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by Leslie
Fri Jul 06, 2018 8:55 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Into The Mist
Replies: 6
Views: 555

Re: Into The Mist

Another detailed analysis appreciated, some of the points contained bringing me to the problem that bothered me when first considering offering the poems on the forum. I started writing again as an outlet for the emotion of losing the company of my wife, already invalid but having to become resident...
by Leslie
Thu Jul 05, 2018 6:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Thin
Replies: 28
Views: 2022

Re: Thin

I like this greatly; so much said in a few words. The interchange of things spoken is clever and effective, the persons can be visualised. In the first statement ' straight edge' seems not to be what is really intended, it usually means something like a ruler and clearly the thing implied is more of...
by Leslie
Thu Jul 05, 2018 6:14 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Into The Mist
Replies: 6
Views: 555

Re: Into The Mist

Churninga, thank you for the detailed critique, good points to think about. First I'll admit to a tendency to the antique, it's due to my considerable age, education and predilections, I may well use an oldfashioned expression without noticing and it still won't register when I read back. As to the ...
by Leslie
Tue Jul 03, 2018 11:06 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Into The Mist
Replies: 6
Views: 555

Into The Mist

Into The Mist It seemed the saga’s ending would not be a kiss or teared embrace - the distance still between the two a clear symbolic space that may not close before THE END. A carefully designed suspense rather than a hammer blow. All through the film with many twists of lies and cruel chance to so...
by Leslie
Thu Jan 30, 2014 7:35 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: Calculated Risk conclusion
Replies: 0
Views: 1209

Calculated Risk conclusion

“Took your advice and sold the burgers-in-a-bun off the stall in the street. Fitted an oil-fired stove and cooked ‘em right there. We did so well a businessman here in town financed us to take on this place and move right into town. Here, sample the goods.” And he handed Benguy a fresh steaming spec...
by Leslie
Wed Jan 29, 2014 7:45 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: Calculated Risk part3
Replies: 0
Views: 1190

Calculated Risk part3

Calculated Risk part3 One who happened to was a professor at a distant University, an admirer of Forthled and an acquaintance of the Director. Visiting Washington some months after the publication, he called on his acquaintance and mentioned that he would like to meet the author. So Wayner was summo...
by Leslie
Tue Jan 28, 2014 7:34 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: calculated Risk part 2
Replies: 0
Views: 1223

calculated Risk part 2

Calculated Risk part 2 They were in pasture land, their only company being some uninterested cows. Quite a way off they saw buildings. Wayner had miscalculated. He had put them on the outskirts of the town as it was in the 1950’s; but Wayhalt had expanded enormously through the construction of facto...
by Leslie
Mon Jan 27, 2014 4:44 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: Calculated Risk Pt1
Replies: 0
Views: 1303

Calculated Risk Pt1

Calculated Risk Part 1 Wayner Bullen turned the page of his desk-pad diary and, still leaning forward in his chair, fixed the new day’s date with a gaze of respect, almost it might be said, of adoration. On this date, two hundred years ago in 1865, Henry Forthled had been born. Probably no one else ...
by Leslie
Sat Jan 31, 2009 7:44 am
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: In Taurant's Case
Replies: 0
Views: 786

In Taurant's Case

IN TAURANT’S CASE Preliminary. Not quite 5 p.m. on a miserable, dark February afternoon. No-one had enjoyed the day; everyone had been out of the office for most of the time, getting cold and getting wet. Now they had somehow managed to be back in, not so much consoling one-another as agreeing what ...
by Leslie
Fri Jan 30, 2009 10:35 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: Khor Fakkan - Childhood Memories
Replies: 3
Views: 1150

Re: Khor Fakkan - Childhood Memories

Funny you should say that! I too have been absent a long time. In my case unfortunate aspects of life and health took over but, unlike yourself, I'm hoping that I'm now emerging from that phase and will find time to think and write again. So nil desperandum. Good wishes and hopes for your future.
by Leslie
Thu Jan 29, 2009 7:52 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: Khor Fakkan - Childhood Memories
Replies: 3
Views: 1150

Re: Khor Fakkan - Childhood Memories

As one who has in the past marked GCSE papers I can say that I would have been very happy to see literacy of this standard. It does show the flaws of youth, as you no doubt recognise yourself. The early sections are overloaded with 'Would' which makes the style repetitious, rather marring the pleasa...
by Leslie
Thu Dec 11, 2008 8:04 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: The Waiter part3
Replies: 1
Views: 937

The Waiter part3

The Waiter part3 She was delightful! Young, good looking. Oh, more than good looking! Amusing and quite clearly genuinely liked him. How had he met her? That question was still puzzling him when he woke up. Opening his eyes and seeing the familiar room confirmed immediately that the experience and t...
by Leslie
Sat Nov 22, 2008 6:33 am
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: The Waiter part2
Replies: 0
Views: 875

The Waiter part2

THE WAITER Part2 He chose a restaurant well away from both’ The Silver Spoon’ and’ The Golden Apple’. So far, the other waiters at The Silver Spoon knew nothing of Michael’s dangerous living and, at least at this stage, he intended to give them no hint. As for ‘The Golden Apple’, he was sure the sta...
by Leslie
Sat Nov 15, 2008 10:16 am
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: THE WAITER
Replies: 2
Views: 1342

Re: THE WAITER

Thanks 'R' (I like the cunning name!) Yes, I've noticed in the past that the Prose dept can be a rather lonely place, so thanks for the observations. A first-person account of something on these lines would be a good method, literally getting inside the character. I don't want to do it in this case;...
by Leslie
Mon Nov 10, 2008 1:49 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: THE WAITER
Replies: 2
Views: 1342

THE WAITER

THE WAITER Part 1. It was the way she handled her cutlery – and Michael considered himself an expert on that subject. He could tell a lot about people from the way they handled their cutlery. When she came into the restaurant Michael had given her the appraisal he usually gave to female clientele, a...
by Leslie
Wed Oct 29, 2008 1:51 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: AS I SAW IT
Replies: 2
Views: 1231

Re: AS I SAW IT

Thanks for comment. Am trying to complete another piece but that handicap called work is getting in the way.
Please note that the odd bit at the bottom of that page ( abouth the unpleasantness within) is not of my manufacture and certainly undesirable.
by Leslie
Wed Oct 22, 2008 6:29 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: WALL
Replies: 1
Views: 131

WALL

WALL with DOORS Wall. Cloud-coloured grey, long, lays the horizon of my view; what lies beyond beyond my knowing. I keep a curious distance. Two glacial portals penetrate this uninforming barrier; behind the doors seems to be dark, where I stand is light of day, the difference makes their windows mi...
by Leslie
Sat Oct 18, 2008 10:40 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: A brush with silence(some adult content)
Replies: 2
Views: 1346

Re: A brush with silence(some adult content)

Certainly not complte crap. Worth tidying up etc? Very much worth doing. I was taken at once by the expression 'tasting the salt within her memories', very clever. Loved the thought of trying to match the characters with their umbrellas. There are more of these quirky observations of quality. I thin...
by Leslie
Sat Oct 18, 2008 9:41 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: The blue lotus
Replies: 3
Views: 2689

Re: The blue lotus

I very much enjoyed this, both as a literary piece and as a small insight into another's culture. I liked the atmosphere of activity, excitement and bustle in the opening and the revealing of the identity of Shiuli around whom the episode develops. As a 'westerner' I could make comparisons with a fa...
by Leslie
Sat Oct 18, 2008 2:24 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: AS I SAW IT
Replies: 2
Views: 1231

AS I SAW IT

AS I SAW IT When she called me in for lunch I told her I thought it was because the wood was old. She didn’t show a lot of interest, but she never does, not my wife, not in my hobbies. “I think the wood has grown hard with age,” I said to her. “Not like you then,” she answered dishing up potatoes. I...
by Leslie
Sun Mar 18, 2007 10:06 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Environmental
Replies: 7
Views: 861

Poat subject

Just off for a few days away - will think about your suggestions, Dave.
Thanks, Leslie.
by Leslie
Fri Mar 16, 2007 4:40 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Environmental
Replies: 7
Views: 861

Post Poem

Thanks friends for comments, all appreciated. Samaritan, thank you for taking the trouble to read, analyse and criticise, your comments are respected, though I prefer the original version of the lines discussed. The difference seems to depend on the interpretation of the word ‘concerned’; my intenti...
by Leslie
Mon Mar 12, 2007 3:51 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Environmental
Replies: 7
Views: 861

Environmental

ENVIRONMENTAL I worry about the environment, as I should – shouldn’t we all? Not so much for myself, not now, not at my age, you understand, but I read all the stuff the papers print and watch all the scares on the television, how we destroy the atmosphere, expose ourselves to deadly rays, turn gree...
by Leslie
Fri Jan 19, 2007 4:10 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: Posted prose
Replies: 5
Views: 1585

Post

Thanks for comments, they've been thin on the ground lately! You are right about the sentence that doesn't fit, of course it should have followed on directly from the bit about the heart not beating, but I messed it up by putting in 'so I should qualify'. The title? The 'observer' hoped to surprise ...
by Leslie
Sun Jan 14, 2007 6:27 pm
Forum: Post Some Prose
Topic: Posted prose
Replies: 5
Views: 1585

Posted prose

BODY OF EVIDENCE I feel like one of those helium-filled balloons, where somebody at a party has let go of the string and I’ve floated up until I’m resting on the ceiling. Some party! That’s me down there. I’m not sure how I know, but I do know. That’s me they’re working on, me with my chest split op...