me though I found the rhythm a little difficult. I feel you should maybe either go for the regular rhythm more strongly, or reduce it a lot.... at the moment it feels like its not sure what it wants to be.

Nicky
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by Sharra
Mon Jun 27, 2011 9:35 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Apples
Replies: 6
Views: 293

Re: Apples

Thanks for the thoughts on this everyone, I like the idea of making it less explicitly about the people, and will work on that :)
Brian - this is my standard at the moment lol
Nicky
x
by Sharra
Sun Jun 26, 2011 8:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Apples
Replies: 6
Views: 293

Apples

Evening folds around each fruit. I catch the one that falls, feel the curve of its mottled skin. Between breaths I wait for you, remember how your teeth pierced windfalls, remember you pucker-faced at their green unreadiness. When we kissed your lips were tart and tight. My mouth watered at the sour...
by Sharra
Wed May 04, 2011 8:44 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Call for submissions
Replies: 0
Views: 401

Call for submissions

After the great success of the anthology in aid of Children in Need last year (which raised over £3000 so far), I'm helping pull together one in aid of Shelterbox. We had loads of PG people in the Children in Need book, and it would be lovely to have you all in it again. This time we're calling for ...
by Sharra
Tue Apr 19, 2011 10:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: listen
Replies: 5
Views: 288

Re: listen

Thanks for the thoughts guys, I'll look at making it a bit more concrete - it's sposed to be about our inner voice, who we really are, but thats obviously not coming across clearly.
Ncky
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by Sharra
Sun Apr 17, 2011 7:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: One of Six Meanings of True Love
Replies: 3
Views: 232

Re: One of Six Meanings of True Love

Hi Brian What are the other 5? This felt dark and disturbed to me, almost like a black comedy. I liked the language, and enjoyed reading it but it didn’t quite feel like the last 2 stanzas fitted really to me. The ‘fattest’ was ok, as they are gorging… but I’m not sure why the moon is buxom, or why ...
by Sharra
Sat Apr 16, 2011 8:55 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: listen
Replies: 5
Views: 288

listen

listen

as I tell you
it can’t be crushed

into a tiny box, left
on a shelf, forgotten

as it hums with static
let me show you

how it still clings
to your neck, choking

you with loving arms
as it crackles and fizzes

inside your skin,
waiting for its chance

to tell you this
and this and this
by Sharra
Sat Apr 16, 2011 8:20 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Sunset- edit
Replies: 14
Views: 536

Re: Sunset- edit

Suzanne I really enjoyed this, there are some gorgeous images in here and the language flows beautifully. I especially loved ‘orange- / rind peelings of sunshine,’ and I think the other concrete detail is working well too. For me it feels like there is a bit of an interruption before s5, it doesn’t ...
by Sharra
Thu Dec 16, 2010 5:44 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: The New Writer Magazine
Replies: 2
Views: 612

The New Writer Magazine

I've just had 2 poem accepted for The New Writer Magazine - woohoo!
Nicky
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by Sharra
Tue Dec 14, 2010 4:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: alter ego
Replies: 3
Views: 246

Re: alter ego

I’ve found this really hard to crit. It brings up old prose/poetry debate yet again (but let’s not go there). I enjoyed reading this and really like the voice, it’s very believable, and really paints a picture. Although I know this almost stream of consciousness feel is very you, I do think it could...
by Sharra
Tue Dec 14, 2010 3:29 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Slingink Scribbling Slam
Replies: 5
Views: 797

Re: Slingink Scribbling Slam

Congrats - that's brilliant :)
Do we get to read them?
Nicky
x
by Sharra
Tue Dec 14, 2010 3:25 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: *BOO*
Replies: 4
Views: 1108

Re: *BOO*

Hi Shi
Glad you made it here - welcome to PG :)
Nicky
x
by Sharra
Fri Dec 10, 2010 6:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Picture White
Replies: 4
Views: 299

Re: Picture White

Clara, I really enjoyed this. There’s some beautiful language in here. Just a few nits from me… ‘brooding Healthcliff’ feels a little clichéd. You can possibly get away with it but I’m not sure. I’m not sure about S2 – with the grammar at the mo ‘A path; a house, a door and window, its walls are pai...
by Sharra
Sun Dec 05, 2010 8:10 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Leek Soup
Replies: 9
Views: 476

Re: Leek Soup

RL - thanks for the postive comments - it's appreciated.
Delph - those are all really good suggestions, thank you so much for taking the time to give it such a close reading. Again, its appreciated.
Nicky
x
by Sharra
Fri Dec 03, 2010 8:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Leek Soup
Replies: 9
Views: 476

Re: Leek Soup

Thanks for your thoughts guys - this was a sonnet for Uni so wasn't very inspired - one to bin I think :)
by Sharra
Mon Nov 29, 2010 1:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Leek Soup
Replies: 9
Views: 476

Leek Soup

You cradle baby leeks, slide them proudly from muddied arms to tabletop, watch them until they stop rocking. I slit skin, gush cold water over and over them, slice and sauté palm-sized potatoes and carrots – see hard edges soften and curl in the running yellow butter. Now I’m in the same kitchen, wr...
by Sharra
Sun Nov 28, 2010 1:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Onion
Replies: 9
Views: 384

Re: Onion

Hi John
I really like the last 3 stanzas of this - the first one with the onion has me mystified though I'm afraid - it just feels like a random addition. Is there a significance to it that I'm missing?
Nicky
x
by Sharra
Sun Nov 28, 2010 11:57 am
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Sestina Workshop
Replies: 60
Views: 19601

Re: Sestina Workshop

Here's my response to exercise 1: Beached The curl of the wave crashes onto the beach, drags me below the surface, the weight of water forcing me down. I curl myself around, unable to wave for help, collide with the seabed. Thrust legs downward, taste salt. And surface, gasping. This was surprisingl...
by Sharra
Mon Nov 15, 2010 9:18 am
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Sestina Workshop
Replies: 60
Views: 19601

Re: Sestina Workshop

yes, I'll second that - Hip Hip Hooray! :)